Life's Choices
Which way to go...?15 total reviews
Comment from cumulus365
Wonderful way to remind us all that the bad seed one sows will result in bad deed and that will stay in eternity, and the good seed one sows will result in good deed and will stay in eternity. Your poem format has a rhyming scheme that makes it easier to read and follow the flow of the thought. Don't let hatred be your guide, let love and understanding, live with kindness to others, you will feel complete. Your poem is clear with good advice to live kindly to others. Your poem did not use other poetic techniques such as simile and metaphor to enhance your message. Your illustration you chose is interesting. Nice work. Best.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2016
Wonderful way to remind us all that the bad seed one sows will result in bad deed and that will stay in eternity, and the good seed one sows will result in good deed and will stay in eternity. Your poem format has a rhyming scheme that makes it easier to read and follow the flow of the thought. Don't let hatred be your guide, let love and understanding, live with kindness to others, you will feel complete. Your poem is clear with good advice to live kindly to others. Your poem did not use other poetic techniques such as simile and metaphor to enhance your message. Your illustration you chose is interesting. Nice work. Best.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2016
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Thank you, cumulus, for those appropriate observations and words, and your kind and generous review. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Well written poem expressing two kinds of choices.
-Good meter, rhyme, and flow of ideas.
-I like the beginning how the words in your head are talking to you.
-Very good conclusion:
"The flame of love lives in your soul,
please let it burn, and you'll be whole."
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2016
-Well written poem expressing two kinds of choices.
-Good meter, rhyme, and flow of ideas.
-I like the beginning how the words in your head are talking to you.
-Very good conclusion:
"The flame of love lives in your soul,
please let it burn, and you'll be whole."
Comment Written 19-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2016
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Respa. Thank you so much for your kind and generous comments and review. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
A very good work. Enjoyed the rhythm, rhyme and meter very much. It flowed so easily when read aloud and made this a most enjoyable read for this reviewer. Great job. God bless and hugs, Susanne
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2016
A very good work. Enjoyed the rhythm, rhyme and meter very much. It flowed so easily when read aloud and made this a most enjoyable read for this reviewer. Great job. God bless and hugs, Susanne
Comment Written 19-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2016
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Susanne. Thank you so much for your kind and generous comments and review. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. We always have a choice. We can go the right way or the wrong way. Sometimes we choose wrong and we have to live with the consequences of our choice.
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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2016
A very well-written poem. We always have a choice. We can go the right way or the wrong way. Sometimes we choose wrong and we have to live with the consequences of our choice.
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Comment Written 19-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2016
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Sandra, Thank you so much for your kind and generous comments and review. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from foxangie123
A most superb and outstanding poem you have created here that has both great advice and wisdom. You wrote a golden piece that I hope all will be able to read as it is truly exceptional. Keep em coming please.
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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2016
A most superb and outstanding poem you have created here that has both great advice and wisdom. You wrote a golden piece that I hope all will be able to read as it is truly exceptional. Keep em coming please.
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Comment Written 19-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2016
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Thank you so much, Angie, for your warm and kind review. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)