Starving
Rictameter form76 total reviews
Comment from frogbook
A very sad and empathetic personalization of this precious creature, just trying to fend for themselves and family. Great message and a great write.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2018
A very sad and empathetic personalization of this precious creature, just trying to fend for themselves and family. Great message and a great write.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2018
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Hi Frogbook, thank you so much for a great review...love Linda xxoo
Comment from Michele Harber
That's a sad but all too honest commentary. I love how you used the rictameter form and shape (I assume you were pronouncing "soil" as a two-syllable word) to tell a story. My heart went out to the bear and all other animals in that prediciament. They're lucky to have you to speak for them.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
That's a sad but all too honest commentary. I love how you used the rictameter form and shape (I assume you were pronouncing "soil" as a two-syllable word) to tell a story. My heart went out to the bear and all other animals in that prediciament. They're lucky to have you to speak for them.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
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Hi Michele, no I only used it as one syllable...
soil-1
now-1
gone-1
food-1
just-1
won't-1
grow-1
total-7
I checked two sites to make sure soil
was one...
thank you so much for a wonderful review...and your kind words...love Linda xxoo
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Hi Linda. I was just going by the description you provided (Rictameter form 2,4,6,8,10,8,6,4,2 syllables) and it didn't list any 7-syllable lines. It certainly didn't detract from the story you told or the pattern you told it in. I just didn't want anyone to lower your score for not sticking to the syllable count but, judging by your accolades, nobody else knew or cared. It certainly didn't take away from the poem. :-)
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Hi Michele, I see what you are saying...I will correct it now...so sorry....and thank you for the help...someone said you could use soil as two...but I wasn't...Thank you...smiling back at you...love Linda xxoo
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It's no problem. I'm just happy I was able to help. :-)
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a good poem from the bear's viewpoint and it reminds us that we are ruining too much of our wild animals' habitats. This wandering through neighborhoods puts them in danger of being hurt by cars or shot.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2018
This is a good poem from the bear's viewpoint and it reminds us that we are ruining too much of our wild animals' habitats. This wandering through neighborhoods puts them in danger of being hurt by cars or shot.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 05-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2018
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Hi Joan, it really is sad to think they are walking around trying to find food...and there is none out there for them...what we haven't taken from them...we kill...thank you so much for a wonderful review my sweet friend...love to you...Linda xxoo
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You're welcome, Linda
Joan
Comment from Sasha
YOu have done a marvelous job with this poem. It is beautifully written and focuses on a subject too many seldom think about. Hopefully, this will help people pay more attention to a problem that only we can fix.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2018
YOu have done a marvelous job with this poem. It is beautifully written and focuses on a subject too many seldom think about. Hopefully, this will help people pay more attention to a problem that only we can fix.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2018
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HI Sasha, you are so very right my sweet friend...only we can fix it...thank you for a wonderful review...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment from A. Willow Bends
Very strong statement and emotionally charged. This is very well done. I like your format and the photo to match. Great job and Good Luck with this. Not sure where it will all end. I wonder for my grandchildren what the world will be.
Wendy
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
Very strong statement and emotionally charged. This is very well done. I like your format and the photo to match. Great job and Good Luck with this. Not sure where it will all end. I wonder for my grandchildren what the world will be.
Wendy
Comment Written 05-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
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Hi Wendy, I wonder the same thing...will there be anymore of so many of the wildlife I see still here...thank you for a wonderful review...God Bless...love Linda xxoo
Comment from Ulla
Hi Linda, I couldn't agree more. It breaks my heart every time nature gives way to concrete at the expense of the natural habitat. I really liked your poem.A stark reminder. Warm regards. Ulla xx
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
Hi Linda, I couldn't agree more. It breaks my heart every time nature gives way to concrete at the expense of the natural habitat. I really liked your poem.A stark reminder. Warm regards. Ulla xx
Comment Written 05-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
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Hi Ulla, so good to see you my sweet friend...thank you so much for a wonderful review...I am so tired of seeing them taking their land away...and killing them when they have nowhere to go....nothing to eat...sigh...thank you for a wonderful review sweet girl...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment from Hayley Zemontas
I like that you raised awareness of this problem with your rictameter poem. I think the length is perfect- makes it very concise and to the point. I agree, it is very sad that the creatures of the world are dying out because of starvation. We should respect and take care of them, they bring so much to the world. Lovely poem, thanks for sharing x
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
I like that you raised awareness of this problem with your rictameter poem. I think the length is perfect- makes it very concise and to the point. I agree, it is very sad that the creatures of the world are dying out because of starvation. We should respect and take care of them, they bring so much to the world. Lovely poem, thanks for sharing x
Comment Written 05-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
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HI Hayley, you are so right...they bring something to this world...that is how God planed it...it breaks my heart to see them staving...before we got here...they had good lives...we destroy everything we can...thank you for a wonderful review sweet girl...love Linda xxoo
Comment from Bill Schott
This rictameter. Starving, is set up correctly and brings the plight of displaced bear and other creatures to the forefront. Where do they go?
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
This rictameter. Starving, is set up correctly and brings the plight of displaced bear and other creatures to the forefront. Where do they go?
Comment Written 05-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
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Hi Bill, that's my question as well...thank you for a wonderful review my sweet friend...love Linda xxoo
Comment from Cedar
Hello Linda: This type of poetry form is very hard to write but you did a wonderful job with it. This is just not an ordinary poem, it's a poem that has a great deal of meaning behind it.
This problem not only happens here in America but all across the world. We're constantly destroying our beautiful forests just to make room for shopping malls or housing projects and not realizing what it's doing to all the animals that make these forests their home.
And now we have to add global warming to animal destruction also. Especially, for the bear population.
Thanks for bringing this to our attention. This is a subject that many people don't even care about, let alone think about it.
Great job Linda. Have a really nice weekend...Bill
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2018
Hello Linda: This type of poetry form is very hard to write but you did a wonderful job with it. This is just not an ordinary poem, it's a poem that has a great deal of meaning behind it.
This problem not only happens here in America but all across the world. We're constantly destroying our beautiful forests just to make room for shopping malls or housing projects and not realizing what it's doing to all the animals that make these forests their home.
And now we have to add global warming to animal destruction also. Especially, for the bear population.
Thanks for bringing this to our attention. This is a subject that many people don't even care about, let alone think about it.
Great job Linda. Have a really nice weekend...Bill
Comment Written 05-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2018
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HI Bill, I think most people know...but the ones that can stop it don't care...it's all about money...but Bill there will be a day it will have to be answered for...I feel so bad for all the wildlife that suffers because of our stupidity...in the waters as well...stop making all this plastic...it's destroying land and oceans...but that's big money for someone...so awful my sweet friend...thank you once again my wonderful friend for a truly wonderful and honest review...and alll your wonderful stars...take care...and God Bless...love Linda xxoo
Comment from Loredana
Beautiful poem on a sad topic. I like the diamond shape you gave to it. If I may suggest the shape of a bear to make this poem a shape poem that matches the picture. Just an idea. Of course, you'll have to rearrange the rhyme.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2018
Beautiful poem on a sad topic. I like the diamond shape you gave to it. If I may suggest the shape of a bear to make this poem a shape poem that matches the picture. Just an idea. Of course, you'll have to rearrange the rhyme.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2018
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Hi Loredana, you have to go by the be syllable count...thank you so much for a great review...love Linda xxoo