A Semi-Colonoscopy
Poem written by Feral from Malanda and davisr. A bit of fun60 total reviews
Comment from boxergirl
Ha! Ha! Great job, Rhonda and Fez, with your collaborated poem about the semi-colonoscopy.
I was thinking as I read it this has a Fez feel to it and then i read your author notes. Loved the humor in it. 8-)
reply by the author on 07-May-2015
Ha! Ha! Great job, Rhonda and Fez, with your collaborated poem about the semi-colonoscopy.
I was thinking as I read it this has a Fez feel to it and then i read your author notes. Loved the humor in it. 8-)
Comment Written 07-May-2015
reply by the author on 07-May-2015
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It was hugely Fez, I assure you, and I am honored to be a part of his creative world! Thanks for the review,
Rhonda
Comment from Chris Tee
This is an absolutely charming effort by you and Feral and I enjoyed the read, Well done with this excellent work you and Feral did here.
reply by the author on 07-May-2015
This is an absolutely charming effort by you and Feral and I enjoyed the read, Well done with this excellent work you and Feral did here.
Comment Written 07-May-2015
reply by the author on 07-May-2015
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Thanks so much for the review. I enjoyed working with the creative genius that is Fez.
Rhonda
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hey, Fez....
Well this was a 'semi-colonoscopy' hoot, my friend! (*<*) What a fun read. Super artwork too.
Love the stanza where you hold your poem and tears fall. Good work. If I had a sixer----it'd be yours.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
reply by the author on 07-May-2015
Hey, Fez....
Well this was a 'semi-colonoscopy' hoot, my friend! (*<*) What a fun read. Super artwork too.
Love the stanza where you hold your poem and tears fall. Good work. If I had a sixer----it'd be yours.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
Comment Written 07-May-2015
reply by the author on 07-May-2015
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Thanks so much, Jax. It was fun writing with Fez. He's quite inspiring, and I'm sure when he reads this comment, he will be happy with your response, but, then, that would be speaking for him.
Thanks
Rhonda
Comment from MelB
Love it! This is so clever Fez and Rhonda. Great rhyme and flow. Very creative and fun. I recognized the "flippin" as a Fez term! I enjoyed this very much.
reply by the author on 07-May-2015
Love it! This is so clever Fez and Rhonda. Great rhyme and flow. Very creative and fun. I recognized the "flippin" as a Fez term! I enjoyed this very much.
Comment Written 07-May-2015
reply by the author on 07-May-2015
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What an exciting review, and so generous. Love those 6 stars, thanks so much!!!!
It's fun working with Fez on this project. He's great, friendly and creative.
Thanks,
Rhonda
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You're welcome. Well deserved!
Comment from I am Cat
LOL... so much fun! You know you're old when....
(I was afraid I was actually going to read a poem about a colonoscopy) LOL
and I was wondering why I had to have a whole one and you got a semi one! LOL
I really enjoyed this poem and found myself giggling in a few places. lol
I did notice a couple of things... I wondered why you didn't use punctuation for dialogue?
and on the 9th stanza, the fourth line... the word correct... I believe should have been the adverb "correctly"... to describe how we "do" it. :/
but that's all... and certainly open to debate. lol
All in all, I thought it was lots of fun and hell, I have no idea what to do with a colon... but I know I don't enjoy colonoscopies! LOL
well done!
Cat
reply by the author on 06-May-2015
LOL... so much fun! You know you're old when....
(I was afraid I was actually going to read a poem about a colonoscopy) LOL
and I was wondering why I had to have a whole one and you got a semi one! LOL
I really enjoyed this poem and found myself giggling in a few places. lol
I did notice a couple of things... I wondered why you didn't use punctuation for dialogue?
and on the 9th stanza, the fourth line... the word correct... I believe should have been the adverb "correctly"... to describe how we "do" it. :/
but that's all... and certainly open to debate. lol
All in all, I thought it was lots of fun and hell, I have no idea what to do with a colon... but I know I don't enjoy colonoscopies! LOL
well done!
Cat
Comment Written 06-May-2015
reply by the author on 06-May-2015
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Thank you for the review, Cat. Your review was as funny as the poem! The poem was a bit too close like the real medical procedure.
I'm guessing Feral went with, "poetic license" for not using the quotations, or was still messing with people about grammar in general. I just followed his style (as best as I could, anyway)
I am so glad you enjoyed the poem, I had fun!
