Comment from Glasstruth

Excellent

LOL. Love the rhythm and the quick rhyming. The syllable count is right on. Sounds awesome when read aloud. I can see why this is a winner. Well done! Les

 Comment Written 30-May-2014

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reply by the author on 31-May-2014

Thanks, Les.

It was a little tricky to get this flowing around the strict syllable requirements so I was happy to get it spot on.

Steve

Comment from Cumbrianlass

Excellent

I am not in the least surprised this won, Steve. It's brilliant. The Kiwi is a funny little bird - I had no idea they once flew! Excellent poem, and fascinating author notes. I have to say, whenever I see 'Kiwi', I think of shoe polish. Memories of childhood! LOL!

Av

 Comment Written 30-May-2014

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reply by the author on 31-May-2014

Thanks, Av.

I think that you can still get Kiwi polish here!

Steve

Comment from amada

Excellent

Congratulations in winning the contest. Very well deserved! It's amazing to learn about this amazing lovely bird in a rhyming Whitney form. Well done.

 Comment Written 30-May-2014

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reply by the author on 31-May-2014

Thank you!

Steve

Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep

Excellent

This is fabulous, Steve, really clever wording. And the poor old Kiwi even has to 'scuttle' around at night. It's a great double Whitney which should do well in the competition. My very best wishes, Giddy

 Comment Written 30-May-2014

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reply by the author on 30-May-2014

Thanks, Giddy.

Cuteness factor of the kiwi won the day!

Steve

Comment from closetpoetjester

Excellent

Dammit no sixers bro! Loved this kiwi fun fact and I reckon he sounds like the bad ass cuzz of the emu from here Down Under...they are huge cumbersome creatures with tiny flightless wings, they lay a damn boulder, the bloke looks after the egg too...but get this...the crushed up shell is, wait for it...an aphrodisiac...pretty legendary huh? LOL
Great little romping ditty from your flightless bird. WISH I had a six for your impeccable rhyming ability, not to mention your enviable comic timing. Well done!
Cheers P

 Comment Written 29-May-2014

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reply by the author on 30-May-2014

I DID know that the kiwi was a distant relative of the emu, although now supplanted by the elephant bird, I DID NOT know anything about the alleged properties of the emu's egg.

Saw quite a few of those critters when we lived in Longreach for a year, even had one in our back yard. They were a lot easier to spot than those damned elusive cassowaries that we failed to see in ten years in FNQ...

Very pleased to see this one knock Brooke off her perch - how the hell do you get 1400 fans?

Steve

reply by closetpoetjester on 01-Jun-2014

Re: the emu...well you KNOW now! LOL
Re: Brooke...you must find time to befriend and review EVERY newbie that comes here and give great advice, thoughtful reviews and be available for comment in forums, conduct classes and have a very cute grandchild to write the most wonderful observational poetry about. I swear she is elastic woman. Everywhere at once and without even breaking out a sweat.
She DID tell me once she only had two plates, bowls, cups etc...less washing up = more time for FS LMAO

I'm kidding! She is LEGENDARY and I dunno how she squeezes SO much time INTO the day...and night.

Good luck with that!

reply by the author on 01-Jun-2014

Yeah, all adds up to DEDICATION.

I've noticed it before with those who rise to the top in any area - you always wonder 'How the hell do they find the time?'

I'm guessing she's on her own - don't see how a marriage would stand the strain - although she still finds time for family....

Super impressive, which is why, on the rare occasions I can push her into second place, I know I've really earned it! :O)

Steve

Comment from lancellot

Excellent

ha. This is very funny and nicely written. I saw this contest, but it is way beyond my skills. You did a great job on both halves and linking them.

 Comment Written 29-May-2014

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reply by the author on 30-May-2014

Thank you.

Yes, this is a new form for me and getting it to flow around the syllable requirements was a challenge.

Steve

Comment from Just2Write

Exceptional

This poem was absolutely fun - and also darned informative (I had to go and look it up on Wikipedia)

The rhyme scheme is like a limerick and has a similar twist to it. Great to have a national symbol that is so cute. Ours is the Beaver - go figure.

Loved this.
Rose.

 Comment Written 29-May-2014

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reply by the author on 30-May-2014

At least the beaver has got some defence against every stray dog or feral cat that wanders into the bush... and they're pretty darned cute in their own right.

Thanks for the great review and the six stars.

Steve

Comment from nelliesellie

Excellent

I love the picture. I love the poem. I love the kiwi bird. We call it a bird but it barely matches the description. Evolution can be strange It makes me wonder what humans would look like if a few thins were different. Great work...

 Comment Written 29-May-2014

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reply by the author on 30-May-2014

Thank you!

You are right - nature throws up plenty of curiosities.

Steve

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

This is a really good double Whitney. Excellent for the contest entry. Your rhyming is perfect and the poem very amusing and sounds as if it was written with ease. Good luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy

 Comment Written 29-May-2014

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reply by the author on 30-May-2014

Thanks, Dorothy

Written with the kind of ease that comes with a fair bit of effort! :O)

Steve

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

What a fun poem to read about the Kiwi bird written by KiwiSteven:) Great double whitney and the rhymes are great. good luck to you.
Teresa

 Comment Written 29-May-2014

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reply by the author on 30-May-2014

Thanks, Teresa!

Steve