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A Picture's Worth a Thousand Poems

Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "~A Warrior's Call~"
A compilation of pictapoems from my portfolio

61 total reviews 
Comment from Cookie333
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This one read with the tempo of a song, I imagine the tune you had in mind with the "Warrior's Call". These are great Dean and I know you have stated how difficult they are, but the presentation is fantastic,
thank you so very much,
k

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2013


reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
    I thank you for all of your fantastic support for this format, Cookie333. It has been very encouraging!
Comment from Writingfundimension
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Dean, you deliver the goods in spades with this powerful poem! I like this pictapoem style because I really enjoy adding graphics to enhance the impact of my writing - as you did so well here. I cannot really comment on the poetic elements except to say its rhyme and meter seemed excellent to my eye. Bravo on another fine offering.

Warmest regards, Bev

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2013


reply by the author on 26-Aug-2013
    Thank you very much, Bev. I really appreciate that, sincerely. This is a challenging style, one that I am committed to as long as there is an audience out there for it. So far, so good...

    Thanks, again!
reply by Writingfundimension on 26-Aug-2013
    You're most welcome, Dean. I like your innovative attitude! Warm regards, Bev
Comment from Twilightspire
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Man, I don't know who they are, but I'm itching for the fight. This is a perfect rallying cry. I loved the use of archaic language and the rhythm was perfect, I could literally hear the drums of war. Awesome job. Can I use this in my next D and D campaign. :)
-T.J.

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2013


reply by the author on 26-Aug-2013
    Hah, sure, TJ, use away, LOL. I am very glad you liked this one. A bit different for me, but I do love ancient history and am a big history buff, especially any and all wars.

    Thanks so much, again.
Comment from barleygirl
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This is a great poem, for this genre. I mentioned before it's not my favorite genre, but since you're a favorite on this website, I'm trying to broaden my horizons, so I can get to know your work. It's interesting you say (in notes) how you enjoyed writing this. But when I read about or watch violence & war, I feel tension, so I avoid it. I'm unable to make meaningful comments, but since I'm not good at understanding cryptic language, at least I followed your poem & understood your message!!! (Believe it or not, this is a big compliment!) Keep up the good work for those who love you & your work! *smile*

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2013


reply by the author on 26-Aug-2013
    Hah, I believe you, barleygirl, and thanks.

    We can't ignore the darker topics; ie, war, hunger, disease and suffering. To bury our heads in the sand and ignore the things going on all around us, each and everyday of our lives, is foolish. Just because we pretend that wars, and famine don't exist won't make them go away. They'll still be there when we come up for air, and stronger than ever.

    It's also essential to embrace love, and life, friendship and family. There can be no shimmering, twinkling stars without complete darkness, can there?

    Thanks again for yoyr wonderful review...
reply by barleygirl on 26-Aug-2013
    (((HUGS)))
Comment from Dustybones
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Very nice. I like the cry to battle and the paint is so fashionable. Now the armies wear coats of steel and electronic killing devices. Wouldn't it be better to go back to war painted from head to toe?

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2013


reply by the author on 26-Aug-2013
    I believe so, Dustybones. We are so technologically dependent on GPS satellites, computers, and other tech gizmos, what would we do if a pulse weapon were deployed against our technology, reducing us to bare bone fighting skills? I shudder to think...


    Thanks for the fantastic review and interesting insight.
Comment from Titanx9
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Dean, this rhythmic and stirring piece is so picturesque, so intense that your carefully chosen words in A Warrior Call bring to life a battle to the death between daring Highlanders and those from the west who dared tread upon their lands. It's well-written and evocative with its images of valleys running with blood and tearing flesh with fire and stones. There's excellent alliteration in highland hills, shimmering seas and to arm, to arm, etc. I like the metaphor in, "the valley crawls alive with men, a rising sea of hate." Overall, you penned quite a masterpiece! Well done. Dossie

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2013


reply by the author on 26-Aug-2013
    Thank you very much for that outstanding review, Titanx9. I sincerely appreciate that!
Comment from A Matter Of Words
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Oh Dean - It won't let me give you a six, which doesn't really matter because it is 10 want to give you. He is where you talent shines through. I am dumbstruck by A Warriors Call. Incredibly presentation, outstanding battle cry. I bow to you, my friend....Stephanie

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2013


reply by the author on 25-Aug-2013
    Oh, no, my dear Stephanie, you need bow to no one! You're one heck of an author, I could learn a great deal from you, and do by reading your excellent stories, primarily, "Invisible". I am in awe of the talent and writing you display there. It truly is a grand piece of writing!

    Thanks for your most kind review.
reply by A Matter Of Words on 25-Aug-2013
    I thank you Dean for such a wonderful compliment, but A Warriors Call left me with goose bumps and my chest tight. I read it aloud with that amazing music playing. The Celtic warrior background was superb. These need to go in a book. A beautiful, hardcover, over-sized book - one poem on each page.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2013
    Funny you should say that because I have been working on just that. Hopefully, it sells, but you all got to see it first!
reply by A Matter Of Words on 25-Aug-2013
    I am so glad to hear that. I will be in line for a signed copy.
Comment from tbacha58
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How can one not enjoy your writing? so amazingly well penned.
I like the most when you add an explanation to your
poems. It really helps to read the poem knowing what exists in. Terry. xx

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2013


reply by the author on 25-Aug-2013
    Thanks for that wonderful compliment, Terry, and for taking the time to read and review this for me as well. I sincerely appreciate it!
Comment from vapros
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My best grade for this fine piece, Dean - it's much too good to have to share space with that weird doofus. He looks like he could be right out of the NFL! Rhythm and rhyme, rhythm and rhyme - that's the way to my heart, or maybe my ear. You have produced a classic for warriors everywhere.

Bill

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2013


reply by the author on 25-Aug-2013
    Thank you very much, Bill. I am very happy that you, at least, thought so, my friend!
Comment from Spitfire
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I zoomed my screen to 200% so I could read this with comfort. It reminds me of Tennyson's Ulysses, a poem where the old warrior calls upon his old cronies to fight one last battle. A great metrical beat to this, natural speech and end rhyme. The power and pride of the leader comes through with his strong persuasive speech.

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2013


reply by the author on 25-Aug-2013
    Thank you very much for your kind review, Spit. Was it truly hard to see? I had to tweak, and reedit several times to get it to where I felt it was easily readable. Perhaps it needs a bit more "tweaking".
    Thanks so much again!