Sins of the Father
A Horror Sonnet Contest Entry88 total reviews
Comment from jlsavell
Hi Dean Kuch,
You know I use to write dark but now I think you have taken over. I am not an expert on Sonnets so therefore I cannot comment on the perfection of form, but I can comment on what I like. Excellent rhythm and cadence to dark.. kudos to you... jlsavell
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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Hi Dean Kuch,
You know I use to write dark but now I think you have taken over. I am not an expert on Sonnets so therefore I cannot comment on the perfection of form, but I can comment on what I like. Excellent rhythm and cadence to dark.. kudos to you... jlsavell
Comment Written 25-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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Thanks so much for your encouragement, jlsavell. It is sincerely appreciated, my friend. ~Dean
Comment from kiwijenny
Yes I think there are generational sins...and usually or especially when alcohol or drugs is involved...it puts fire under the horror magnifying it
Well penned horror sonnet
I liked the notes too dog gone it
God bless
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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Yes I think there are generational sins...and usually or especially when alcohol or drugs is involved...it puts fire under the horror magnifying it
Well penned horror sonnet
I liked the notes too dog gone it
God bless
Comment Written 25-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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God bless you too, Jenny, and thank you very much for your thoughtful comments.
Comment from boxergirl
I have seen many children suffering for the sins of their fathers (and mothers). I dont think God punishes innocent children. I just think that it is a vicious cycle of learned behavior and therefore it continues generation to generation.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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I have seen many children suffering for the sins of their fathers (and mothers). I dont think God punishes innocent children. I just think that it is a vicious cycle of learned behavior and therefore it continues generation to generation.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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You are right, of course boxergirl. Thanks so much for the review.
~Dean
Comment from Domino 2
I definitely believe the traits you describe in your notes are hereditary, Deano...plus environment and current relationships, apart from parents, also has an input of course.
To be completely honest, and with the upmost respect, I found this a very jumpy mostly un-metered read, but it still held my attention and was entertaining.
Sorry to be so grumpy lately. :-)
Best wishes, Ray
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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I definitely believe the traits you describe in your notes are hereditary, Deano...plus environment and current relationships, apart from parents, also has an input of course.
To be completely honest, and with the upmost respect, I found this a very jumpy mostly un-metered read, but it still held my attention and was entertaining.
Sorry to be so grumpy lately. :-)
Best wishes, Ray
Comment Written 25-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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Thanks, Ray, and I'm working on that part, LOL.
You know me...
~Dean
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LOL, Deano. I'm close to giving up on you with regards to meter. :-)
Cheers, mate. Ray.
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I'm taking Brooke's class, so don't give up on me yet. I know I'm not going to simply because I refuse to allow anything to get the best of me. :)
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Friggin hell - I gave you loads of FREE lessons, but I take my hat off to you.
You should learn a lot from Brooke, as I taught HER to write in meter when she first joined - though she'd NEVER admit it. LOL.
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Well, I'd much rather take classes from you, Ray, but you don't offer classes. I think you'd be really strict and come down hard when I screwed up, but that's how I learn best. It makes me try harder.
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I have to be shown, line by line. I have to be told why it's a Dum-da-Dum-da beat, instead of da-Dum, da-Dum. I don't understanded stresses at all, and therein lies my problem.
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I'm far too modest to admit my brilliance by offering classes, Deano. Haha!
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Hahahahaha! You're right, Ray. heh-heh-heh...:D
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I did offer line by line analysis in the past, but obviously I wasn't hitting on the right wavelengths, and maybe Brooke will.
Best of luck with it, Deano.
Don't forget to tell Brooke how much you admire MY meter - that's sure to wind her up. Haha!
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I will, Ray, you can count on it. :)
Comment from Acquired Taste
Unfortunately, sons are not the only heads upon which these sins fall. Physical, brutal attacks will often take less future toll than the mental abuse that children suffer each and every day, with each and every word and each and every loathing stare from a parent or parents. Those words never leave and take lifetimes to overcome - if ever.
