You are my strength
My soulmate73 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Yes these simple rhyming couplets are a very good Valentine poem or a poem for a wedding anniverary. These words show the love should be.
Congrats on such a long marriage.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Yes these simple rhyming couplets are a very good Valentine poem or a poem for a wedding anniverary. These words show the love should be.
Congrats on such a long marriage.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 04-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Thankyou so much Joan, much appreciated
dip
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You are so very welcome.
Joan
Comment from kriver
Hi,
Yes Doc it would be a good
Valentines poem.
I am sure she will show you her appreciation when she receives it.
Over all I think it is a good write.
Best regards,
K River
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Hi,
Yes Doc it would be a good
Valentines poem.
I am sure she will show you her appreciation when she receives it.
Over all I think it is a good write.
Best regards,
K River
Comment Written 04-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Thankyou so much K much appreciated
dip
Comment from Jackarrie
Hi Dip
I thought this was for the valentine contest. It is a beautiful poem, written with sincerity and deep love for your wife.
I hope she appreciate your devotion to her.
Well done
Mary
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Hi Dip
I thought this was for the valentine contest. It is a beautiful poem, written with sincerity and deep love for your wife.
I hope she appreciate your devotion to her.
Well done
Mary
Comment Written 04-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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I never even realized there was a contest. I never bother entering contests I never think my work is good enough.
I have never in the nearly 4 years of coming to fanstory made it to the front page before. So I am rapt with everyone's response
Thankyou so much
dip
Comment from MsPetra
I gave it five stars because you deserved it. This is a beautiful, well written poem. Personally, I would have turned around the "If you go before I do" to "If I go before you do" and continued on from there.
I is a beautiful poem that I enjoyed. It doesn't need any changes. I simply would have done that little part differently.
Please keep writing. I am looking forward to future offerings from you.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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I gave it five stars because you deserved it. This is a beautiful, well written poem. Personally, I would have turned around the "If you go before I do" to "If I go before you do" and continued on from there.
I is a beautiful poem that I enjoyed. It doesn't need any changes. I simply would have done that little part differently.
Please keep writing. I am looking forward to future offerings from you.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Thankyou so much Ms P I really appreciate your input and comment. As for your suggestion I re visited and thought about what you said but in the context of the poem it changes the whole next line so I have left it as is You are the first one in 50 reviews to suggest or mention that so I had never thought of that before.
thankyou again
dip
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I was asked to write the poem recovery for a friends 35th anniversary ceremony. That one little change of flipping it on me made a huge difference and it went over so much better.
Please don't take it as a criticism because it is not.
I am just saying that I would do it that way as an ultimate act of love toward that person. To say something like "If I should pass on.....bla bla bla.
It would change the dynamic a bit, but I think only for the better.
Then again I could be a ding dong and don't know what the hell I'm talking about! lol
I love your poem and I wish you all the best. Petra
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Thankyou Petra I took in what you said As I do with everyone's suggestions this poem has had 52 reviews now more than any poem I have ever posted here on Fanstory and I have changed many lines ever so slightly appeasing to everyone's interpretations Its all in the eye of the reader I do see what you are saying but as I said in this case it spoils the next line not to make sense and I still feel this is ok when talking about eternal love it is an act of chivalrous love lol like walking on the roadside of your lover so you are protecting her from the traffic if you know what I mean lol
Again I really do appreciate your sentiments and reason
respectfully dip
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Yes I get it! As I stated I think that your poem is very endearing and heart felt. I enjoyed it. Please keep writing. I am looking forward to your next offering.
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There are many in my port folio I would love you to see
dip
Comment from tfawcus
Yes - I guess this has all the ingredients of a good St Valentine's poem. It sounds as if you are a couple who are truly blessed. May you live in happiness together for many years to come.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Yes - I guess this has all the ingredients of a good St Valentine's poem. It sounds as if you are a couple who are truly blessed. May you live in happiness together for many years to come.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Thankyou so much t much appreciated
dip
Comment from Dawn Munro
Ah, geez, you say you are not a romantic? Who are you trying to kid, hmmm? I'm almost in tears at the beauty of this one, the wonderful sentiment, Dr. Dip. Well done. You need to give THIS one to your wife for her Valentine, you hear? *grin*
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Ah, geez, you say you are not a romantic? Who are you trying to kid, hmmm? I'm almost in tears at the beauty of this one, the wonderful sentiment, Dr. Dip. Well done. You need to give THIS one to your wife for her Valentine, you hear? *grin*
Comment Written 04-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Dawn that is such a wonderful review thank you so much Always appreciate your input.
dip
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It was a true pleasure. :))
Comment from marybell1
A beautiful poem that flows nicely. but you could have a tense problem. In verse 1 you used 'are' and in line two 'you'd'. In verse 2. e.g. You used 'was' in line one and 'are' in line two. I am not sure if this is what you intended.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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A beautiful poem that flows nicely. but you could have a tense problem. In verse 1 you used 'are' and in line two 'you'd'. In verse 2. e.g. You used 'was' in line one and 'are' in line two. I am not sure if this is what you intended.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Good pick up Mary bell thanks so much I had re tweaked that verse so many times I missed the tense change thankyou
dip
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The use of 'are' then 'was' is intentional Because In that line i am talking about past tense meaning what you had already done up to today being present tense when I am telling the story
respectfully dip
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Nah I have re tweaked it again and changed 'was' completely lol
I Iike it better now thanks for prompting me
dip
Comment from winnona
A well-written poem. The words flowed well line to line combining easily and forming the message of the poem for the reader. Your artwork completed the piece well.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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A well-written poem. The words flowed well line to line combining easily and forming the message of the poem for the reader. Your artwork completed the piece well.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Thankyou Winnona much appreciated
dip
Comment from DonandVicki
A very loving and nicely composed tribute to your soul mate. You are a luck man indeed, I too have been blessed and I will show this to my wife, i know that she will enjoy it.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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A very loving and nicely composed tribute to your soul mate. You are a luck man indeed, I too have been blessed and I will show this to my wife, i know that she will enjoy it.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Thankyou so much Donald much appreciated
dip
Comment from June Sargent
Well you certainly shared a lot in 40 years - joys as well as tears make for a strong foundation on which to build a lifetime of love. And you put it eloquently into words that capture the heart and soul of a man in love. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Well you certainly shared a lot in 40 years - joys as well as tears make for a strong foundation on which to build a lifetime of love. And you put it eloquently into words that capture the heart and soul of a man in love. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Thanks so much June much appreciated
dip
