Sweet Brown-eyed Susan
whimsical quatrains96 total reviews
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Brooke....I have some of these flowers in my garden...well if they survive the storm that is headed our way...AGAIN! You wrote this so well....I love the rhyme and the whimsy of the words. Excellent....blessings....chey
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Hi Brooke....I have some of these flowers in my garden...well if they survive the storm that is headed our way...AGAIN! You wrote this so well....I love the rhyme and the whimsy of the words. Excellent....blessings....chey
Comment Written 16-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Chey, thank you - we are actually enjoying a sunny day today after two days of pouring rain - please tell me you're not talking about a snow storm!! Brooke
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Yup...the weather man says 8 to 10 inches! Casper, which is to the north of us got 35 inches out of this little squall....It is now official I hate winter....(sob)
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My condolences - I was actually just looking at the weather forecast online for wyoming - it is like 31 degrees with freezing rain - my dear, I cannot begin to tell you how much my heart is breaking for you!!!
Comment from Nanny 6
Hello Brooke, your poem about brown eyed Susans was a refreshing, bright smile. Was fun to read and rhyme, a great start back into the groove on FS. The picture compliments your poem. A breath of sunshine. : ) Judy
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Hello Brooke, your poem about brown eyed Susans was a refreshing, bright smile. Was fun to read and rhyme, a great start back into the groove on FS. The picture compliments your poem. A breath of sunshine. : ) Judy
Comment Written 16-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Judy, thank you - this one was for no reason other than to have fun!! :-) Brooke
Comment from chaswriter
adewpearl - I dated a girl way back when whom I called brown-eyed Susan. I don't remember her winking at me but she did beguile me. Your poem reminded me of her. I enjoyed it. Charlie
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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adewpearl - I dated a girl way back when whom I called brown-eyed Susan. I don't remember her winking at me but she did beguile me. Your poem reminded me of her. I enjoyed it. Charlie
Comment Written 16-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Charlie, I bet she winked ;-) Glad to remind you of a beguiling lassie from your past - and since you've been married 38 years, we're really talking PAST!!! LOL Thanks, Brooke
Comment from LauraKatherine
I like your description of the flirtation between the flower and the narrator. Good personification of Brown-eyed Susan. (I especially liked these words for how they described her and her flirtatiousness: winked, beguiled, wild, bewitching.)
I also enjoyed the phrase "lemon yellow sea." Very powerful image.
Good rhymes: sea/me, shy/eye, power/flower. It is interesting to note how a flower can have power through its beauty. I also liked the shy/eye rhyme, because shy people often can't meet someone's eyes. I suppose that it is because eye contact can open one person's inner being to the other person, invoking feelings and passion (here, at least.)
Enjoyable poem. I like reading your poems about nature because they remind me to observe the world around me and not stare at the computer screen all day!
Laura
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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I like your description of the flirtation between the flower and the narrator. Good personification of Brown-eyed Susan. (I especially liked these words for how they described her and her flirtatiousness: winked, beguiled, wild, bewitching.)
I also enjoyed the phrase "lemon yellow sea." Very powerful image.
Good rhymes: sea/me, shy/eye, power/flower. It is interesting to note how a flower can have power through its beauty. I also liked the shy/eye rhyme, because shy people often can't meet someone's eyes. I suppose that it is because eye contact can open one person's inner being to the other person, invoking feelings and passion (here, at least.)
Enjoyable poem. I like reading your poems about nature because they remind me to observe the world around me and not stare at the computer screen all day!
Laura
Comment Written 16-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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yes, there is not much charm in the computer screen, is there?
Writers must experience the world lest they run out of things to write about! Thanks so much, Brooke
Comment from perunest
I am so glad these terrific flowers are easily
propagated by the elements and birds, for my thumb
is no shade of green. Your poem perfectly describes
the golden, happy, flirtatious personality of these
sunny gems. I happily watch them multiply! Carolyn
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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I am so glad these terrific flowers are easily
propagated by the elements and birds, for my thumb
is no shade of green. Your poem perfectly describes
the golden, happy, flirtatious personality of these
sunny gems. I happily watch them multiply! Carolyn
Comment Written 16-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Carolyn, that's one of the reasons I love wildflowers so much - no talent needed on my part, no money spent, no hard work - all the enjoyment with none of the fuss and bother! :-D It's one of those things that defies the no pain/no gain saying. Thanks, Brooke
Comment from RADIO
Whimsical wanderings from the
creative heart of a very
talented poet. You breathe life
into brown eyes Susan. This is
another fine story that proves
your creativity with themes and words.
Radio
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Whimsical wanderings from the
creative heart of a very
talented poet. You breathe life
into brown eyes Susan. This is
another fine story that proves
your creativity with themes and words.
Radio
Comment Written 16-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Radio, thank you - I truly appreciate your kindness. Brooke
Comment from Fat man Says
Truly a great poem and a very enjoyable read...Plus your artwork made a perfect match...You really deserve to be the
leader of our pack...Bob
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Truly a great poem and a very enjoyable read...Plus your artwork made a perfect match...You really deserve to be the
leader of our pack...Bob
Comment Written 16-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Bob, what a sweet thing to say - thank you! Brooke
Comment from jakuper
Very pleasant poem. Beautiful words, good rhyming. The tempo is tunning the same all the time.
the picture and colours of the writing are so matching and so beautiful, that I return once in a while just to glance on them.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Very pleasant poem. Beautiful words, good rhyming. The tempo is tunning the same all the time.
the picture and colours of the writing are so matching and so beautiful, that I return once in a while just to glance on them.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Thank you, my friend, Brooke :-)
Comment from tteach
"its blossom winked at me"
I loved the personification of the flower! Absolutely brilliant. The poem is a gem...every line is necessary to tell the story.
well done
terry
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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"its blossom winked at me"
I loved the personification of the flower! Absolutely brilliant. The poem is a gem...every line is necessary to tell the story.
well done
terry
Comment Written 16-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Terry, thank you - you are most generous and gracious, my friend, and I so appreciate it!!! You've left me smiling, Brooke
Comment from jadedgemini2
Very cute, and you're right, whimsical. You've put a sort of twist on it, as if the flower were a lover (or the like) and then turned it back to a flower. The way you addressed it as such was wonderful. I must say, this was a nice little start to my early morning escapades:)
Great job!!
Jaded:)
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Very cute, and you're right, whimsical. You've put a sort of twist on it, as if the flower were a lover (or the like) and then turned it back to a flower. The way you addressed it as such was wonderful. I must say, this was a nice little start to my early morning escapades:)
Great job!!
Jaded:)
Comment Written 16-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Jaded, thank you for your lovely thoughts on my little piece of fluffy fun. Brooke :-)