Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi Cynthia

= This is a lovely, smooth flowing free verse.
= Even though free verse is just that, I'm still a firm believer in cohesive thoughts with continuity that tells a story.
= Yours paints a beautiful picture. Solid entry in the contest.
= I enjoyed our notes about Grandma. Nice touch. Good luck!

<> A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
<> Cheers & Blessings ... Jax/Jackie
<> Published as ... Jacqueline M Franklin

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016

Such a positive review!
Thank you for the helpful comments concerning free verse. I am new to fan story so this was very helpful.
Cynthia1

reply by Jacqueline M Franklin on 10-Aug-2016

You are very welcome.

Some I've read are jumbled words scattered on the page. To me, that does not a poem make. Of course, it's just my opinion. (*<*)

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

Great poem. We grow but we should never forget the process of growth. teenage years pass too quickly. As I grow older the years pass faster and faster.

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016

Thank you so much for the positive review.
Cynthia1

Comment from zanya

Excellent

Winsome and ethereal and filled with all the wonder and awe that the young heart and mind aspires to and hopes for - a poem to lift our thoughts out of the mundane

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016

Thank you so much for the lovely review
Cynthia1

reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016

Thank you so much for the lovely review
Cynthia1

Comment from Heather Knight

Excellent

Your poem paints a very clear picture of the beach and of your growing granddaughter.
I'm also starting to feel the end of the summer approaching...

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016

Yes, you can feel the next season approaching. Thank you for reviewing u on.
Cynthia1

Comment from William Ross

Excellent

very nice, wonderfully done on this free verse, high school a whole new life is about to begin, things happen that will change a life forever, I believe the most important and productive young years of discovering who we are. good luck on this and have a good day.

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016

Thank you.
Cynthia1

Comment from trumby

Excellent

Awesome! I love this poem. Very original, i love the way you compare the summer ending to the end of your grandaughter's childhood. Very wonderdul, and the image, such a beautiful choice. Hope you do well in the contest. Thanks for sharing. All the best.

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016

Thank you so very much!
Cynthia1

Comment from Gianinas

Excellent

"Though rains may fall and winter winds blow,
courage will lift her ever onward toward
life's sweet mysteries
that are yet
to be
"
Rare and beautiful dedication from a loving grandmother...for a young maiden. I loved the alliterations, the presentation, the subject line. Thank you,
Gianina

 Comment Written 09-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Aug-2016

What a beautiful review! Thank you so very much.
Cynthia1

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written poem. The years go by quickly. We often notice the time doesn't stand still. Before you know your children are grown.

 Comment Written 09-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Aug-2016

Thank you, Sandra.
Cynthia1

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

Thank you for sharing what inspired this free verse. You captured the nostalgia and the dreams. Your alliteration of "s's" throughout and "w's" in the final stanza intensified the sensibility. Well done! Smiles and best wishes in the contest- Joan

 Comment Written 09-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Aug-2016

Thank you so much for this thoughtful and supportive review.
Cynthia1

Comment from Grasshopper2

Excellent

What a wonderful poem full of images. I especially liked your comment about her remark. That makes the poem about a friend. I like the lines "Childhood, too, can no longer linger" and "New worlds gleam just beyond your view." Good read. Well done.

 Comment Written 09-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Aug-2016

Thank you so very much.
Cynthia1