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Viewing comments for Chapter 23 " The Lonesome Cowboy"Poems about the old West.
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Comment from juliaSjames
The poem flows with great rhyme and meter. I like the message of the write. The tedium and discomfort of the cowboy's life are well expressed.
Many occupations are romanticized. For example astronauts. Reality is quite different.
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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The poem flows with great rhyme and meter. I like the message of the write. The tedium and discomfort of the cowboy's life are well expressed.
Many occupations are romanticized. For example astronauts. Reality is quite different.
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 30-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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I would certainly agree with you there. Why would being trapped in a tin can for days, months even years be romantic. I would want no part of that. I would rather be a cowboy! LOL Thanks Julia. Nancy:)
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Comment from Iza Deleanu
Interesting choice of a poem, I must admit that the only thing I know about being a cowboy and life in the prairies is through the lens of a western movie. And for your description it seems is not an easy life :"Night time camping on the prairie
sometimes creepy, often scary.
Beans and coffee by the campfire
open wounds from mending barbwire." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your book
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Interesting choice of a poem, I must admit that the only thing I know about being a cowboy and life in the prairies is through the lens of a western movie. And for your description it seems is not an easy life :"Night time camping on the prairie
sometimes creepy, often scary.
Beans and coffee by the campfire
open wounds from mending barbwire." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your book
Comment Written 30-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Thank you very much for the lovely review and stars, Iza. Nancy:)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem/story about the lonesome cowboy and his horse who go from town to town each day and keep each other company between towns.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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A very well-written poem/story about the lonesome cowboy and his horse who go from town to town each day and keep each other company between towns.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Thank you very much for the thoughtful review and stars, Sandra. Nancy:)
Comment from Raul1
I like how you structured this poem. It is very easy to read and understand. Excellent work! I like this poem very much. Thanks for sharing! Very good work!
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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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I like how you structured this poem. It is very easy to read and understand. Excellent work! I like this poem very much. Thanks for sharing! Very good work!
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Comment Written 30-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Your rating does not match your words Raul. Did you intend to rate it a four or was it a slip of the cursor? Thanks for stopping by however. So happy you like the poem. Nancy:)
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You're welcome.
Comment from artemis53
Beautifully done piece on our choices and the importance of awareness The imagery is exquisite as I can feel him setting back and pondering amount this life.
reply by the author on 01-May-2012
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Beautifully done piece on our choices and the importance of awareness The imagery is exquisite as I can feel him setting back and pondering amount this life.
Comment Written 01-May-2012
reply by the author on 01-May-2012
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Thanks Diane, This happened to many young men back then but actually the "cowboy" era only lasted about 20 years because of the Railroad, Thanks for the review. Nancy
Comment from percival86jack
Love your story poem...
"The Cowboys life, not what it seemed
Not at all like he had dreamed"
Life wasn't as romantic as the dime novels painted it! Interesting write capturing the mood of life on the trail... hugs, Jack
reply by the author on 01-May-2012
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Love your story poem...
"The Cowboys life, not what it seemed
Not at all like he had dreamed"
Life wasn't as romantic as the dime novels painted it! Interesting write capturing the mood of life on the trail... hugs, Jack
Comment Written 01-May-2012
reply by the author on 01-May-2012
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Thank you Jack. I didn't know if I could think of anything to write but I did like the picture. I did it though. I amaze myself sometimes, do you ever feel that way? Nancy
Comment from Carole Rosa
Nancy, As you know, this type of poem is my favorite, it rhymes! Also Country music and Country men have always been my favorite! Very nice poem and well written. Carole
reply by the author on 01-May-2012
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Nancy, As you know, this type of poem is my favorite, it rhymes! Also Country music and Country men have always been my favorite! Very nice poem and well written. Carole
Comment Written 01-May-2012
reply by the author on 01-May-2012
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Thanks Carole. I like this picture so I had to think of something! Thanks for reviewing! Nancy
Comment from Gert sherwood
Nice rhyming Nancy the meter seems fine and such a sad story about a lonely cowboy wishing he was not alone.
Must be you like cowboys?
Gert
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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Nice rhyming Nancy the meter seems fine and such a sad story about a lonely cowboy wishing he was not alone.
Must be you like cowboys?
Gert
Comment Written 30-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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Of course. Cowgirls too. We are Nevadians. My daughter has cattle and horses. We have been Ranch people for years! I had to get rid of my livestock when Jim died. I couldn't care for them alone neither physically or financially. Big life change!Nancy
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Oh I didn't know you had a ranch
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Small one 15 acres now was twenty.
Ranchette. Small operation. Thank God. Nancy
Comment from Linda England Bonam
This was an awesome poem about a lonely cowboy, Nancy! You rhymed it so well and it sounded great as I read along. Great picture and presentation, too. Nice job!
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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This was an awesome poem about a lonely cowboy, Nancy! You rhymed it so well and it sounded great as I read along. Great picture and presentation, too. Nice job!
Comment Written 30-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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Thank you Linda! Yesterday I didn't think I could do it. I had the first verse but nothing else. Got up this morning and finished it in nothing flat! I guess a little rest is the key to inspiration! Thanks for the review! Nancy
Comment from Hollyhock
I really enjoyed this, admittedly I have a weakness for westerns but this fairly strummed along. I could imagine the cowboy singing away, either to a guitar or to the haunting sound of the harmonica.
The rhythm is excellent, evocative of the trotting pace, and pretty much regular all the way through. The stress does alter with "Dime novels...", this could be changed by leaving out "dime" but I know that you included this to add to the image you were creating. Where you could effectively leave out a word for the sake of the rhythm is in the line,
"LIST-en-ing/ TO the -coy/O-tes/HOW-ling, this does not quite match the the regular trochaic meter of the other lines but could be rewritten as
"LIST'ning / TO coy/O-tes/ HOW-ling, which echoes all the other lines.
Very enjoyable.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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I really enjoyed this, admittedly I have a weakness for westerns but this fairly strummed along. I could imagine the cowboy singing away, either to a guitar or to the haunting sound of the harmonica.
The rhythm is excellent, evocative of the trotting pace, and pretty much regular all the way through. The stress does alter with "Dime novels...", this could be changed by leaving out "dime" but I know that you included this to add to the image you were creating. Where you could effectively leave out a word for the sake of the rhythm is in the line,
"LIST-en-ing/ TO the -coy/O-tes/HOW-ling, this does not quite match the the regular trochaic meter of the other lines but could be rewritten as
"LIST'ning / TO coy/O-tes/ HOW-ling, which echoes all the other lines.
Very enjoyable.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2012
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I changed the Coyote line but I don't think I can leave out the Dime. That is what spun the romance of the open range. The dime novels! I will give it a little study and see if I can work it in smoothly.Thank you ! Honeycomb
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No, I can understand about the "Dime", it does not matter, I'm just a bit picky, and as I said I know why you had used it.
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I changed it. See what you think. I knew it caused a bump but I believe I saved it . Nancy
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Yes, much better, well done!
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Good, Thanks Holly. Honey! LOL
