Query Letter
I am attempting to query an agent.90 total reviews
Comment from axelbeariter
She can gain access to any computer, as well as Matt's heart./Great line to catch a submissions screener's eye----By the way, from reading the synopsis, Her Pretty Little Neck, is a most appropriate title. Don't let the publisher change it.----Please note your preference on the enclosed postcard if you would like to see sample chapters or the complete manuscript./I would leave that sentence out. Editors hate such addendums. If you keep the letter to one page, this is a good one. You've presented your case well. Good luck.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2011
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She can gain access to any computer, as well as Matt's heart./Great line to catch a submissions screener's eye----By the way, from reading the synopsis, Her Pretty Little Neck, is a most appropriate title. Don't let the publisher change it.----Please note your preference on the enclosed postcard if you would like to see sample chapters or the complete manuscript./I would leave that sentence out. Editors hate such addendums. If you keep the letter to one page, this is a good one. You've presented your case well. Good luck.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from patwannabe
barbara, this is very good and if I were a publisher, I'd ask to see some more.
I'm not real set on the title and believe I'd work at that some more, but that's only m.o., it's your novel.
Hope you find your publisher. pat
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2011
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barbara, this is very good and if I were a publisher, I'd ask to see some more.
I'm not real set on the title and believe I'd work at that some more, but that's only m.o., it's your novel.
Hope you find your publisher. pat
Comment Written 03-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from laurabareis
I think this is good, you really know how to write a query. I am in the process of writing them myself, and it's certainly hard! I think it's great how you include the part where one of your characters gets kidnapped, it definitely caught my interest!The only thing that sounded a little awkward was a few of your comma placements. For example, "...been Recommended by multiple sources and I believe, your expertise in the field of romance novels..." But other than that I know I couldn't have written it better myself.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2011
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I think this is good, you really know how to write a query. I am in the process of writing them myself, and it's certainly hard! I think it's great how you include the part where one of your characters gets kidnapped, it definitely caught my interest!The only thing that sounded a little awkward was a few of your comma placements. For example, "...been Recommended by multiple sources and I believe, your expertise in the field of romance novels..." But other than that I know I couldn't have written it better myself.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and I will check out the commas.
Comment from bluedragon776
Wow, Thanks for offering your query letters for fan story opinions. I think this is a good one. It is great that you have something ready for publication. Good luck.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2011
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Wow, Thanks for offering your query letters for fan story opinions. I think this is a good one. It is great that you have something ready for publication. Good luck.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2011
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You said this is a 'good one'. I am not sure why I received a four. What should I change?
Comment from missy98writer
Hell fire, I had a long review hit save note and Evil Eddie ate it! Your query letter is excellently written and you keep it tight without rambling on or being too "wordy." I like the name of your novel your touting Her Pretty Little Neck." after reading I want to read it again. I hope the publish Matt and Dani's story, my talented friend. I want a signed copy of the book. I wish you and your family a happy 4th of July. Love ya and peace out!
Melissa.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2011
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Hell fire, I had a long review hit save note and Evil Eddie ate it! Your query letter is excellently written and you keep it tight without rambling on or being too "wordy." I like the name of your novel your touting Her Pretty Little Neck." after reading I want to read it again. I hope the publish Matt and Dani's story, my talented friend. I want a signed copy of the book. I wish you and your family a happy 4th of July. Love ya and peace out!
Melissa.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the encouragement. If I ever get published you will get signed copy.
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I'm going to tone down my Naught By Nature story because I come up with a hook by adding a mystery and another crime Sheriff Victioria and her station are investigating. I wrote the first chapter as a poem and I'm converting into a chapter, but I'm posting it as a poem first. I plan to watch the fireworks. I've been watching the Casey Anthony trial. I don't thing the prosecution proved their case. I bet it's a hung jury because we know she guilty but that lawyer of hers is crafty and he confused them with all his theories. I'll email you later.
Melissa.
Comment from writerwish
I like it and have read those books on query letters. It may be too long. I know you have a lot to say, but I was told your name address phone number and e-mail and salutation must only be one page all together.
I am not good at cutting things down, only making them longer. Perhaps combining Para 2&3 would work??
Good Luck and let us know if you do get a hit.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2011
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I like it and have read those books on query letters. It may be too long. I know you have a lot to say, but I was told your name address phone number and e-mail and salutation must only be one page all together.
I am not good at cutting things down, only making them longer. Perhaps combining Para 2&3 would work??
Good Luck and let us know if you do get a hit.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and I will look at it.
Comment from /*Twinkle
I am a novice writer myself, but I am fan of romance novels. If I can comment on the storyline idea, I think it is an interesting storyline for a romance; a geek meets an expert. That would be interesting to see how the romance would blossom. Would their romance be a romantic comedy and play out as satire to the serious issues revolving around the drug cartel? or would it be a dramatic romance where their bonds are deepened with the drama of solving the case. Also, brings to life a statement about our virtual world, that the computer geek is not the expert in the story.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2011
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I am a novice writer myself, but I am fan of romance novels. If I can comment on the storyline idea, I think it is an interesting storyline for a romance; a geek meets an expert. That would be interesting to see how the romance would blossom. Would their romance be a romantic comedy and play out as satire to the serious issues revolving around the drug cartel? or would it be a dramatic romance where their bonds are deepened with the drama of solving the case. Also, brings to life a statement about our virtual world, that the computer geek is not the expert in the story.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2011
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The novel is completed and in my portfolio. It is one of the first novels I posted. Thank you for reading and comenting.
Comment from Cooper Watt
Although I've never written nor received a query letter, this one seems about as spot-on as you can get. I wish you much luck with your endeavor to become published! Sincerely, Coop.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2011
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Although I've never written nor received a query letter, this one seems about as spot-on as you can get. I wish you much luck with your endeavor to become published! Sincerely, Coop.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from The Stranger
well whatever else I can say, the idea that I could improve on anything you write is impossible to imagine, your writing is far and above anything I can piut together
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2011
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well whatever else I can say, the idea that I could improve on anything you write is impossible to imagine, your writing is far and above anything I can piut together
Comment Written 03-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your encouragement.
Comment from Isaiah Ramesses
Well, I like it. The letter fits the guidelines and tells the agent exactly what's necessary in the minimum number of words. Good luck, great job.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2011
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Well, I like it. The letter fits the guidelines and tells the agent exactly what's necessary in the minimum number of words. Good luck, great job.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your encouragment.