Rhonda
Comment from bob cullen
I think the English Doctor dude billed you way too much
I believe he saw you as a very easy touch
So I'd suggest you tell him exactly where to place
His views on semi-colons 'bout three feet from his face
Great to see a combo uniting is poetry
Sounds like Rambo and Mary Poppins in harmony
It really was a good write, creative and funny
Would you care to check my Semi-Colonoscopy
Hope you received a nice refund
From the Government and Medicare
And all your pain's now over
And your body's now in repair
So just think on the bright side
No one will ever see your scar
Just ensure you take your medicine
It's available from any bar
reply by the author on 06-May-2015
I think the English Doctor dude billed you way too much
I believe he saw you as a very easy touch
So I'd suggest you tell him exactly where to place
His views on semi-colons 'bout three feet from his face
Great to see a combo uniting is poetry
Sounds like Rambo and Mary Poppins in harmony
It really was a good write, creative and funny
Would you care to check my Semi-Colonoscopy
Hope you received a nice refund
From the Government and Medicare
And all your pain's now over
And your body's now in repair
So just think on the bright side
No one will ever see your scar
Just ensure you take your medicine
It's available from any bar
Comment Written 06-May-2015
reply by the author on 06-May-2015
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That is so funny, Bob. Rambo and Mary Poppins - that is too cute.
We had a lot of fun with it, though I will have to admit, the name was invented by my humble and talented friend!
Thanks for the nice review.
Rhonda
Comment from Zinnia48
What a delightful sense of humor you have! AND you expressed it with rhythm and rhyme. We all have doubts about our writing, but you found a really fun way to express it! Thanks! Caroline
reply by the author on 06-May-2015
What a delightful sense of humor you have! AND you expressed it with rhythm and rhyme. We all have doubts about our writing, but you found a really fun way to express it! Thanks! Caroline
Comment Written 06-May-2015
reply by the author on 06-May-2015
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You can thank Feral for the great sense of humor and the idea, I just tried to follow in his footsteps,
Rhonda
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
So funny! What a great play on words. I really enjoyed your poem. The flow is great. Good job with the rhyme, too. I like the repeated line, or parts of, about the semi-colonoscopy. It adds to the flow.
Interesting collaboration. Worked well.
I see no changes. Good job and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-May-2015
So funny! What a great play on words. I really enjoyed your poem. The flow is great. Good job with the rhyme, too. I like the repeated line, or parts of, about the semi-colonoscopy. It adds to the flow.
Interesting collaboration. Worked well.
I see no changes. Good job and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 06-May-2015
reply by the author on 06-May-2015
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Thanks so much for the great review! I know I had fun with my part of the poem, and Feral is so talented that I am honored to be a part of his team!
Rhonda
Comment from abbasjoy
What great collaboration, and who would have thought a Semi- Colonoscopy would create such distress. Loved the pun on words. This was well done and flowed so smoothly that without being told, I'm sure no one would have guessed it wasn't one person's writing.
Wish I had a six, but so sorry, only a five this time around.
reply by the author on 06-May-2015
What great collaboration, and who would have thought a Semi- Colonoscopy would create such distress. Loved the pun on words. This was well done and flowed so smoothly that without being told, I'm sure no one would have guessed it wasn't one person's writing.
Wish I had a six, but so sorry, only a five this time around.
Comment Written 06-May-2015
reply by the author on 06-May-2015
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Thank you so much, what a sweet review, and to say that my part flowed well with Feral's is a great compliment! I stand in awe of his humorous and informative epic poems! The "Semi-Colonoscopy" was a word he coined,
Again thanks,
Rhonda
Comment from Pantygynt
There are two schools of thought on this some come out in a rash
Of dots and commas littered everwhere. That makes it look so brash;
They need to be expunged, removed and no morer will we see
Those dratted dotted commas with a semicolonectomy!
Sorry, couldn't resist it. Sometimes the doctors get it wrong!
reply by the author on 06-May-2015
There are two schools of thought on this some come out in a rash
Of dots and commas littered everwhere. That makes it look so brash;
They need to be expunged, removed and no morer will we see
Those dratted dotted commas with a semicolonectomy!
Sorry, couldn't resist it. Sometimes the doctors get it wrong!
Comment Written 06-May-2015
reply by the author on 06-May-2015
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Great addition to the poem, my friend! We could have made it a team of three!
Thanks for the review,
Rhonda