Renga Multi-Author Book
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "The Snowy Freeze"Renga is a Japanese linked poetry 5/7/5 and 7/7
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Comment from lightink
You created a wonderful juxtaposition of a more rigid and cold world (even the sound of the words chosen) and a softer soothing one - capturing both the dangerous nature of winter and calming effects of snow.
Lovely addition!
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020
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You created a wonderful juxtaposition of a more rigid and cold world (even the sound of the words chosen) and a softer soothing one - capturing both the dangerous nature of winter and calming effects of snow.
Lovely addition!
Comment Written 19-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020
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Thank you for your review, glad you enjoyed this short complete, love Dolly x
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
What a great way of getting other authors involved in a book of poetry. Gypsy Rose is also a great poet who does review my poems from time to time. Like your deep freeze. But I'm so glad its summer when I look at your image.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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What a great way of getting other authors involved in a book of poetry. Gypsy Rose is also a great poet who does review my poems from time to time. Like your deep freeze. But I'm so glad its summer when I look at your image.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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Thank you Rosemary for your review, glad you enjoyed this contribution to Gypsy Rose?s book on Fanstory, love Dolly x
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Dolly
Thank you very much for adding a chapter to our renga book. Great imagery with well chosen words. Beautiful presentation. Goog ranga form. You pivoted from Autumn to winter.. nicely done.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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Hello, Dolly
Thank you very much for adding a chapter to our renga book. Great imagery with well chosen words. Beautiful presentation. Goog ranga form. You pivoted from Autumn to winter.. nicely done.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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Thank you for your review, glad I did your book justice, I appreciate your words here, love Dolly x
Comment from lyenochka
Thank you for joining the book, Dolly! I love the switch into full winter in your poem with the ice that grips and the resulting peaceful silence. Liked the alliteration and consonance of 's' sounds.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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Thank you for joining the book, Dolly! I love the switch into full winter in your poem with the ice that grips and the resulting peaceful silence. Liked the alliteration and consonance of 's' sounds.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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Thank you Helen for your review, this is the first time I have joined someone?s book and I didn?t know quite how to do it at first, but this is a fun collection of short poems, I have enjoyed all the contributions, glad you liked this couplet, love Dolly x
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So glad that you joined!!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and
presentation, Dolly.
-A good follow up to
the previous poem.
-It is interesting how the
progression of poems is
going by season.
-I like the imagery and
verb choices to show how the
freezing "grips" the earth,
then is calmed with silence.
-A very good addition to the book.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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-Nice artwork and
presentation, Dolly.
-A good follow up to
the previous poem.
-It is interesting how the
progression of poems is
going by season.
-I like the imagery and
verb choices to show how the
freezing "grips" the earth,
then is calmed with silence.
-A very good addition to the book.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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Thank you Pam for your review, glad you enjoyed this couplet for Gypsy?s little book, love Dolly x
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You are very welcome, Dolly.
Comment from rama devi
Excellent continuance. I was thinking of adding to the book after the most recent three liner, but you beat me to it! So now I'll think of adding after this one!
Superb phrasing phonics with all the S and soft C sounds!
I love the subtle personification here, and the fine voicing. I also love the dramatic first line resolving into calm silence in the second....
That's my cue!
Love,
rd
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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Excellent continuance. I was thinking of adding to the book after the most recent three liner, but you beat me to it! So now I'll think of adding after this one!
Superb phrasing phonics with all the S and soft C sounds!
I love the subtle personification here, and the fine voicing. I also love the dramatic first line resolving into calm silence in the second....
That's my cue!
Love,
rd
Comment Written 19-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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Thank you Rama for your thoughtful review, much appreciated, love Dolly x
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Sure thing, Dolly. Your book inspired me to add one! :) xxoo
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Great!
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Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
It is almost as if there has been a Mandate to stop all action. No more growth. Almost like lockdowns. Sleep and rest for the next episode. Yes, it is very quiet in the Winter when the freeze comes. Nice art.
Ralf
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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It is almost as if there has been a Mandate to stop all action. No more growth. Almost like lockdowns. Sleep and rest for the next episode. Yes, it is very quiet in the Winter when the freeze comes. Nice art.
Ralf
Comment Written 19-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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Thank you Raffaelina for your review, much appreciated, love Dolly x
Comment from Mrs. KT
Good Morning, Dolly,
Lovely couplet! And not only does it follow/tag onto June's Haiku beautifully, but you have captured the essence of winter where this reader resides. While I often tire of the cold, I never tire of winter's "calm, with peaceful silence."
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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Good Morning, Dolly,
Lovely couplet! And not only does it follow/tag onto June's Haiku beautifully, but you have captured the essence of winter where this reader resides. While I often tire of the cold, I never tire of winter's "calm, with peaceful silence."
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 19-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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Thank you Diane for your review, and I am so glad you liked this, love Dolly x
Comment from Sally Law
The icy winter is here in the book. I love the flow of these from season to season. Beautifully penned and illustrated, dear Solly. A fine offering for the book. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal xoxo
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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The icy winter is here in the book. I love the flow of these from season to season. Beautifully penned and illustrated, dear Solly. A fine offering for the book. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal xoxo
Comment Written 19-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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Thank you Sally for your review, much appreciated, enjoy the rest of your Sunday, love Dolly x
Comment from June Sargent
So happy to see you join the fun! This was a fitting couplet leading us into winter. I am thoroughly enjoying this book of Renga. And can't wait to see how it evolves.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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So happy to see you join the fun! This was a fitting couplet leading us into winter. I am thoroughly enjoying this book of Renga. And can't wait to see how it evolves.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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Thank you June for your review, I had written another couplet but before I could post it there were other contributions, so I had to change it! I appreciate your words, love Dolly x
