Pohutukawas
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Comment from Andrewajgblue
This is a beautiful poem that you have dedicated to this special tree, it had excellent rhyme and it flowed really nicely , I loved the last two lines , well done thank you
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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This is a beautiful poem that you have dedicated to this special tree, it had excellent rhyme and it flowed really nicely , I loved the last two lines , well done thank you
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from nancy_e_davis
A very nice sonnet with an interesting subject.
Well written in iambic Pentameter. Lovely picture as well. Good luck in the contest. Nancy
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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A very nice sonnet with an interesting subject.
Well written in iambic Pentameter. Lovely picture as well. Good luck in the contest. Nancy
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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Thanks, Nancy.
Picked up a third place in the contest.
Steve
Comment from skye
New information is always welcome, and learning of this beauty is amazing.
Your sonnet flows smoothly. Your use of words such as naught, grotesque, bluster, scarlet, and sentries all make it solid and interesting.
Excellent.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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New information is always welcome, and learning of this beauty is amazing.
Your sonnet flows smoothly. Your use of words such as naught, grotesque, bluster, scarlet, and sentries all make it solid and interesting.
Excellent.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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Thanks, Skye!
Steve
Comment from juliaSjames
Your lovely sonnet is an exquisite ode to the pohutukawas tree. Your end rhymes are a delight, your meter satisfies, and the elegant enjambment piques interest.
Excellent alliteration that isn't forced or top heavy.
Somehow, this write brings to mind those whom Fanon categorized as Les Damnes de la Terre in his epic write on the issue of colonialism. People whose souls are undaunted by extreme poverty.
"grotesque their arms that reach out to the sky
in supplication for relief from toil."
I wish you well in the contest with this magnificent entry.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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Your lovely sonnet is an exquisite ode to the pohutukawas tree. Your end rhymes are a delight, your meter satisfies, and the elegant enjambment piques interest.
Excellent alliteration that isn't forced or top heavy.
Somehow, this write brings to mind those whom Fanon categorized as Les Damnes de la Terre in his epic write on the issue of colonialism. People whose souls are undaunted by extreme poverty.
"grotesque their arms that reach out to the sky
in supplication for relief from toil."
I wish you well in the contest with this magnificent entry.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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Thanks, Julia
I don't know Fanon, despite reading quite a few French authors back in the day...
Third place seems to be my lot with this...
Steve
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I just saw the results. Congrats! Haven't read the other entries yet.
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I've read them now, and I still think that your write is outstanding both in theme and masterful execution. Perhaps the judges don't care for reverse syntax even when there's nothing forced about it.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
their tangled roots that mine the miser soil;
What a wonderful line that is! These are gorrrrgeous plants and you're so lucky to have them. New Zealand is such a lovely place, I've often wished I lived there. What's the govt like? Oppressive or freedom-loving?
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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their tangled roots that mine the miser soil;
What a wonderful line that is! These are gorrrrgeous plants and you're so lucky to have them. New Zealand is such a lovely place, I've often wished I lived there. What's the govt like? Oppressive or freedom-loving?
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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Thanks, Phyllis.
Most people would say our government is somewhere in the middle of those two extremes. National (conservatives) in power at the moment and likely to remain there despite an election in September. Labour struggling to find strong leadership lately may sneak in if they bond with the Greens who are largest of the small parties and growing...
Not too much to choose between them.
It is a nice place to live depending on what you're looking for - easy to find lovely country or seaside places ...
Steve
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Thanks for the info. Sounds better than the commies we have in charge here at the moment.
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You have a Communist government in Illinois?
Steve
Comment from Visheshta Dahiya
nice poem..!!!
the words are brilliant and very well used.
the rhyming words are superb. the theme is beautiful.
nice picture.
best wishes
Visheshta
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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nice poem..!!!
the words are brilliant and very well used.
the rhyming words are superb. the theme is beautiful.
nice picture.
best wishes
Visheshta
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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Visheshta, thanks for the kind words.
Steve
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welcome :)
Comment from Adri7enne
Must be awesome to see a whole stretch of these beautiful blooming trees. I wasn't aware of their existence.
I enjoyed the rhymes and the poems scans really well. Great enjambments.
"They cling to rocky outcrops, anchored by
their tangled roots that mine the miser soil;"
Good luck in the contest, k.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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Must be awesome to see a whole stretch of these beautiful blooming trees. I wasn't aware of their existence.
I enjoyed the rhymes and the poems scans really well. Great enjambments.
"They cling to rocky outcrops, anchored by
their tangled roots that mine the miser soil;"
Good luck in the contest, k.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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Thank you!
Managed to pick up a third place...
Steve
Comment from donaldww
Excellent tribute to the trees that line the shores of New Zealand, and a unique title.
I like the idea that trees ask for nothing but provide beauty for free.
Good luck in the contest!
Cheers,
DW
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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Excellent tribute to the trees that line the shores of New Zealand, and a unique title.
I like the idea that trees ask for nothing but provide beauty for free.
Good luck in the contest!
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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Thank you!
Managed to pick up a third place.
Steve
Comment from Domino 2
This is a fabulous sonnet, Steve, on a very original and effective theme. It's well worthy of a sixer, but I'm out on Saturday.
Terrific personification of this wonderful tree and its struggle to survive in the 'miser soil'.
Top imagery of the beautiful tree and its ocean surroundings.
Perfect iambic pentameter and rhymes.
Cheers, Ted
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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This is a fabulous sonnet, Steve, on a very original and effective theme. It's well worthy of a sixer, but I'm out on Saturday.
Terrific personification of this wonderful tree and its struggle to survive in the 'miser soil'.
Top imagery of the beautiful tree and its ocean surroundings.
Perfect iambic pentameter and rhymes.
Cheers, Ted
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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Ted, thanks for the thoughtful review and the virtual six. It seems to be my fate to post at the end of the week when the six barrel is running on empty.
Steve
Comment from royowen
A beautiful sonnet and a fine tribute to part of God's amazing and beloved creation! The narrative was vividly expressive in its natural exaltation. The rhyme scheme was good and the rhythm was even and tight! This should do well. Blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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A beautiful sonnet and a fine tribute to part of God's amazing and beloved creation! The narrative was vividly expressive in its natural exaltation. The rhyme scheme was good and the rhythm was even and tight! This should do well. Blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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Thanks, Roy.
I managed to pick up a third placing for this.
Steve
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I am really pleased! It makes both us look good! Blessings, Roy.
