Savannah Love
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Comment from rtobaygo
GOOD DIALOGUE AND INTERACTION BETWEEN THE MAIN PROTAGONIST AND THE REMAINING CHARACTERS. YOUR WRITING SETS THE SCENES AS I CAN IMAGINE THE CHARACTER WITH THE EGGS, CHICKEN AND MILK HAVING THEM PUT INTO THE FRIG. YOUR CLOSING SET THE HOOK REGARDING THE CHARACTER'S REACTION TO GENERAL SHERMAN. NICE BIT OF WRITING!
Miz IS THIS THE ACCENT SHE TALKS WITH, THUS THE SPELLING?
TAKE CARE,
RAY
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2012
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GOOD DIALOGUE AND INTERACTION BETWEEN THE MAIN PROTAGONIST AND THE REMAINING CHARACTERS. YOUR WRITING SETS THE SCENES AS I CAN IMAGINE THE CHARACTER WITH THE EGGS, CHICKEN AND MILK HAVING THEM PUT INTO THE FRIG. YOUR CLOSING SET THE HOOK REGARDING THE CHARACTER'S REACTION TO GENERAL SHERMAN. NICE BIT OF WRITING!
Miz IS THIS THE ACCENT SHE TALKS WITH, THUS THE SPELLING?
TAKE CARE,
RAY
Comment Written 15-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2012
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THANK YOU FOR THE KIND REVIEW. I ALWAYS APPRECIATE HEARING FROM YOU.
Comment from donaldww
I enjoyed Paige's afternoon with her new friends and hired help, unfolding more of the story. . . .
Found one sentence with some missing words, one idea to delete a few words:
Does anything in those bags need [to be put] in the refrigerator?"
She returned with two frosted glasses filled with crushed ice and slowly poured the lemonade into each glass.
Excellent!
DW
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2012
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I enjoyed Paige's afternoon with her new friends and hired help, unfolding more of the story. . . .
Found one sentence with some missing words, one idea to delete a few words:
Does anything in those bags need [to be put] in the refrigerator?"
She returned with two frosted glasses filled with crushed ice and slowly poured the lemonade
Excellent!
DW
Comment Written 15-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2012
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I was worried about those sentences myself. I have changed them numerous times. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Allison78
I think you've got a really interesting story going here but I gave you a four because this chapter seems rushed and not as well written as your other chapters. I did find a few errors but I don't know if they were intentional or not. I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter though!
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2012
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I think you've got a really interesting story going here but I gave you a four because this chapter seems rushed and not as well written as your other chapters. I did find a few errors but I don't know if they were intentional or not. I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter though!
Comment Written 15-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2012
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Thank you
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, barbara, you did a great job writing this chapter and bringing in the thoughts some people still have about the civil war. we used to go to savannah every december for the Christmas parade and the arts and crafts festival. a man that grew up in my hometown owned Savannah Street Sweets. his wife got the shop in the divorce settlement and he opened up his own candy kitchen two doors down from hers. he sells pralines at the crawfish festival every year and donates the proceeds to the First Methodist Church of Woodbine, where he went to church growing up
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2012
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this is very well written, barbara, you did a great job writing this chapter and bringing in the thoughts some people still have about the civil war. we used to go to savannah every december for the Christmas parade and the arts and crafts festival. a man that grew up in my hometown owned Savannah Street Sweets. his wife got the shop in the divorce settlement and he opened up his own candy kitchen two doors down from hers. he sells pralines at the crawfish festival every year and donates the proceeds to the First Methodist Church of Woodbine, where he went to church growing up
Comment Written 15-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2012
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WOW!! Thank you for sharing your story. I appreciate it. I dearly love Savannah. I want to go back, but my husband says it's too far from TX. I'm wearing him down. I can be very perstitant. I appreciate the kind review.
Comment from emmaysavage
I am enjoying the story very much. Your characters are growing in my interest and I am pleased with the research you have done to make the present and past very real. This is a great chapter.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2012
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I am enjoying the story very much. Your characters are growing in my interest and I am pleased with the research you have done to make the present and past very real. This is a great chapter.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hello again Barbara
I am still intrigued with the story line and its progression. I think it is fun that Cash made the point about cleaning up the north's mess after the picnic. Clever work
Bear
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2012
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Hello again Barbara
I am still intrigued with the story line and its progression. I think it is fun that Cash made the point about cleaning up the north's mess after the picnic. Clever work
Bear
Comment Written 14-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
That is The War (two syllables, please!) of Northern Aggression. :D There was(1991) a great antique store called Jere's on the second floor of one of the cotton warehouses on the River. I have a couple of pieces from there. What a great place. Your story is bringing back memories. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2012
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That is The War (two syllables, please!) of Northern Aggression. :D There was(1991) a great antique store called Jere's on the second floor of one of the cotton warehouses on the River. I have a couple of pieces from there. What a great place. Your story is bringing back memories. :) Nancy
Comment Written 14-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2012
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I have the The War of Northern Aggression, in other post. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from fictionwriter
Oh man, the southerners will never forget the civil war, I believe. They still will tell you how they were right all along, won't they. Great job.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2012
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Oh man, the southerners will never forget the civil war, I believe. They still will tell you how they were right all along, won't they. Great job.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2012
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You are so correct. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
A good write and a well written story. It needs no edit,and has imagery.I enjoyed reading your story and found it a pleasant read. Thanks for sharing with me.Mary
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2012
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A good write and a well written story. It needs no edit,and has imagery.I enjoyed reading your story and found it a pleasant read. Thanks for sharing with me.Mary
Comment Written 14-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from jadapenn
A nice read, Barbie. I love anything to do with ghosts, as long as I don't have one in my room. Now an old house like that should have a lot to talk about. I'm intrigued and can't wait to read more. Hope you're having a good holiday. luv jada
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2012
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A nice read, Barbie. I love anything to do with ghosts, as long as I don't have one in my room. Now an old house like that should have a lot to talk about. I'm intrigued and can't wait to read more. Hope you're having a good holiday. luv jada
Comment Written 14-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
