I asked...
New form - Pantswap56 total reviews
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"I asked", is a well-written and spiritually-uplifting piece. Penned with craft and skill. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2021
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"I asked", is a well-written and spiritually-uplifting piece. Penned with craft and skill. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2021
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Thanks Duchess, for these super comments and lovely, review, blessings Roy
You're welcome Roy,
You definitely deserved both.
Bless you,
the Duchess
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Bless you
Bless you too.
Comment from lyenochka
And may the Lord intervene that no good soul dies and will hold on to His perfect Truth which gives Life. Great job with your pantswap poem both in writing it and creating the new form! We so need to abide in Truth as the evil one is constant trying to deceive His children and cause division in His Family.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2021
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And may the Lord intervene that no good soul dies and will hold on to His perfect Truth which gives Life. Great job with your pantswap poem both in writing it and creating the new form! We so need to abide in Truth as the evil one is constant trying to deceive His children and cause division in His Family.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2021
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Thanks Helen, for these super comments and lovely, review, blessings Roy
Comment from Katie Mae Dead
You certainly can master these complicated forms!
The 1st half is my favorite. It makes me want to try and write one. You make this sound effortless and not forced.
Very beautiful Roy. Thanks for writing. Your message was uplifting.
Katiemae Dead
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2021
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You certainly can master these complicated forms!
The 1st half is my favorite. It makes me want to try and write one. You make this sound effortless and not forced.
Very beautiful Roy. Thanks for writing. Your message was uplifting.
Katiemae Dead
Comment Written 01-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2021
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Thanks again Katie Mae, for these fantastic comments and great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Gloria ....
I like this very much, Roy. It has a good punchy rhythm/metre, and the repeating lines are slightly different with each verse.
And always sound advice to rid ourselves of malice, deceit, hypocrisy, envy and slander.
Great job and many thanks for inventing a new form. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2021
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I like this very much, Roy. It has a good punchy rhythm/metre, and the repeating lines are slightly different with each verse.
And always sound advice to rid ourselves of malice, deceit, hypocrisy, envy and slander.
Great job and many thanks for inventing a new form. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 31-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2021
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Thanks Gloria, for these excellent comments and great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Frank Jauregui
Strange but intriguing form of writing, I like it! Thanks for the author notes
I'm not too knowledgeable about different forms and styles of poetry and I don't know why this one reminded me of The Raven by Poe, maybe it was the image you chose and the black backdrop. Regardless, it is wonderfully written and I will be returning to it often, I'm sure.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2021
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Strange but intriguing form of writing, I like it! Thanks for the author notes
I'm not too knowledgeable about different forms and styles of poetry and I don't know why this one reminded me of The Raven by Poe, maybe it was the image you chose and the black backdrop. Regardless, it is wonderfully written and I will be returning to it often, I'm sure.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2021
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Thanks again Frank, for these fantastic comments and review, blessings Roy
Comment from Anne Johnston
That looks like a very difficult poem to write, and not one that I am ready to try for sure. I like the thought that we continually ask the Lord to search our hearts and show us when we are wrong, so we can change.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2021
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That looks like a very difficult poem to write, and not one that I am ready to try for sure. I like the thought that we continually ask the Lord to search our hearts and show us when we are wrong, so we can change.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2021
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Thanks Anne, for these excellent comments and a great review, blessings Roy
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You are welcome, Roy
Comment from LisaMay
Calling this form a 'Pantswap' put visions of undressing in my mind... perhaps not the right frame of mind to assess your poem. I can see that it takes concentration and skill to arrange the lines and mix them up, while still trying to progress the poem. I particularly liked this line: 'deceit can creep when minds are set.' However, I am not a fan of these repetition-based poems. I find myself trying to pick out the simplification from the stew of words.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2021
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Calling this form a 'Pantswap' put visions of undressing in my mind... perhaps not the right frame of mind to assess your poem. I can see that it takes concentration and skill to arrange the lines and mix them up, while still trying to progress the poem. I particularly liked this line: 'deceit can creep when minds are set.' However, I am not a fan of these repetition-based poems. I find myself trying to pick out the simplification from the stew of words.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2021
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Thanks Jenny, for these constructive comments and review, blessings Roy
Comment from Mary Vigasin
I do not know poetry forms so I have to look at what beauty, meaning, and of course, creativity there are in the words. This hits every single one of these. I am particularly drawn to the last two stanzas that a good soul dies without guidance. - very powerful.
Blessings,
Mary
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2021
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I do not know poetry forms so I have to look at what beauty, meaning, and of course, creativity there are in the words. This hits every single one of these. I am particularly drawn to the last two stanzas that a good soul dies without guidance. - very powerful.
Blessings,
Mary
Comment Written 31-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2021
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Thanks Mary, for these encouraging comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Ulla
Oh dear, Roy. I'm really up the creek here aren't I? Not only do I not know a great deal about poetic forms, but on top of that I'm not a great believer as you know. So this is really a double yammy for me.
But I did love reading your poem. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2021
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Oh dear, Roy. I'm really up the creek here aren't I? Not only do I not know a great deal about poetic forms, but on top of that I'm not a great believer as you know. So this is really a double yammy for me.
But I did love reading your poem. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 31-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2021
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Thanks Ulla, for these thoughtful comments and review, blessings Roy
Comment from Teri7
Roy, You did a really good job with this complicated and hard format. You used very good descriptive words, art work that fits so well and a great scripture. Thank you for sharing! Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2021
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Roy, You did a really good job with this complicated and hard format. You used very good descriptive words, art work that fits so well and a great scripture. Thank you for sharing! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 31-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2021
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Thanks Teri, for these encouraging comments and a great review, blessings Roy
