No Name Child
A Cutter's Letter to God49 total reviews
Comment from Alex in BC
Mrs KT,
Thanks KT.
For teaching.
Me your.
Two word.
Poem technique.
The interesting punctuation is awesome.
The message about pain is loud and clear. It's such a strong, powerful, well delivered piece, but without any solution or understandable meaning without your note.
It is fantastic writing, and would be even better if you offered any hope to those broken and lost souls. If you knew any way out for them, or maybe that's not a part of this. I guess it's something they have to deal with on their own. You sure brought this problem to my attention.
Thanks again.
Alex
reply by the author on 21-May-2007
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Mrs KT,
Thanks KT.
For teaching.
Me your.
Two word.
Poem technique.
The interesting punctuation is awesome.
The message about pain is loud and clear. It's such a strong, powerful, well delivered piece, but without any solution or understandable meaning without your note.
It is fantastic writing, and would be even better if you offered any hope to those broken and lost souls. If you knew any way out for them, or maybe that's not a part of this. I guess it's something they have to deal with on their own. You sure brought this problem to my attention.
Thanks again.
Alex
Comment Written 21-May-2007
reply by the author on 21-May-2007
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Hello Alex! This was my first attempt at this format. Pretty tricky! Pleased you appreciated it. Take Care. . .diane
Comment from BANJO
Too Late and It's Your Fault by poemstoopeneyes on this site also addresses this topic - although not constrained by the contest terms and conditions. If I hadn't recently read her piece I would have been more impressed with yours! I think you have done an excellent job within the contest constraints, and addressed a difficult issue. But I found the double spacing dragged the piece out - and reinforced a monotony of pacing and rhythm. I suspect the two word format is responsible for this monotone effect. I must look at the other contest entries to see whether they had the same problem . I see you've tried to overcome that with questions, exclamations and emphases.
good luck with the contest.
Banjo
reply by the author on 21-May-2007
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Too Late and It's Your Fault by poemstoopeneyes on this site also addresses this topic - although not constrained by the contest terms and conditions. If I hadn't recently read her piece I would have been more impressed with yours! I think you have done an excellent job within the contest constraints, and addressed a difficult issue. But I found the double spacing dragged the piece out - and reinforced a monotony of pacing and rhythm. I suspect the two word format is responsible for this monotone effect. I must look at the other contest entries to see whether they had the same problem . I see you've tried to overcome that with questions, exclamations and emphases.
good luck with the contest.
Banjo
Comment Written 21-May-2007
reply by the author on 21-May-2007
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I'll have to read the other offering. diane
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Just realised I got the writers name wrong, I meant 'Too Late and It's Your Fault' by poetrytoopeneyes. Banjo
Comment from Penpal
This is a sad and poignant piece which cries for help and ends with hope. I liked this entry and the last line certainly ties it together. "No Name". Well done.
Sally Saucer
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This is a sad and poignant piece which cries for help and ends with hope. I liked this entry and the last line certainly ties it together. "No Name". Well done.
Sally Saucer
Comment Written 21-May-2007
Comment from Lokman
And it's so sad. It's also been going on for quite a lot longer than people might want to recognize. I have a friend who's 38 and her arms are covered in scars she cut herself when she was a teen.
It's such an odd, horrifying trend, especially when so many of these girls have so much to look forward to in life.
Lokman
reply by the author on 21-May-2007
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And it's so sad. It's also been going on for quite a lot longer than people might want to recognize. I have a friend who's 38 and her arms are covered in scars she cut herself when she was a teen.
It's such an odd, horrifying trend, especially when so many of these girls have so much to look forward to in life.
Lokman
Comment Written 21-May-2007
reply by the author on 21-May-2007
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I so agree. Thank you for stopping by, Friend...diane
Comment from Lannie L
The words, the sentiment alluded to, the all-too-powerful symbolism allow this poem to be likened to King David written in the 21st century,
Even though each line seemed to have a message unto itself, there was a cohesiveness between all lines that allow it as a prayer of desperation, as well as Praise lyrics. I can't wait to read more from you.
Blessings, Lizzie
reply by the author on 21-May-2007
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The words, the sentiment alluded to, the all-too-powerful symbolism allow this poem to be likened to King David written in the 21st century,
Even though each line seemed to have a message unto itself, there was a cohesiveness between all lines that allow it as a prayer of desperation, as well as Praise lyrics. I can't wait to read more from you.
Blessings, Lizzie
Comment Written 21-May-2007
reply by the author on 21-May-2007
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My goodness! What a wonderful review. ..thank you! diane
Comment from dip-a-dee-do
This is a very sad piece you have written..
I have had experience with cutters and it is very frustrting to try and deal with them.
This piece touched me so..It made me cry..
Very well written.
Nice write.
Donna
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This is a very sad piece you have written..
I have had experience with cutters and it is very frustrting to try and deal with them.
This piece touched me so..It made me cry..
Very well written.
Nice write.
Donna
Comment Written 21-May-2007
Comment from mshugh
Unfortunately, I 've seen this in one of my godchildren who's now getting help. I've never heard of this until very recently and am just wondering how long this has been happening - I can't remember hearing about this ten or fifteen years ago
Well done
No SPAGs or typos
Michael
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Unfortunately, I 've seen this in one of my godchildren who's now getting help. I've never heard of this until very recently and am just wondering how long this has been happening - I can't remember hearing about this ten or fifteen years ago
Well done
No SPAGs or typos
Michael
Comment Written 21-May-2007
Comment from Bryana
This is very profound but sad. I didn't know of this illness until recently. It's so sad that our children go through this.
You did a wonderful job with this letter, it remind us of this problem so that we could do something for someone who needs help.
Good luck in the contest.
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This is very profound but sad. I didn't know of this illness until recently. It's so sad that our children go through this.
You did a wonderful job with this letter, it remind us of this problem so that we could do something for someone who needs help.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-May-2007
Comment from damevictoria
One of my foster children was a cutter...they are so hard to reach, as a matter of fact i hate to admit it she was my only failure, I couldn't reach her. I had to place her in a special home. This poem really touched me and made me cry and think of her again. It is all so senseless. Anyway thank you for sharing
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One of my foster children was a cutter...they are so hard to reach, as a matter of fact i hate to admit it she was my only failure, I couldn't reach her. I had to place her in a special home. This poem really touched me and made me cry and think of her again. It is all so senseless. Anyway thank you for sharing
Comment Written 20-May-2007
Comment from SnowBound
Mrs. KT
There are a couple of cutters on this site also.
It is so sad to me, but in a strange way I understand it. It atones for supposed wrongs and relieves the internal aches. The idea is if they are hurting on the outside they won't hurt so much on the inside.
You are very sympathetic and empathetic. They are lucky they have you for their teacher.
SnowBound
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Mrs. KT
There are a couple of cutters on this site also.
It is so sad to me, but in a strange way I understand it. It atones for supposed wrongs and relieves the internal aches. The idea is if they are hurting on the outside they won't hurt so much on the inside.
You are very sympathetic and empathetic. They are lucky they have you for their teacher.
SnowBound
Comment Written 20-May-2007
