Where Did Susan Go?
Lost inside.37 total reviews
Comment from missy98writer
Susan,
you're on fire lately in your fiction. Your story titled Where Did Susan Go is superbly written. Your descriptive writing is excellent and conjure up in vivid detail in my mind. Your photo adds to your thriller story. What a harrowing account of a woman comitting suicide. This paragraph was really hard hitting: "She had never been a beauty, but was attractive enough. Just enough be be used, and tossed aside; not good enough to be a wife or girl-friend. Only used, abused, and thrown away." How sad a boy and his dog will find her dead body. What a bummer of a story that's an awesome read.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Susan,
you're on fire lately in your fiction. Your story titled Where Did Susan Go is superbly written. Your descriptive writing is excellent and conjure up in vivid detail in my mind. Your photo adds to your thriller story. What a harrowing account of a woman comitting suicide. This paragraph was really hard hitting: "She had never been a beauty, but was attractive enough. Just enough be be used, and tossed aside; not good enough to be a wife or girl-friend. Only used, abused, and thrown away." How sad a boy and his dog will find her dead body. What a bummer of a story that's an awesome read.
Melissa.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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HI Melissa...Thank you so much. I apologize for not reading as much lately, I got the house sold, now no where to go. TEN animals and more personal problems...it's just getting to be unbearable at times...and it sure helps to have somewhere to 'write it out' or whatever...please take good care of yourself Melissa...xoxo, susan
Comment from Minglement
This is frighteningly real. Well written and believable thoughts of a depressed person, anticipating suicide. Great descirption and turn of phrases like, 'flies and little creatures began their quest in nature's bidding' Shivers here. Just a question - would be 'in' nature's bidding or 'at' nature's bidding? I only just now saw that, typing it in here. Also, 'She absent-mindedly 'run' her fingers through her hair.' 'Run' or 'ran'? Gret piece. Whey the name choice of Susan? Get back to me... Marcia
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2011
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This is frighteningly real. Well written and believable thoughts of a depressed person, anticipating suicide. Great descirption and turn of phrases like, 'flies and little creatures began their quest in nature's bidding' Shivers here. Just a question - would be 'in' nature's bidding or 'at' nature's bidding? I only just now saw that, typing it in here. Also, 'She absent-mindedly 'run' her fingers through her hair.' 'Run' or 'ran'? Gret piece. Whey the name choice of Susan? Get back to me... Marcia
Comment Written 07-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2011
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HI Marcia...I am just down, this too, will pass, as they say? I will check the ran/run? I'm not sure? Also the "at" too! VERY good helper you are my friend...you help cheer me up, I am just surrounded by hatefulness and just plain idiocy. I am pulling my hair out. YOU help just be being here Marcia...love to you!! susan
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I hope it helps. This will not last forever. If you look, you can find something beautiful, some little miracle or fun thing everyday. Make it a goal. There is something good in every day! Stay positive. Hugs, Marcia
Comment from MS Writer
Powerful piece. It's an old story written very well with that last sentence as definitely a new twist. Great description throughout. Sad but enjoyable read.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Powerful piece. It's an old story written very well with that last sentence as definitely a new twist. Great description throughout. Sad but enjoyable read.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Hi there...I am grateful for this kind and most welcome review MS!! I hope you have a nice weekend...Susan
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Once again you did a great job with descriptions. This is full of emotion and I am wondering about the boy and his dog. I wonder if he's following the same path Susan did.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Once again you did a great job with descriptions. This is full of emotion and I am wondering about the boy and his dog. I wonder if he's following the same path Susan did.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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HI Barbara! No, he will just happen across her...sad, and I'm sorry, I am just in a bad place for now. I truly hope you are happy and feeling better my dear friend...love to you! Susan
Comment from Veekz
Ahh, my friend, a well penned write as usual :)
The feelings you provoke in your readers with this piece are strong and you pull us right into what the girl is feeling, anxious, down trodden and plain unloved. It was sad reading the demise of her self worth as she reached the lowest point but you worded it so well I couldn't help be glued to it from start to end. I know you named the character after you and, knowing you're in a bit of a tough spot yourself at the moment, I hope you were able to put the feelings of giving up into this character so they hopefully don't weigh on you as much. I'm feeling for you my friend and please know, you really never are far from my thoughts xoxoxox
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2011
