A Breeze Swept Through
A Quatern126 total reviews
Comment from Pili Pubul
A truly beautiful mood express to me so well an attitude about life
based in nature 's imitation. Love the repetition and the figure of
the steady oak, regardless of wars 's lost or win... Subtle but effective message. Pili
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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A truly beautiful mood express to me so well an attitude about life
based in nature 's imitation. Love the repetition and the figure of
the steady oak, regardless of wars 's lost or win... Subtle but effective message. Pili
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Pili. Sending you thanks and smiles, my generous friend :-) Brooke
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You welcome, you always make me smile. Pili
Comment from jaded831
A lesson to just enjoy the moment, excellent rhyme scheme. Your poem takes the reader on a moments vacation, while visualizing the simple pleasures of life. Well done.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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A lesson to just enjoy the moment, excellent rhyme scheme. Your poem takes the reader on a moments vacation, while visualizing the simple pleasures of life. Well done.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Jaded, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Brooke, I always enjoy the way you personify nature. I'm not sure what was going on in your mind when you wrote the last stanza because it took a serious turn. Perhaps you are stating how people should not bend to the will of others. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Hi Brooke, I always enjoy the way you personify nature. I'm not sure what was going on in your mind when you wrote the last stanza because it took a serious turn. Perhaps you are stating how people should not bend to the will of others. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Lou, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from jadapenn
Loved your Quatern. Had a smile on my face as this must surely be a male breeze:it gave no hint where it had been,
nor where it might be going to,
Also like how the old oak wasn't stirred by this breeze that didn't have the will of the wind. It just tickles the leaves. Loved it. luv jada
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Loved your Quatern. Had a smile on my face as this must surely be a male breeze:it gave no hint where it had been,
nor where it might be going to,
Also like how the old oak wasn't stirred by this breeze that didn't have the will of the wind. It just tickles the leaves. Loved it. luv jada
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Jada, thank you so much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from padumachitta
Hi. Ah the mighty oak.
I like the line repitition, like a reoccurring summer breeze. Not enough to shake things up, just enough to stir the air and a hint of things to come.padumachitta
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Hi. Ah the mighty oak.
I like the line repitition, like a reoccurring summer breeze. Not enough to shake things up, just enough to stir the air and a hint of things to come.padumachitta
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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padumachitta, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Titan Black
Yeah, that's the beautiful thing about
Gods creations... Especially nature. The
wind is supposed to let you know that there
is a God. But not many will ever know. Anyway
you did good on this piece.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Yeah, that's the beautiful thing about
Gods creations... Especially nature. The
wind is supposed to let you know that there
is a God. But not many will ever know. Anyway
you did good on this piece.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Titan, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from MissMerri
A poem that is written in perfect form with creative rhymes and deep, internal meaning, is a poem that deserves six stars. I think this piece is flawless. I could read it for years and never tire of its beautiful meter or life lessons woven so subtly into the lines of its little story. I love poems like this. It was a great wake-up piece to start my Sunday.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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A poem that is written in perfect form with creative rhymes and deep, internal meaning, is a poem that deserves six stars. I think this piece is flawless. I could read it for years and never tire of its beautiful meter or life lessons woven so subtly into the lines of its little story. I love poems like this. It was a great wake-up piece to start my Sunday.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much, Adonna - love the flawless comment and am most grateful for the generous sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from Sarah Butterfly
Nice structure you have used in this poem, repeating Always the line "a breeze went through and brushed my skin" but shifting it each time one line down. Solid rhyme used. Very enjoyable read! Just after the first line I wonder if there is meant to be a blank line? For the rest, nice poem!
Kind regards
Sarah
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Nice structure you have used in this poem, repeating Always the line "a breeze went through and brushed my skin" but shifting it each time one line down. Solid rhyme used. Very enjoyable read! Just after the first line I wonder if there is meant to be a blank line? For the rest, nice poem!
Kind regards
Sarah
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much, Sarah - no, the blank line is fan story's editor having a nervous breakdown :-) Brooke
Comment from Jackarrie
Hi Brooke, Quatern is a new one for me,
I love the repeated line,
A breeze swept through and brushed my skin,
it is so effective when it is repeated, through your poem. I can just feel it brushing my skin, as a matter of fact is is one of my most enjoyable pleasure feeling the breeze on my skin on warm days.
I loved it.
Well done
Mary
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Hi Brooke, Quatern is a new one for me,
I love the repeated line,
A breeze swept through and brushed my skin,
it is so effective when it is repeated, through your poem. I can just feel it brushing my skin, as a matter of fact is is one of my most enjoyable pleasure feeling the breeze on my skin on warm days.
I loved it.
Well done
Mary
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
Comment from mfowler
No children??
Lovely anyway. I like how you've linked each moment in existential co-existence; the breeze, leaf, tree just going about their natural business of being themselves. I like how this is connected to life and you make out the movement/stance of each part, to be an example of co-existence with need for argument, ego, war (Not all's a war to lose or win). Your signature line (A breeze swept through and brushed my skin) has a simple beauty of its own, but really is the connection around which the rest is built. Lovely work.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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No children??
Lovely anyway. I like how you've linked each moment in existential co-existence; the breeze, leaf, tree just going about their natural business of being themselves. I like how this is connected to life and you make out the movement/stance of each part, to be an example of co-existence with need for argument, ego, war (Not all's a war to lose or win). Your signature line (A breeze swept through and brushed my skin) has a simple beauty of its own, but really is the connection around which the rest is built. Lovely work.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Nope, not a kid in site, Mark. LOL For years before Sawyer was born there were no kids in sight in hundreds of poems. LOL Thanks for your review :-) Brooke
