Dark Covenant
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "A Race with the Moon"The Berwick Witches Series: Book One
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Comment from Ric Myworld
Plenty of excitement to keep us readers pinned to our seats and trying to guess at what will happen next. Thanks for the pleasure of reading another fine chapter. :-)
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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Plenty of excitement to keep us readers pinned to our seats and trying to guess at what will happen next. Thanks for the pleasure of reading another fine chapter. :-)
Comment Written 25-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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Thank you, Ric.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Good strong characters that you present so well - I know I'm not familiar with the story, but this was easy to follow.
at least they stopped shooting at each other and came out to talk, meeting in the neutral zone.
Dad(,) where can Mom be?
Most impressive, Amahra.
Margaret
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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Good strong characters that you present so well - I know I'm not familiar with the story, but this was easy to follow.
at least they stopped shooting at each other and came out to talk, meeting in the neutral zone.
Dad(,) where can Mom be?
Most impressive, Amahra.
Margaret
Comment Written 25-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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Thanks, Margaret. I'll make that correction.
Comment from pbroussard209
this was a great chapter, and I love the part about Abby being late. I have two teenage daughters and this is exactly how I feel every time one of them is late. This was an action filled chapter bringing everything together and beginning a new element.
Trish
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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this was a great chapter, and I love the part about Abby being late. I have two teenage daughters and this is exactly how I feel every time one of them is late. This was an action filled chapter bringing everything together and beginning a new element.
Trish
Comment Written 25-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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Thank you, Trish. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from chasennov
Chapter 12 of the book Dark Covenant The Berwick Witches Series: Book One "A Race with the Moon" I enjoyed this chapter on supernatural fiction you have created here. Well done.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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Chapter 12 of the book Dark Covenant The Berwick Witches Series: Book One "A Race with the Moon" I enjoyed this chapter on supernatural fiction you have created here. Well done.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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Thank you very much.
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You are most welcome.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Very good chapter, both parts. I'm glad the guys were able to stop that foolish war. Now they need a hiding place and/or the cure mixed up for all of them. I'm thinking they should all go far away, leaving now, and chain down in a cave or old mine... someplace soundproof. If they hang around the area, their howling is sure to give them away.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2015
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Very good chapter, both parts. I'm glad the guys were able to stop that foolish war. Now they need a hiding place and/or the cure mixed up for all of them. I'm thinking they should all go far away, leaving now, and chain down in a cave or old mine... someplace soundproof. If they hang around the area, their howling is sure to give them away.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2015
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Hey, Phyllis, have you been talking to my muse. I told her not to talk to anyone about that cave. Now I've got to find another hiding place. Damn my muse. LOL! Thanks, Phyllis.
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LOL! Don't be too hard on her. I had her in chains with a chainsaw buzzing over her head. Works every time. :)
Comment from DebbieAz
It's staged in Illinois, do the werewolves have FOID cards to own those guns? lol, just kidding. I'm from Illinois and there are more things to be scared of than werewolfs :) I like the atmosphere of the characters, it's 'believable' in that sense (fantasy elements aside). Maybe a bit more spice in the standoff, when Crane stops agressing because of fear of the shadow hunters, but comes out and wants to look tough in front of Dex. Maybe more visceral mental with that transition, as it is a pivot point of the drama. sometimes when a lot of names are flying around, especially with dialogue, I felt a little lost. When you re-write think about presenting this to the reader, kind of like putting a bouncing ball over the words of a song on the screen, to help the reader track transitions and characters better. but overall it is good, you got a good basic frame and story and could get interesting. I look forward to reading more.
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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2015
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It's staged in Illinois, do the werewolves have FOID cards to own those guns? lol, just kidding. I'm from Illinois and there are more things to be scared of than werewolfs :) I like the atmosphere of the characters, it's 'believable' in that sense (fantasy elements aside). Maybe a bit more spice in the standoff, when Crane stops agressing because of fear of the shadow hunters, but comes out and wants to look tough in front of Dex. Maybe more visceral mental with that transition, as it is a pivot point of the drama. sometimes when a lot of names are flying around, especially with dialogue, I felt a little lost. When you re-write think about presenting this to the reader, kind of like putting a bouncing ball over the words of a song on the screen, to help the reader track transitions and characters better. but overall it is good, you got a good basic frame and story and could get interesting. I look forward to reading more.
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Comment Written 24-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2015
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Thanks.
Comment from Jay Squires
Whoa, this story's developing well, Ama. With Dex and Crane together again at least they'll have a common front against the Dominions.
Some very strong writing, Ama. If I had a six you'd get it for this one
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2015
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Whoa, this story's developing well, Ama. With Dex and Crane together again at least they'll have a common front against the Dominions.
Some very strong writing, Ama. If I had a six you'd get it for this one
Comment Written 24-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2015
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Thank you, Jay. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from c_lucas
Will the spell work or will there be more chaos? This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2015
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Will the spell work or will there be more chaos? This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2015
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Keep tuned in. Thank you, Charlie.
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You're welcome, Amahra. Chalrie
Comment from donastell20
I enjoyed reading this, as it captured my attention all the way through.
I liked the characters and the detail you input.
Thank you for sharing it.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2015
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I enjoyed reading this, as it captured my attention all the way through.
I liked the characters and the detail you input.
Thank you for sharing it.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2015
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Thank you.
Comment from royowen
River is elated that Jewel has ben elevated to Witch Queen, with more power and independence than before! Also the potential war between the northern and southern clans has been averted by the possibility of the coming of the dread shadow hunters, and the spell that might break the curse. And so after a break Amahra, you appear to be "back in the saddle" well done, as absorbing as ever, Blessings, Roy. Spag:- Another one of your spoil brats,= spoiled I think.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2015
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River is elated that Jewel has ben elevated to Witch Queen, with more power and independence than before! Also the potential war between the northern and southern clans has been averted by the possibility of the coming of the dread shadow hunters, and the spell that might break the curse. And so after a break Amahra, you appear to be "back in the saddle" well done, as absorbing as ever, Blessings, Roy. Spag:- Another one of your spoil brats,= spoiled I think.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2015
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Hi Roy. Sorry for the delay in posting. I was promoting my new book. T he Glass Cat Eye. I'm so glad you read and reviewed me. I'll look into that word, spoil[ed].
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Well done, hope it does well Amahra, Roy.