This is terribly scary because it is true. I wonder why our Lord allows these sins to contaminate the souls of ensuing generations. Those originally responsible now reside in hell and I believe the devil allows them to look up and laugh at the pain and angst they continue to inflict on the innocent of spirits. Sometimes - it feels like the game is rigged.
Beautifully written. Jean
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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Unfortunately, sons are not the only heads upon which these sins fall. Physical, brutal attacks will often take less future toll than the mental abuse that children suffer each and every day, with each and every word and each and every loathing stare from a parent or parents. Those words never leave and take lifetimes to overcome - if ever.
This is terribly scary because it is true. I wonder why our Lord allows these sins to contaminate the souls of ensuing generations. Those originally responsible now reside in hell and I believe the devil allows them to look up and laugh at the pain and angst they continue to inflict on the innocent of spirits. Sometimes - it feels like the game is rigged.
Beautifully written. Jean
Comment Written 25-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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It does feel rigged at times, doesn't it, Jean? But as believers, we have to have faith, even if it is no larger than that of a mustard seed, to know that God will eventually work everything out for our good.
I truly appreciate the six stars as well as you sharing your personal thoughts and feelings with me about this poem.
I am really very grateful and thanks again! ~Dean
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Your offering - my review - your reply - most definitely begs for an afternoon of coffee and cinnamon biscuits and a fabulous discussion. Your place or mine?
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Yours. Mines a friggin' mess, LOL...
;D
Comment from NurseBarb
Bravo, Dean. I believe this your first attempt at a Sonnet? If so, you have done an excellent job. Vivid, creepy image in mind of a generation of ruthlessness in a family. Perfect presentation with a eerie image to accompany your Sonnet. Great job!
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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Bravo, Dean. I believe this your first attempt at a Sonnet? If so, you have done an excellent job. Vivid, creepy image in mind of a generation of ruthlessness in a family. Perfect presentation with a eerie image to accompany your Sonnet. Great job!
Comment Written 25-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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It's my third, Barb, and based upon the poet police's comments and ratings, I blew it on the meter once more. Oh well, if at first you don't succeed...
Thanks so much for the review.
~Dean
Comment from forestport12
You never fail to post something of highest literary value. The images you create with words are hauntingly well-placed for maximum effect. This one takes you from a scene of the father to the impaled look of the child. Memorable.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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You never fail to post something of highest literary value. The images you create with words are hauntingly well-placed for maximum effect. This one takes you from a scene of the father to the impaled look of the child. Memorable.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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Thanks very much for the excellent feed back and encouragement, Stan. As always, it is a pleasure to get your unique perspectives on my work. ~Dean
Comment from Ric Myworld
"The apple doesn't fall too far from the tree," and neither does the monster who resides in you and me. You are a creepy guy, Dean Kuch, and I enjoy reading every word you write. :-)
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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"The apple doesn't fall too far from the tree," and neither does the monster who resides in you and me. You are a creepy guy, Dean Kuch, and I enjoy reading every word you write. :-)
Comment Written 25-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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Hah, thank you, Ric, and I take that as the highest of compliments, my good
Tahnks again.
~Dean
Comment from rjuselius
You have excelled yourself! This is a morbid piece of poetic art with a capital M. True in your words that make the poem grow in intensity.
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck with the contest!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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You have excelled yourself! This is a morbid piece of poetic art with a capital M. True in your words that make the poem grow in intensity.
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck with the contest!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 25-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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Thanks so much for you kind comments, Rebekka. I really appreciate it. ~Dean
Comment from dmt1967
I must remember never to read your material at night my friend. As soon as I pressed read the music started and scared me half to death lol. This is another great poem. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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I must remember never to read your material at night my friend. As soon as I pressed read the music started and scared me half to death lol. This is another great poem. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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Hah-ha, thanks, DMT. The music and or soundtracks throw a lot of people off their chairs from time t time, LOL.
I certainly appreciate your very complimentary review and the time you took to give it. :)
~Dean
