Comment from misscookie

Excellent

O my goodness that was a sin and a shame. You captured my attention from the start , then when the maybe baby thing came about I just froze
I was still in a state of shock after the truth was told. This was a very entertaining and shocking fun poem to read
thank you for sharing
cookie

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019

Thanks. I was trying to capture Larry's reaction to being told in front of everyone. Yep, it would be a shock.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

That company could find themselves in trouble if what they do causes some kind of harm/danger. You did a great job, though, Cindy with the scenario. I wasn't expecting it to be a prank, but there were some clues. I believe readers get caught up in 'this must be real; and forget the clues. Thanks for sharing and best wishes Jan

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019

Thanks. I don't know all the company's rules, but I imagine they're pretty careful. They wouldn't let a prank go on too long. I tried to drop a couple of hints, but it was hard with so few words.

Comment from N. Rabwar

Excellent

This is an amusing story told in very few words. I especially liked the surprise ending. I think this is a good entry. It is hard to have a plot with so few words, but you managed it.

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019

Thanks. It was a fun write, imagining him in that predicament. Glad you enjoyed it.

Comment from Darlene BoClair

Exceptional

I am still laughing at this prank.
We do not have in our county of USA the Scheme-a-Dream, yet I like how it's working for you and your family. This story from all the characters involved and the communication they have with each other is truly a winner in the Flash Fiction contest entry.

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019

Thanks for the six! I'm so glad you think this is a winner. I was at a party once where an actress pretended to be the mistress. The wife, of course, was in on it. It was hilarious.

Comment from Mistydawn

Excellent

Finding someone half-drunk, in a public place, surrounded by friends. The setting couldn't be any better. The prank could floor anyone, lol. The oor guy didn't know what was going on. Great job with this story.

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019

Thanks. I had fun imagining this one. Glad you liked it.

Comment from LeftHandedScribe

Excellent

Talk about a bait and switch! You absolutely had me hooked until the very last line. What a wonderful journey you take us on! It's infused with so much humor and angst. What a joy to read!

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019

Thanks. This one was fun to write. I can imagine the look on his face! It would have been priceless.

Comment from Sugarray77

Excellent

You did a great job in setting up the punch line in this dramatic Flash. I thought the dialogue and the response from your main character were very good. Good luck.

Melissa

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019

Thanks. It was fun imagining his reaction. Glad you enjoyed it.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Thanks for the author notes Cindy. I didn't know about this agency. It sounds like a brilliant prank to play on someone. This is an excellent entry in this flash fiction contest my friend. Well done, goood luck, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019

Thanks. Glad you liked my fun little story. I imagined his reaction, finding out in front of everyone. At least they didn't torture him too long!

reply by royowen on 11-Aug-2019

Heh heh

Comment from Raul1

Excellent

I like the humor in your story. First this man finds out he has a son and later it was all a hoax. Nice going with this one. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019

Thanks. I thought his friends did a pretty good job of freaking him out.

reply by Raul1 on 11-Aug-2019

You're welcome.

Comment from Iza Deleanu

Excellent

Cute prank, especially when you have an engagement party. Merry with kids from another dream that sounds like a real nightmare. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest

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 Comment Written 11-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019

Thanks. Yep, it would freak him out. Imagine finding out in front of everybody, then learning it was a prank and they were in on it.

reply by Iza Deleanu on 11-Aug-2019

😄 funny