Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Man! You keep creating these awful awful horrible scenes. I don't think I can take much more of these Dwight scenes. You'll have have to give me more warnings about which ones to avoid.

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2021

Hi Helen - The next chapter is ready (put they won't let me post) and it is the last time you will here from Dwight. I will tell you it's a bit rough, but most will cheer at the end. It's your choice. So, dear, I thank you for your review and leave the decision in your court. Smiles to you - Carol

reply by lyenochka on 19-Apr-2021

I have to tell you that my heart was racing with that last chapter. I don't know why but there must be some deep psychological reason for my reaction...

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Good. Hank is more than capable of putting two-and-two together. He'll be able to figure out exactly what's going on and catching Dwight like this is a good think. I am sure he'll attempt to make up a good story. I won't buy it.

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2021

Hi Barbara, The next chapter I am about to post is a block buster. I don't know if I got it right, so please feel free to make suggestions to it. This is probably one of the biggest changes in the story and I want it to be a great one. Thanks so much...Smiles, Carol

Comment from Susan Newell

Excellent

You are the mistress od suspense. I am so glad Dwight didn't get her. I noticed just a few typos, etc.


boots been under?", -- don't believe comma is needed

so nobody knew if he was there. -- would omit "if"

I would have been terrified to leave you with dad. ==> Dad

Italic text for Beth's thoughts appears very tiny.

..it's mom's birthday. ==> Mom's

Don't! Don't talk -- needs opening quotation marks

She grabbed a silver carving knife -- question silver. Steel?

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2021

thanks for the accolades. LOL I questioned a few of the same things you mentioned but left it...they are changed now. I have no idea why the Italic text shrunk. I wrote it at the same time. Wierd! Thanks for helping me out...wish I could nominate you more than once. Smiles, Carol

reply by Susan Newell on 19-Apr-2021

I'm happy to read good writing. Did you read Webb Johnson's new story?

reply by the author on 19-Apr-2021

Yes, I did... He's a great writer.

reply by Susan Newell on 19-Apr-2021

I know! So original.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I'm glad she dropped the knife, she still could have pleaded self defence against a monster such as he is. Apparently here where I live there are men who kill their women, it disgusting how violent they can be. I think Dwight is making enemies in Nancy and Peter Rotello, poor Beth might get the blame. Beautifully written, good descriptions of the physical encounters, well done, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2021

thanks Roy...I agree I think Dwight is going to meet his match with Nancy and Peter. He might think he's big when he picks on people, but it all catches up to you at some point. thanks for the insight on how you felt about the character interaction. I appreciate it. Smiles, Carol

reply by royowen on 19-Apr-2021

Well done Carol,

Comment from Iza Deleanu

Exceptional

What a bad father, he has no respect for his wife memory and the daughter is just another piece of free meat that can be used and abused. I hope somebody gets his sorry ass. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2021

Hi, Iza...So do I! And I think he's going to get it very soon. Wow! I am thrilled to see your review and the shiny stars. Didn't even notice them at first, but I am grateful. Awesome! Smiles, Carol

Comment from Judy Lawless

Excellent

Carol, I don't know how you come up with all this stuff! Someone has to convince Beth to get the help she needs. I think she'll stay away from Dwight from now on, surely. Again, well done.

Here are a few suggestions: "pulled in(to) the parking lot"
"He was looking forward to seeing Nancy and having a cool one as he rounded the building." - As he rounded the building should start the sentence, so it's closer to the verb phrase that it goes with "was looking."
"Dwight and Nancy walked inside(into) the bar." walking inside means they are already in there. :)

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2021

Hi Judy...I don't think she will eve see Dwight again. Thank heavens! So much more to take place ... thanks for the review and for the help. Fixes are made. Smiles, Carol

Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock

Excellent

Yikes! Dwight is getting worse and Beth is in more danger than ever. Now
he's sexually abusive. Something has to happen to help Beth clear her name. Where is Bert?

Ralf

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2021

She'll be on her way soon I hope. Dwight's in for some trouble too. About time! Thanks for reading Ralf. I appreciate it very much. Smiles, Carol;

Comment from pome lover

Excellent

good grief! What a monster. what in the world does Nancy see in Dwight?
You surely portray him well - the reader can almost smell his vile, beer breath. ugh.
This chapter shows the horrible situation Beth is in. I hope she stays away, but where?
Good, realistic scenes, though disgusting.
Katharine - pome lover

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2021

good afternoon, Katharine...Thanks for stopping by. You are so right. It was difficult but necessary to write this awful scene, but he's about to get payback ... maybe at poor Beth's expense though. Appreciate the review. Smiles - Carol

reply by pome lover on 19-Apr-2021

well, at least he gets pay back. He should.

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

Now what will he say? That she'd come back to kill him? What does it take to make her see sense? She could have been raped again this time by her own father! My god, what a mess she gets herself into. I'm hoping she sees Bert and gets the help she needs. I can't wait for the next part, this is so scary. Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

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 Comment Written 19-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2021

Yeah, I thought that was a pretty dumb move on her part too, but like many abused people they think they need to keep the family together. Wrong!!! Because that person can't be your family if he treats you that way. A lot is about to happen... and not exactly how we planned. Smiles and hugs - Carol

Comment from T B Botts

Excellent

Well, this is pretty exciting. Disgusting on the one hand, as far as Dwight is concerned. This guy is a real piece of work. Its time for Superman to step in and do some serious butt kicking. Well written. It kept me on the edge of my seat.

Tom

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 Comment Written 19-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2021

Thank you Tom...It has been an ongoing story and yes this horrible man is about to get what he has coming. And none too soon either! Thanks for the kind review and I hope you stop by again. Smiles, Carol