Someone turned me inside out.
Ever had a problem getting centered?22 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
A dark version of "Alice in Wonderland"! You certainly communicated the disorientation, and the cascade of "d's" and "s's" plus the rhymes added to the intensity. Here's to getting centered- Joan
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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A dark version of "Alice in Wonderland"! You certainly communicated the disorientation, and the cascade of "d's" and "s's" plus the rhymes added to the intensity. Here's to getting centered- Joan
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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I manage to get there sometimes but maintaining can be a different story.
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Join the club! ;) -Joan
Comment from Christine B.
Gorgeous, gorgeously wrapped with essence. Being lost and, involuntarily spilled into life's chatter and clutter, in a daze while wondering of all the ways to be and to not be. Truly a poem.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Gorgeous, gorgeously wrapped with essence. Being lost and, involuntarily spilled into life's chatter and clutter, in a daze while wondering of all the ways to be and to not be. Truly a poem.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thanks for the detailed review.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I have had many days where it just seems I can't get my act together. Of course, I spend my days teaching six year olds, so that might cause some of it. LOL I enjoyed reading this well written poem.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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I have had many days where it just seems I can't get my act together. Of course, I spend my days teaching six year olds, so that might cause some of it. LOL I enjoyed reading this well written poem.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thanks for reviewing. Getting centered is easier than staying centered. lol
Comment from TAB_that's me
It sounds like your life is a little topsy-turvy right now. I sure know how that feels:) This is a fun little poem to read.
Teresa
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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It sounds like your life is a little topsy-turvy right now. I sure know how that feels:) This is a fun little poem to read.
Teresa
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Just a tad. Thanks or reviewing.
Comment from Tonulak
Dear Dallas Alice,
This was a corking good poem. There was very nice with contradicting opposits, but your closing lines about the fireworksknocked me out and pushed it over the edge for this six. I was thinking, "Damn, I wish I had written that!". Great write--Ted
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Dear Dallas Alice,
This was a corking good poem. There was very nice with contradicting opposits, but your closing lines about the fireworksknocked me out and pushed it over the edge for this six. I was thinking, "Damn, I wish I had written that!". Great write--Ted
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much for the great review, Ted. I really value a six coming from you.
Comment from kiwijenny
Yes I have a problem being centered ...I am jet lagged and days are nights and nights are days...but the world goes on expecting me to function and being turned inside out is exactly how I feel....good job Dallas
God bless
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Yes I have a problem being centered ...I am jet lagged and days are nights and nights are days...but the world goes on expecting me to function and being turned inside out is exactly how I feel....good job Dallas
God bless
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thanks for reviewing. Getting centered is easier than staying there.
Comment from Dawny53
Spilling silence as I scatter.. what a perfect ending to this poem! The entire read was just like being in your imagination right along with you! Excellent work and I really enjoyed it
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Spilling silence as I scatter.. what a perfect ending to this poem! The entire read was just like being in your imagination right along with you! Excellent work and I really enjoyed it
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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thanks for reviewing and the creative comment. Not sure you would ever want to be in my head. It gets so busy sometimes it's like rush hour in NYC.
Comment from adewpearl
effective use of occasional rhyming
good alliteration in fading in the fireworks and in
spilling silence as I scatter
compelling expression of emotion with strong visuals
Brooke
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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effective use of occasional rhyming
good alliteration in fading in the fireworks and in
spilling silence as I scatter
compelling expression of emotion with strong visuals
Brooke
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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thanks for reviewing, Brooke.
Comment from Cin
Regularly have a problem getting centred - particularly when I'm back at work and feel like I have a billion things to do - I love the contrasts provided by the poem - because when you really mull over the words - it's kinda mind-boggling :-)
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Regularly have a problem getting centred - particularly when I'm back at work and feel like I have a billion things to do - I love the contrasts provided by the poem - because when you really mull over the words - it's kinda mind-boggling :-)
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thanks for reviewing. sounds like you know what it is like to have a mind that never stops.
Comment from dragonpoet
I like the sense of spilling silence which is what fireworks do after they open. Light and silence. You're poem uses opposites that can't happen to show the randomness and crazinees of life.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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I like the sense of spilling silence which is what fireworks do after they open. Light and silence. You're poem uses opposites that can't happen to show the randomness and crazinees of life.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thanks for reviewing.
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No problem. It is one reason we are here.
dragonpoet
