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Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "haiku (robins gather)"A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets
38 total reviews
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi IndianaIrish - this is a rally good haiku. Lines one and two interconnect perfectly, as required and your line 3 is an excellent satori - 'lawn party' - not just robins have them, we also do. Well done. Clever write. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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Hi IndianaIrish - this is a rally good haiku. Lines one and two interconnect perfectly, as required and your line 3 is an excellent satori - 'lawn party' - not just robins have them, we also do. Well done. Clever write. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 05-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your kind review and comments for my spring haiku, Dorothy. I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from angel123
The short poems are my favorite because it gives the poet the opportunity to show their creativity. We have to really use our imagination to make these poems meaningful and you have mastered that with your nature poem. Best wishes.
angel123
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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The short poems are my favorite because it gives the poet the opportunity to show their creativity. We have to really use our imagination to make these poems meaningful and you have mastered that with your nature poem. Best wishes.
angel123
Comment Written 05-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your kind review and comments for my spring haiku, angel123. I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Antoine Charlemaine
Ah, spring! The worst of your chilly winter must be over now - thankfully, I'm sure.
This hair-do is nice. A gentle picture, somehow. It's a little different on our front lawn. We have a pair of Pretty-Faced Wallabies (you can see pics of these on google images if you want) who come in on many evenings, when dusk falls and into the night, to graze on our lawn. It's quite special. I suppose they will have a family one day and we may get a glimpse of a little face peeking out of its mother's pouch if we're really fortunate...just like the pic I sent you. Lawn party...party on!!!
Blessed Ant xx
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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Ah, spring! The worst of your chilly winter must be over now - thankfully, I'm sure.
This hair-do is nice. A gentle picture, somehow. It's a little different on our front lawn. We have a pair of Pretty-Faced Wallabies (you can see pics of these on google images if you want) who come in on many evenings, when dusk falls and into the night, to graze on our lawn. It's quite special. I suppose they will have a family one day and we may get a glimpse of a little face peeking out of its mother's pouch if we're really fortunate...just like the pic I sent you. Lawn party...party on!!!
Blessed Ant xx
Comment Written 05-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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Hi Ant! I did google the wallaby to see the difference between them and kangaroos...and looked at the baby one in the pictures you sent. I hope you do get to see a baby peeking out at you from mama's pouch...that would be a huge awwwww moment in my book. Thanks so much for your review and comments. There's still chances of snow and chilly weather in March. It's 31°F here this morning, but the sun is shining, some birds are singing, and looks like spring will be here soon. Have a great week.
Smiles,
Kazzaby :-)
Comment from Ella25
Pleasurable to read, three lines of the haiku poem. Very simple but creative. Lawn party in the park...:) worms come out early when the grass is still wet. Nicely done. With love, Ella
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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Pleasurable to read, three lines of the haiku poem. Very simple but creative. Lawn party in the park...:) worms come out early when the grass is still wet. Nicely done. With love, Ella
Comment Written 05-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your kind review and comments for my spring haiku, Ella. I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. It's fun to watch them in the morning as they grab a bite to eat!
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
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You are welcome, Karyn. Enjoy Sunday and all the blessings that come your way. With love, Ella
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You are very welcome, Karyn. I have a nest on my patio and love to watch the mother bringing worms to feed the babies. Have a beautiful day. With love, Ella
Comment from Lu Saluna
This is really good haiku. I can easily envision this. Every morning with the heavy morning dew, the worms come to the surface and the robins are out there have a worm smorg, all to themselves. It is quite the "lawn party" for them.
Nicely done!
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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This is really good haiku. I can easily envision this. Every morning with the heavy morning dew, the worms come to the surface and the robins are out there have a worm smorg, all to themselves. It is quite the "lawn party" for them.
Nicely done!
Comment Written 05-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Lu, for your kind review and comments for my spring haiku. I liked your "worm smorgasbord "! Your rating doesn't seem to be reflected in your comments. Did you mean to give 4 stars? If so, it's okay, just some thoughts how to improve or is there a mistake so I can correct it? Thanks for reading my posts.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
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Sorry about that. I am glad you asked, it was a mistake. I have corrected it now. I have accidently done that before. I am happy you asked about it.
Have a great day. Lu
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Thanks, Lu! Your comments didn't match, so I asked. I've done that before many times, too. LOL
Comment from Hitcher
That would be a very cool sight to see indy, your very lucky here in nz if you see a robin once every couple of yeale. Well crafted poem friend.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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That would be a very cool sight to see indy, your very lucky here in nz if you see a robin once every couple of yeale. Well crafted poem friend.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your kind review and comments for my spring haiku, Hitch. I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. The arrival of robins and hearing their songs is a sure sign of spring for me.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Spitfire
Sounds more like a grub party. LOL. (That word would destroy the mood.) It is easy to picture this. Consonance with early and party, robin and morning.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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Sounds more like a grub party. LOL. (That word would destroy the mood.) It is easy to picture this. Consonance with early and party, robin and morning.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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LOL Shari! Yeah, I agree grubs don't sound as much as a likable party menu favorite. Thanks so much for your kind review and comments for my spring haiku.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from PoemsOfDD
IndianaIrish, yes, you are right. The reader doesn't need a picture to help visualize this well written poem. Imagination works perfectly fine to see a busy lawn of twittering robins :-) A noisy yet beautiful sight. ~DD
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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IndianaIrish, yes, you are right. The reader doesn't need a picture to help visualize this well written poem. Imagination works perfectly fine to see a busy lawn of twittering robins :-) A noisy yet beautiful sight. ~DD
Comment Written 04-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your kind review and comments for my spring haiku, ~DD. I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and could "see" the scene without a photo.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Nan Beeson
Ha!
What a delightful read in only three simple lines!
"robins gather
for early morning breakfast
lawn party"
That is one lawn party I would love to have been invited to attend! I would have even been happy to supply their early morning breakfast of worm omelets, LOL!
Thank you for sharing it and making me smile.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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Ha!
What a delightful read in only three simple lines!
"robins gather
for early morning breakfast
lawn party"
That is one lawn party I would love to have been invited to attend! I would have even been happy to supply their early morning breakfast of worm omelets, LOL!
Thank you for sharing it and making me smile.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your kind review and comments for my spring haiku, Nan. I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem, and I'm especially happy it made you smile!
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
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You are wecome, Karyn....What a lovely name.
Comment from Gloria ....
A lovely, beautiful and delightful haiku, Karyn. Excellent imagery and a very nice aha line.
I mean who doesn't love worm omelets? *cough*
Lot of fun with this delight.
Gloria
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2017
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A lovely, beautiful and delightful haiku, Karyn. Excellent imagery and a very nice aha line.
I mean who doesn't love worm omelets? *cough*
Lot of fun with this delight.
Gloria
Comment Written 04-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much for this awesome response to my spring haiku, Gloria. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it, and I appreciate your great review, generous rating, and kind words. Thank you for sharing your thoughts.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
