Double tragedy
Where are the Martin Luther Kings when they are needed?29 total reviews
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Dallas - I loved how you crafted this one with imagery easily recognizable and powerful. The brushfires perfectly showcasing the end result...no one wins at all. Great submission with this one.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Dear Dallas - I loved how you crafted this one with imagery easily recognizable and powerful. The brushfires perfectly showcasing the end result...no one wins at all. Great submission with this one.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Thanks for the kind review. Maureen.
Comment from Nosha17
Basically, the human race has become so depraved it does not recognise the meaning of peaceful demonstration . There are no leaders left who promote peace they just incite hatred. Well chosen imagery and words to convey your message. Enjoyable read. Good luck in the contest Faye
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Basically, the human race has become so depraved it does not recognise the meaning of peaceful demonstration . There are no leaders left who promote peace they just incite hatred. Well chosen imagery and words to convey your message. Enjoyable read. Good luck in the contest Faye
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from c_lucas
Some hide their vile deeds behind the cross. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Some hide their vile deeds behind the cross. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Thanks for reviewing.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Titan Black
This is something of a truly explosive nature.
Not that i need to be politically correct, but
this was a very interesting topic with words of
substance. Very creative. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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This is something of a truly explosive nature.
Not that i need to be politically correct, but
this was a very interesting topic with words of
substance. Very creative. Keep writing.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the kind review. Intended as an observation, only. Very sad.
Comment from TAB_that's me
This is a great poem for the free verse contest. There are so many sad incidents and horrific happenings these days. Good luck to you.
teresa
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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This is a great poem for the free verse contest. There are so many sad incidents and horrific happenings these days. Good luck to you.
teresa
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from tfawcus
The metaphor of the brushfire is most appropriate here. How very soon they get out of control, destroying everything in their path. The imagery in this poem is original and telling. I particularly liked the lines about sympathy and empathy giving up in the smoke of civil disobedience. A powerful piece of writing for this contest. I hope it does as well as it deserves.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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The metaphor of the brushfire is most appropriate here. How very soon they get out of control, destroying everything in their path. The imagery in this poem is original and telling. I particularly liked the lines about sympathy and empathy giving up in the smoke of civil disobedience. A powerful piece of writing for this contest. I hope it does as well as it deserves.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Thanks for the detailed review concerning the mechanics of the writing.
Comment from padumachitta
Hi. A super free verse. It has strong images and a stronger message. When do the opressed become the opressors? When is 'revolution' just an excuse for vilolence. And it is always the poor who suffer, always the poor neighbourhoods that get trshed. i have always wondered why rioters trahs their won home...
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Hi. A super free verse. It has strong images and a stronger message. When do the opressed become the opressors? When is 'revolution' just an excuse for vilolence. And it is always the poor who suffer, always the poor neighbourhoods that get trshed. i have always wondered why rioters trahs their won home...
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Thanks for the kind review.
Comment from Joan E.
Your social commentary is very powerful. I particularly admired your compelling "birth canal" metaphor. "Double Tragedy" is the perfect title for your observations. Best wishes in the free verse contest. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Your social commentary is very powerful. I particularly admired your compelling "birth canal" metaphor. "Double Tragedy" is the perfect title for your observations. Best wishes in the free verse contest. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Thanks for reviewing, Joan, and recognizing that this was written as an observation, as opposed to any social commentary.
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Smiles- Joan
Comment from CHIGYSISKI
WHEN THERE IS VIOLENCE, BE IT A WAR SITUATION OR RIOTS, DESTRUCTION IS IMMENSE. AND OFTEN THE THINGS THAT NEED TO BE REBUILT GO BEYOND THE LOOTED SHOPS AND BURNT CARS BUT THE HARD TO RESTORE RESPECT AND LOVE FOR NEIGHBORS OF A DIFFERENT COLORATION.GREAT JOB!!
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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WHEN THERE IS VIOLENCE, BE IT A WAR SITUATION OR RIOTS, DESTRUCTION IS IMMENSE. AND OFTEN THE THINGS THAT NEED TO BE REBUILT GO BEYOND THE LOOTED SHOPS AND BURNT CARS BUT THE HARD TO RESTORE RESPECT AND LOVE FOR NEIGHBORS OF A DIFFERENT COLORATION.GREAT JOB!!
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from ravenblack
There are still plenty of King's. Look at Ron Johnson- a peace maker who, with a gentle touch, has kept it together. Also on the ground are reverends, community leaders- all who had to step in and calm things down after the police used tear gas on peaceful protesters, arrested journalists, brought in apc' s -all while never being forthcoming with any information and on the heels of such incidents as the black man in New York killed in a choke hold...for selling cigarettes. I don't condone the rage, but I condone looting or violence which ,by the way, has only been from folks coming from outside of Fergusen. Where are the King' s must be asked hand in hand with where is the fair application of justice and whatever happened to good policing.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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There are still plenty of King's. Look at Ron Johnson- a peace maker who, with a gentle touch, has kept it together. Also on the ground are reverends, community leaders- all who had to step in and calm things down after the police used tear gas on peaceful protesters, arrested journalists, brought in apc' s -all while never being forthcoming with any information and on the heels of such incidents as the black man in New York killed in a choke hold...for selling cigarettes. I don't condone the rage, but I condone looting or violence which ,by the way, has only been from folks coming from outside of Fergusen. Where are the King' s must be asked hand in hand with where is the fair application of justice and whatever happened to good policing.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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I saw this evening where the ministers will be out tonight in full force, hopefully that will help. Johnson is a hero. This piece is not a judgment, but rather an observation. Hopefully the issue does not get tangled up in the actions of a few.
