Comment from Winbow

Excellent

A woman in all the essence. So immaculately and creatively described. Only a true lady can feel and write so beautifully.
Pili this poem speaks and paints such a gentle picture, yet it seems to be surrounded by a web. I guess many of us are caught in a web of our past. Happy and sad memories alike. This is where the bit about believing and living like a child becomes important. Our four legged friends teach us this. Always ready for a cuddle, unconditionally.
Take Care
Desiree

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2005

Comment from Lisloh

Excellent

You are truly aware of the feminine spirit.
Description of [woman] is perfect.
This may not be biographical, but it is woman.

am
a woman,
only.

How to
take back,
what was
given in love.

How to erase
all that it was,
to pretend
by denial,
that we never
unfolded
our body
and soul.

Thank you for creating this and sharing.
Take care & be safe
Lisloh

No nits. Awesome write

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2005

Comment from ROCHELLE MOORE

Excellent

beautiful descriptive poem about the essence of a woman
i always like your work and this one i particularly liked
really well written piece of work
full of beautiful womanly imagery

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2005

Comment from Ronni

Excellent

What a truly exquisite and captivating reflection of being a woman! Truly,
Pili, you do womanhood; especially yours, so proud and profound with
this enigmatic poem! If we didn't know it or were not aware of it already;
you certainly have enlightened and inspired us with this terrific piece
that just flows with so much energy and effervescence! Thank you.

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2005

Comment from Seancuig

Excellent

I think there is more to this one than I see at first glance.
It's a great read, but some mixed messages running through it. Stanza 3 is particularly good. I love the idea of our body and soul unfolding.

Cheers
Sean

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2005

Comment from Mrs Jones

Excellent

I read it loud a few times Pili and I really like it.
"Memories
know
from each tremor
of passion,
nurtured
in truth."
Did you mean this stanza to overflow into the next? If not it would have to be memories known. I am not quite sure.
Cheers to you.

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2005

Comment from Wendyanne

Excellent

This is an insightful poem Pili. "In my longing I have forsaken all, in exchange for a smile." How many of us can relate to that line. Well done.

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2005

Comment from bayley

Excellent

This seems to hold a sense of frustration, disappointment and unfulfilled experiences. I sense that there are emotions being held back and that if fully released they may be overwhelming for her. I'm probably way off the mark. I love your word flow and the mood that they create. Lovely piece, Pili ~Sean

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2005

Comment from bfonf

Excellent

Great poem and I really liked the artwork, very abstract and mind-bending. The poem flows well and I like the repetition of "I am a woman." Good ending.

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2005

Comment from sengwriter

Excellent

A poised moment of settling in your mind and soul. Your memories of a love - a love so real but becoming a things of the past, making you dissecting with all rationality.

So cool and sound, so calm and peaceful atmosphere that you've created throughout the poem as if a huge mountain facing a hurricane seemingly unaltered and as settled as it was.

The first and the last stanza is matched beautifully and a good thought perhaps inspired you to compose those two well matched sequential lines.

Reality now,
is a past
without
explicate, (explication perhaps suits best) One of my loved lines.

~ Gautam

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2005