O My God and Mother Nature!
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Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Pride goeth before a fall. There are many mysteries in this life, but your advice is wise and in your poetry you have a venue for important messages. Giddy
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Pride goeth before a fall. There are many mysteries in this life, but your advice is wise and in your poetry you have a venue for important messages. Giddy
Comment Written 23-Mar-2013
Comment from Gungalo
Have God faith; be blest.
Pass His tests, serve man selfless.
Earn status per work,
Live in free infinite gifts
Feel pride; He too breathes same air.
You are thinking way ahead of your time Al and it shows. WOnderful write to depict a wonderful working atmosphere.
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Have God faith; be blest.
Pass His tests, serve man selfless.
Earn status per work,
Live in free infinite gifts
Feel pride; He too breathes same air.
You are thinking way ahead of your time Al and it shows. WOnderful write to depict a wonderful working atmosphere.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2013
Comment from MidnightWriter4U
This wonderful work reminds me of how blessed I really am with each breath that I take. He is the breath of life. Very good artwork choice for this poem. Enjoyed!
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This wonderful work reminds me of how blessed I really am with each breath that I take. He is the breath of life. Very good artwork choice for this poem. Enjoyed!
Comment Written 22-Mar-2013
Comment from sunnilicious
The first three words are awkward. Besides that, the spirituality came through just fine. You followed the syllable count requirement for tanka and you're on the mark. Great.
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The first three words are awkward. Besides that, the spirituality came through just fine. You followed the syllable count requirement for tanka and you're on the mark. Great.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2013
Comment from LaDonnaCole
Have God faith; be blest.
Pass His tests, serve man selfless.
Earn status per work,
Live in free infinite gifts
Feel pride; He too breathes same air.
God faith...interesting way of saying it.
The first two lines are great.
The last three don't seem to go with the first two. Who breathes the same air? Confusing.
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Have God faith; be blest.
Pass His tests, serve man selfless.
Earn status per work,
Live in free infinite gifts
Feel pride; He too breathes same air.
God faith...interesting way of saying it.
The first two lines are great.
The last three don't seem to go with the first two. Who breathes the same air? Confusing.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2013
Comment from Michael Wayne
This is well written and stands well alone. It seems to be a bit of a stretch from the overall theme of the book, in that there is nothing here blending nature with God. I know they are meant to stand apart from each other but I think they should remain consistent in theme.
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This is well written and stands well alone. It seems to be a bit of a stretch from the overall theme of the book, in that there is nothing here blending nature with God. I know they are meant to stand apart from each other but I think they should remain consistent in theme.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2013
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
How true this is. Especially the part about infinite gifts I have found. I was in an accident 9 years ago and disabled and poor. I found out how little I needed to live and how many gifts I truly had. Great write~Debbie
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How true this is. Especially the part about infinite gifts I have found. I was in an accident 9 years ago and disabled and poor. I found out how little I needed to live and how many gifts I truly had. Great write~Debbie
Comment Written 22-Mar-2013
Comment from angelmagnet
Unless the one of who you speak is the air. Our need is as close as the breath we take. Your lines relay that message with style.
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Unless the one of who you speak is the air. Our need is as close as the breath we take. Your lines relay that message with style.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2013
Comment from TonyD
Nicely written but somewhat confusing. I guess the problem is a matter of religious philosophy.
"Earn status per work" and
"Live in free infinite gifts" seems to be contradictory.
Tony
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Nicely written but somewhat confusing. I guess the problem is a matter of religious philosophy.
"Earn status per work" and
"Live in free infinite gifts" seems to be contradictory.
Tony
Comment Written 22-Mar-2013
Comment from SPOLIN
The poem seems to rely on cliche spiritual phrasing and leaves out words to tie meaning.I do not get any emotion from the work.
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The poem seems to rely on cliche spiritual phrasing and leaves out words to tie meaning.I do not get any emotion from the work.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2013