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Ahh, my friend, a well penned write as usual :)
The feelings you provoke in your readers with this piece are strong and you pull us right into what the girl is feeling, anxious, down trodden and plain unloved. It was sad reading the demise of her self worth as she reached the lowest point but you worded it so well I couldn't help be glued to it from start to end. I know you named the character after you and, knowing you're in a bit of a tough spot yourself at the moment, I hope you were able to put the feelings of giving up into this character so they hopefully don't weigh on you as much. I'm feeling for you my friend and please know, you really never are far from my thoughts xoxoxox
Comment Written 07-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2011
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Hi Jess...what a sweet girl you are. I am down, and this helped me vent this frustration and anger I feel, so thank you for reading this anyway, even tho it's sad...I hope your picture gets there soon! HUGS and extras thanks Jess...love, susan
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I'm here to vent at as well!!! :):) xoxoxox
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") I wish I could...tell you ALL this crap...but legalites prevent...as certain jerks are in my pc...thanks tho, Jess...you're so good to me...xoxo, suse
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Well know I am there anyhow :) xx
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HUGS and love! xoxo, susan
Comment from Dave M
Susan,
I notice you named the poor wretch after yourself. This is an excellent story about a woman who reached the end of her rope and just let go. I appreciated this post and couldn't find anything to criticize.
Dave
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Susan,
I notice you named the poor wretch after yourself. This is an excellent story about a woman who reached the end of her rope and just let go. I appreciated this post and couldn't find anything to criticize.
Dave
Comment Written 07-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Hi Dave...thank you! It helped me to just write my frustration out so to speak...I will cheer up. Strife and anxiety are the rulers of my life right now, and hopefully someday will pass...thanks for your kind reviews my friend...susan
Comment from JW
Wow. What a sad story. However, it is very well written. One could easily feel the hopelessness and pain. Even more unfortunately is the fact that stories like this pay out in real life on a daily basis.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Wow. What a sad story. However, it is very well written. One could easily feel the hopelessness and pain. Even more unfortunately is the fact that stories like this pay out in real life on a daily basis.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Hi again...I know, I watch too much television and am going thru a bad spot in my life, and this site helps me to keep trying...your time for me matters and I do appreciate it....susan
Comment from Signaler
OMGosh!i wanted to look away to stop reding but for some reason I just had to stay with her till her last breath, This is such a touching story in such few words. You did it right! Good Luck in the contests
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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OMGosh!i wanted to look away to stop reding but for some reason I just had to stay with her till her last breath, This is such a touching story in such few words. You did it right! Good Luck in the contests
Comment Written 07-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Hi Signal! Thank you so much. I really appreciate this kind and helpful review...Your kind words have made a difference to me...susan
Comment from Larrypic11
Just wonderful. My attention span for suicide stories is very limited, but you managed to hold me there till the very end. You made your character totally believable, a victim of being somewhere in the middle of nowhere. The last line was a fine finish. Great job. Larry
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Just wonderful. My attention span for suicide stories is very limited, but you managed to hold me there till the very end. You made your character totally believable, a victim of being somewhere in the middle of nowhere. The last line was a fine finish. Great job. Larry
Comment Written 07-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Hi Larry, thank you so much. I am very appreciative of this review, especially since you don't like this theme. I am pleased and grateful to hear from you...I will get thru this bad patch and hopefully, soon. You have helped. Susan
Comment from c_lucas
Your story made me and read Your reviews. Using your own name made me wonder. You are a writer, create your name even it is "Susan" spelled backward, "Nusan". I gave you a six because of the emotions you put in the story,
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Your story made me and read Your reviews. Using your own name made me wonder. You are a writer, create your name even it is "Susan" spelled backward, "Nusan". I gave you a six because of the emotions you put in the story,
Comment Written 07-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Hi Charlie! I'm sorry for this late reply...I am just going thru a bad spot...and it really helps to 'write it out' so to speak. I still need to buy that book you told me about. Maybe someday. I wish the world were a better place...thank you C. You're a great friend...Susan
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You're welcome, Susan. Charlie
