Comment from DR DIP

Excellent

quaint ,perfect AABB rhyme no proximate or ABCB rhyme..... pleasantly surprised lol
this childrens poem book will need culling soon and finalised! so many to put in it do it as a picture poem bokk obviously set it out in "indesign" which allows you to move the text or change the font at will do it as a PDF file on a 16 gig flash stick take it to a printer and bobs your uncle and save losing 90 percent of your profit

xxdip

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014

indesign, thanks for the tip - I will have to look into it - I assume you've used it yourself? Thanks so much, Dip :-) Brooke

reply by DR DIP on 20-Jun-2014

you always learn from your mistakes when you self publish I actually set mine out in photoshop but that did not allow for my text to be flexible to be repositioned on the image and indesign would have solved this and the programmme, once you have used it is easier. self publishing isn't rocket science and the publishing companies want 90% of your cut meaning you only get 10 %
once you have masterd the set up settig it up for the printers as a PDF file is a walk in the park..think of how many $52 subscriptions for fanstory youi could save by self publishing? lol

reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014

I have made great friends at fan story. You don't get that side benefit from publishing. I see them as complementary activities :-)

Comment from Jackarrie

Excellent

Hi Brooke, this is such a cute poem, a lovely colorful insect to see in our gardens. Kids love them, my grandchildren painted stones to look like them. You have a talent for writing these great poems.

Well done.
Mary

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014

Mary, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is cute, brooke, i enjoyed reading this quatern poem about the ladybug who had as many spots as she did dots and all of them were specila. this made me smile as i read it

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014

sweetwoodjax, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from mfowler

Excellent

You must have used all of the good 'ots' endings in making your poem about spots and dots. It's wonderfully inventive in the use of wordplay, imagination and imagery of the natural world. Another rhythmically satisfying poem from your file of wonderful ideas, Brooke.

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014

mfowler, thanks so much :-) Brooke

Comment from CALLAHANMR

Excellent

Hi Brooke:)
I never cease to be amazed at the way you can contruct a nifty poem from everyday objects like a ladybug. I can't rememer a time in my life when I didn't know the name of this colorful insect, but I never thought of rhyming the dots of hershell with the spots that she visited.

This is a nice children's poem with repeating line that provide a pleasant cadence. Love and Irish Hugs for one more pleasure.

Roger

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014

Thanks so much, Roger - there are not many good "ot" rhymes LOL
Brooke

Comment from Aussie

Excellent

Your writing has changed and your real talent is starting to show in leaps and bounds. I loved your bugger of a poem - ladybugs are great in the garden, they eat aphids that destroy plants. By the time I had finished reading your lovely quatrains I was feeling dotty! Well done Mrs Bug. Wish I had six stars for you - I don't, and so - ****** six virtual stars will have to do.

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014

thank you so much, Kay - I'm happy to make you feel dotty any old time. LOL Brooke

Comment from Sueswrite

Excellent

What an enchanting tale of this beautiful little mystifying creature. All children become captivated by this tiny spotted bug at least once growing up. I love your style of writing and I really love how it is not written in a baby sense. The wording is a bit challenging for a young child, but that's great. This is a great poem. Best of luck!

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014

Sueswrite, thank you so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke

Comment from CR Delport

Excellent

I love ladybugs. Some people say if one lands on you it is a sign of good luck. Out on our small holding, there are lots of them. This is very well written.

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014

CR, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

Here we have an insect personified by her name, and by the very adventurous nature described in your delightful poem, but lest we forget - it's a BUG. (LOL) Remember, we had this conversation before - I was told they BITE. LOL. I'VE never been bitten by this cute insect, and I used to play with them when I was a kid...but then, it's poems like this one that made me feel it was safe enough, I guess...

As always, such a joy to read - "this ladybug of several dots"! :)))

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014

Thanks so much, Dawn - I only write about the nice, non-biting lady bugs whose mothers have raised them right. LOL Brooke :-)

Comment from lancellot

Excellent

This is a fun little poem, another good entry into the childrens book I kknow you saving most of these good natured works for. It was a nice tale aftrer I finished reading a novel with giant insects. well done

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014

lancellot, thank you so much :-) Brooke