Savannah Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 37 "Chapter 9, part 2"Can a fallen confederate soldier encourage love?
59 total reviews
Comment from mumsyone
A good chapter, Barbara, and you left your readers wanting to know more about what these "detectives" are going to find in Paige's house.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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A good chapter, Barbara, and you left your readers wanting to know more about what these "detectives" are going to find in Paige's house.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate your stopping by.
Comment from God's Writer
Your stories really keep me totally engrossed in your writing. You imagination is very special and your professionalism is teriffic.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Your stories really keep me totally engrossed in your writing. You imagination is very special and your professionalism is teriffic.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
A good mystery going on in this romance. I like the secret staircase and where it led, how every time the men are outside a noise occurs. The puppy is rather young to be so vigilant, but it makes the story more exciting. Overall nicely done.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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A good mystery going on in this romance. I like the secret staircase and where it led, how every time the men are outside a noise occurs. The puppy is rather young to be so vigilant, but it makes the story more exciting. Overall nicely done.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
Comment from rtobaygo
Always enjoy reading your posts. You have a sophisticated ease in which you balance showing versus telling. You give the reader apt descriptions of your characters in will thought out snippets. You also have the gift of making teh reader part of your story. Kudos!
Take care,
Ray
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Always enjoy reading your posts. You have a sophisticated ease in which you balance showing versus telling. You give the reader apt descriptions of your characters in will thought out snippets. You also have the gift of making teh reader part of your story. Kudos!
Take care,
Ray
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and words. I appreciate both.
Comment from mshugh
A few suggestions for your consideration
There's [There are] no secret tunnels (unless you intend to express a local dialect)
A Ruger - Holy Mother
Well written - have to read the chapter as a whole to get a better feel for character development
Michael
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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A few suggestions for your consideration
There's [There are] no secret tunnels (unless you intend to express a local dialect)
A Ruger - Holy Mother
Well written - have to read the chapter as a whole to get a better feel for character development
Michael
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Yes, I intened to use local dialet. Yes, Mary Pat's little pea shooter, LOL, should do the trick. Yes, the chapter really needs to go together, but I simply can't do that at this time. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rama devi
Another suspenseful; closing hook, finely contrasting the light chatter preceding it. Good flow and authentic dialog, as usual. Fine POV. One suggestion:
Paige petted Morgan. "I'd take him with me. Isn't that right, little guy.(?)"
Good luck with your spring break reviewing and writing spree...
Warm smiles, rd
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Another suspenseful; closing hook, finely contrasting the light chatter preceding it. Good flow and authentic dialog, as usual. Fine POV. One suggestion:
Paige petted Morgan. "I'd take him with me. Isn't that right, little guy.(?)"
Good luck with your spring break reviewing and writing spree...
Warm smiles, rd
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Thank you for catching that. I can't believe so many reviewers missed it. I appreciate your review.
Comment from nora arjuna
hi barb. this is a mysterious chapter. anyway i'm feeling so stupid as well. i wonder what is ruger lcp? what sort of weapon? a gun? lol - laughing at myself. :)
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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hi barb. this is a mysterious chapter. anyway i'm feeling so stupid as well. i wonder what is ruger lcp? what sort of weapon? a gun? lol - laughing at myself. :)
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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It is a small handgun. Women usually use it because it can be hiden easily. Thank you for the kind review.
PS I hate guns, I had to research it. In the southern stated, guns are common.
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not common to us. it's illegal to keep one in our country unless you have a license for it.
Comment from CR Delport
How can she still doubt Cash's feelings for her. Is this girl blind? Another chapter well written and well edited. I could find no obvious errors.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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How can she still doubt Cash's feelings for her. Is this girl blind? Another chapter well written and well edited. I could find no obvious errors.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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We will find out later why Paige is so slow to trust men. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Great post, Barbara. I'm so intrigued by this secret staircase. Weird that it leads to Paige's closet. You're building the suspense with each post. Now I'm wondering who the heck is in the house. Human or ghostly?
Didn't spot any spag. I'm not sure about 'shined'. I personally would use 'shone', but maybe shined is okay too.
Enjoy your break! I'm on vacation too - in South Carolina.
Hugs,
Av
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Great post, Barbara. I'm so intrigued by this secret staircase. Weird that it leads to Paige's closet. You're building the suspense with each post. Now I'm wondering who the heck is in the house. Human or ghostly?
Didn't spot any spag. I'm not sure about 'shined'. I personally would use 'shone', but maybe shined is okay too.
Enjoy your break! I'm on vacation too - in South Carolina.
Hugs,
Av
Comment Written 15-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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I will check out shined in my dictionary. Thank you for the support.
Comment from Joyce Crowe
Continus to intrigue me. Yoy know how to capture and hold your audience's attention. I don't have any suggestions on how to make it better. I liked the summary of the previous chapter.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2013
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Continus to intrigue me. Yoy know how to capture and hold your audience's attention. I don't have any suggestions on how to make it better. I liked the summary of the previous chapter.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. Since I post in parts of chapters, I figure it helps with the unity.