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Can McKenzie solve Megan Nelson?s murder?
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royowen
I think you're building a great story. The drugging of Mckenzie is the first of a significant amount of murders, (drug cartel, that spells trouble) so Mckenzie's folk have also been murdered, as well as Logan's sister. Well done Barbara, good scribing, blessings, Roy
Typo : (a) checking out a witness...
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Comment Written 17-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2019
I have omitted that wayward 'a', Thank you for the catch and your kind support of my writing.
reply by royowen on 17-Mar-2019
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24chas
This was a good chapter. I like the way you're pacing this. The dialogue is really good and realistic. Logan seems like he's starting to have feelings for McKenzie. Good job. A couple of nits: Yes, John Benson was arrested but died in prison before the trail, (trial)
"You're using that as an excuse to be a pain-in-the-butt, aren't you? (Use end quote)
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Comment Written 17-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2019
Thank you for the catches. I appreciate the help.
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