Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

Lilacs are my favorite scented plant or flower as you will and this one is great with the two lines of imagery then you really rocked it with the satori

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2017

Hi Barb,

This one was just a bit of fanciful fun :) I got carried away with the fairies and ended up chasing butterflies. Thank you for the fantastic comments.

Happy Easter!

Kim

Comment from strandregs

Excellent

Deserves a six
scent saitional
definitly international.
so clever it will bloom forever.
the beauty and the beast .fashion and nature.
shiver me timbers.
very well done.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2017

Hi Strandregs:

A virtual six always makes me smile! This one was just some fun and fancy. Thank you for the wonderful review.

Kim

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written haiku. When Spring arives at last it is never ashamed to shows the boldest colors. There is no holding back, they are blooming in abundance. A very good photograph.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2017

Hi Sandra,

I had fun with this one. I don't write haiku very often, but playing around with a few ideas yielded this one, and I couldn't resist posting. Thanks for the lovely comments.

Kim

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

What a fun Haiku! I know that butterflies taste with their feet so the fact that the "lilac hues" of the flowers of the butterfly bush grace the butterfly's "shoes" are perfect. I love the smell of the butterfly bush/buddleia.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2017

Hi lyenochka,

Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review. I'm so happy that you enjoyed this haiku. I love that you pointed out that butterflies also taste with their feet. I appreciate your comments.

Kim

Comment from honeytree

Excellent

The art work and colours
are really great here
Spring time is a very
special season in everyway.
So much has been said
in a few words.

Honey tree

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2017

Hi Annie,

Thank you for taking the time to read and review my haiku. I truly appreciate your comments.

Kim

Comment from CD Richards

Excellent

I really do like this, the first two lines flow well, and the satori is very clever. Your second line has 8 syllables, as you no doubt are aware. Is this allowed, if the total doesn't exceed 17? I'm not sure, haven't heard of that being the case before, but that doesn't mean anything. Great job, and best of luck in the contest. Craig

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017

Hi Craig,

It is allowed. 5-7-5 is just a guideline. As long as you don't exceed the seventeen syllables you are within the parameters of the form.

This is a good definition from simplytom.com (I have no idea why he didn't mention the satori though, just keeping it simple, I suppose.)

Haiku is a traditional Japanese poetry form composed of 3 lines of 5, 7, and 5 syllables respectively. Actually, in Japanese they're usually written in one line, but still considered 3 separate units. Contemporary international haiku usually relaxes the syllable-count restriction. In English haiku, 1-3 lines of 17 syllables or less is the norm (14 syllables is often recommended). Haiku are poems about nature and generally follow the principles of minimalism and immediacy. Immediacy refers to the sense of a scene being directly presented to your senses. A haiku tries to capture a concrete image in place and time. A season word is usually required in the traditional form to place a poem in a specific season. A cutting word is also common to direct the flow of the poem.

Thanks for taking the time to read and review.

Kim

reply by CD Richards on 16-Apr-2017

Cool :)

reply by the author on 16-Apr-2017

Gloria won the contest.

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

Kim, far be it for me to enter a debate about what is needed for great haiku with ANYONE, but just a thought to add to your notes (the poem is perfect) - mention the kire (cutting line). It is so important to include the explanation that the two images must be joined and concrete, IMO. So often I see postings of 'haiku' that do not follow those guidelines, and it is such a tiny form...

Yours is simply beautiful, with a wonderful satori that will have me smiling all night!

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017

Thanks, Dawn!

I knew I was forgetting something lol I wasn't going to put notes at all, but FS just doesn't do a good job of explaining it in their contest guidelines at all (my opinion) And you know me, I'm all about the notes lol (and didn't want multiple reviewers telling me that my haiku had to be 5-7-5 ;)

I'll add that bit to the notes!! Thanks for taking the time to read and review.

Kim

reply by Dawn Munro on 15-Apr-2017

It was my pleasure - thank YOU for such a gracious response - I hesitate sometimes after unpleasant reactions to any suggestion...LOL. But then that member often loses my interest - there are too many others' work to enjoy to tolerate someone who takes offense easily. :))

Comment from damommy

Excellent

This is fantastic. I love "butterfly shoes."

This is a lovely haiku you have written. I don't know how to write them, but I know a good one when I see it.

Happy Easter. Good luck in the contest. 8-)

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017

Hi Yvonne!

Thanks for taking the time to read and review. I don't write haiku all that often, this one just came out of some brainstorming when I was writing last night and I wanted to get it in before the wire. I've written two versions of my birthday memento poem now, and am about to start a third lol perhaps I'll come up with one that I like.

Happy Easter!

Kim

Comment from kahpot

Excellent

Yes what a great way to express spring with the wonderful fragrances in the air butterflies dancing everywhere very well done and happy easter****kahpot

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 Comment Written 15-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017

Hi kahpot,

Thanks for taking the time to read and review! I appreciate the delightful comments.

Kim

Comment from Nikki-Nicole

Excellent

This is a great Haiku.
It consists of three lines.
Each line has a syllable count: 4-8-4
The overall syllable count: 16
Beautiful artwork: The image is a good match for this poem.
Best of luck to you in the contest!
Thanks for sharing your poem.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-

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 Comment Written 15-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017

Hi Nicole,

Thank you for taking the time to read and review. I appreciate your comments.

Kim