Thank you, with Some Regrets
An adult son's posthumous letter to his father20 total reviews
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form, good flow, good meter, a beautiful picture of a father who recognizes what his father didn't and grew from that experience instead of repeating the disfunctional cycle. i commend you for that
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2010
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this is very well written with good form, good flow, good meter, a beautiful picture of a father who recognizes what his father didn't and grew from that experience instead of repeating the disfunctional cycle. i commend you for that
Comment Written 06-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2010
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Thank you so much for the very kind review. Bill
Comment from seewhatimwritingnow
How very sad- and a writing that I'm sure many will relate to. All parents were not 'good' parents- many didn't even know 'how'to be parents. Many were mean- and downright 'cold' never showing affection. But, here we are! We remember the good (if there was any) and continue on with what they gave us... Life. Thanks for the great and powerful writing! Betty
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2010
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How very sad- and a writing that I'm sure many will relate to. All parents were not 'good' parents- many didn't even know 'how'to be parents. Many were mean- and downright 'cold' never showing affection. But, here we are! We remember the good (if there was any) and continue on with what they gave us... Life. Thanks for the great and powerful writing! Betty
Comment Written 06-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2010
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Betty, thank you very much for the very kind review and insightful comments. Bill
Comment from Mirandawrites
I am speechless... this is such an eloquent poem of a wounds suffered, regrets embraced and forgiveness extended. Thank you for sharing this profound realization. I laud your spirit. Namaste
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2010
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I am speechless... this is such an eloquent poem of a wounds suffered, regrets embraced and forgiveness extended. Thank you for sharing this profound realization. I laud your spirit. Namaste
Comment Written 05-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2010
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Namaste, thanks so much for the very kind words and review. Bill
Comment from Connie P
You've written a very tough poem to digest. It's so true in many cases and I'm very glad you didn't follow in those abusive footsteps. That's not always the case. Great job with the free verse.
Connie
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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You've written a very tough poem to digest. It's so true in many cases and I'm very glad you didn't follow in those abusive footsteps. That's not always the case. Great job with the free verse.
Connie
Comment Written 05-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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Connie, thank you very much for your kind words and review. Bill
Comment from jgirlie152
The free verse you have written is difficult to read, yet it is so well done. It must have been hard to pen the words. The difficulty is in the content, not your poem, which is excellent. Parents who hit their children learn it from their parents, as mine did. As generations grow up, observe other families and especially when their own children are born, hitting is less common. Ignorance is the root of cruelty in any form.
Joan
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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The free verse you have written is difficult to read, yet it is so well done. It must have been hard to pen the words. The difficulty is in the content, not your poem, which is excellent. Parents who hit their children learn it from their parents, as mine did. As generations grow up, observe other families and especially when their own children are born, hitting is less common. Ignorance is the root of cruelty in any form.
Joan
Comment Written 05-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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Joan, thanks so much for the very kind words and review. The poem was easier to write, than it might have been ten or twenty years ago. Raising and loving my children has been a great healing process. You are so right about ignorance and cruelty, especially cruelty to children. Thanks again for the support. Bill
Comment from gramalot8
Bananafish, it would be hard to live with a dad that you loved and feared at the same time. Very nicely written and has good message and meaning. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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Bananafish, it would be hard to live with a dad that you loved and feared at the same time. Very nicely written and has good message and meaning. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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Thank you very much for the kind review. You are right, it was hard, and very confusing to a child. Thanks for the encouragement. Bill
Comment from Christian Andre
An outstanding write....
heart-felt and natural in the sense of having
gone through it myself....
This hit me on so many different levels...
I know that it must of been un-easy somewhat to write...
for this I thank you,
for having the courage to do so...
even-though it may or may not happen to you,
I dunno...
good form...
the artwork was a good touch...
great work...
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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An outstanding write....
heart-felt and natural in the sense of having
gone through it myself....
This hit me on so many different levels...
I know that it must of been un-easy somewhat to write...
for this I thank you,
for having the courage to do so...
even-though it may or may not happen to you,
I dunno...
good form...
the artwork was a good touch...
great work...
Comment Written 05-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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Christian, thank you so much for your very kind review and the six stars. I am very flattered and humbled. This did actually happen to me, and I am sorry that you also went through it. I hope that you have been able to find some kind of peace. Thanks again for the wonderful review. Bill
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you are most welcome for the review...
and yes, I have found peace through my writing....
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Bananafish308:
what a sombering piece, but how
refreshing you learned not to repeat
the process but to correct it -- all
too often, it becomes a chain too hard
to break
like you, I cringe whenever I accidentally
hurt my child or grandchild and still protect
them as much as possible from the evil outside
no child should ever have to dwal with
evil that resides within where safety and
security should reign
this is not a foray into free verse -- it is a
successful jump into the deep end
good luck in the contest
love, jan
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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Bananafish308:
what a sombering piece, but how
refreshing you learned not to repeat
the process but to correct it -- all
too often, it becomes a chain too hard
to break
like you, I cringe whenever I accidentally
hurt my child or grandchild and still protect
them as much as possible from the evil outside
no child should ever have to dwal with
evil that resides within where safety and
security should reign
this is not a foray into free verse -- it is a
successful jump into the deep end
good luck in the contest
love, jan
Comment Written 05-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review and insightful comments. You are so right about the child continuing the sins of the parent, and I was determined not to let that happen. Bill
Comment from countess gram
This is a sad but poignant poem. I would have hated my children to fear their father,and I never would have wanted to fear mine. A very emotional and thought provoking poem with your well chosen words.Great job!
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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This is a sad but poignant poem. I would have hated my children to fear their father,and I never would have wanted to fear mine. A very emotional and thought provoking poem with your well chosen words.Great job!
Comment Written 05-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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Thank you very much for your kind review. Bill
Comment from Triple P
Thank you for sharing this heartfelt, emotional poem. As a father, I am always afraid of embittering my children. I want them to grow up knowing right from wrong, but don't want them to resent me. Your poem has helped in so many ways (and I am thankful I don't belittle or strike my children). Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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Thank you for sharing this heartfelt, emotional poem. As a father, I am always afraid of embittering my children. I want them to grow up knowing right from wrong, but don't want them to resent me. Your poem has helped in so many ways (and I am thankful I don't belittle or strike my children). Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 05-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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Thanks so much for the very kind words and review. I also fear embittering my children. I think the awareness that you have, will go a long way to ensuring that it doesn't happen. As I mentioned in the poem, my father was completely unaware. I am glad my poem has helped you. Thanks again for the wonderful review. Bill
