To Mary, With Need to Understand
A rhymed offering for these troubling times...73 total reviews
Comment from Sueswrite
Your words are quite familiar to listening ears, tearful eyes and broken hearts as a "Pandemic" classification in itself. You are so truly correct with such saddening devastation that each generation living now, must learn to adapt to and somehow step from day to day. Your poem is truly heartfelt, and I only wish you the best. Thank you. Great writing and perfect image as well.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2021
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Your words are quite familiar to listening ears, tearful eyes and broken hearts as a "Pandemic" classification in itself. You are so truly correct with such saddening devastation that each generation living now, must learn to adapt to and somehow step from day to day. Your poem is truly heartfelt, and I only wish you the best. Thank you. Great writing and perfect image as well.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2021
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Hello Sueswrite,
Thank you for your thoughtful review.
I am pleased my words resonated with you!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Shenelle Coplien
I totally understand that feelings you are going through. This is nicely conveyed. The new world we live in is going to be strange to understand for awhile. Hopefully we find our way to maintain friendships and such with these new boundaries and expectations.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2021
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I totally understand that feelings you are going through. This is nicely conveyed. The new world we live in is going to be strange to understand for awhile. Hopefully we find our way to maintain friendships and such with these new boundaries and expectations.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2021
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Hello Shenelle!
Thank you for our excellent rating and thoughtful review!
Take Care!
diane
Comment from LeftHandedScribe
"I'm sorry I stopped by today.I know better; I should have phoned.But daffodils had come my way,And now I truly feel alone..." Wow. This one went right through me. What simple truth you portray in this so lovely piece. You hit it spot on. We all need to connect and touch and be with others.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2021
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"I'm sorry I stopped by today.I know better; I should have phoned.But daffodils had come my way,And now I truly feel alone..." Wow. This one went right through me. What simple truth you portray in this so lovely piece. You hit it spot on. We all need to connect and touch and be with others.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2021
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Helo LeftHandedScribe,
I so appreciate you stopping by.
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review.
diane
Comment from Janice Canerdy
So--this happened, really!! How hurtful, devastating! You have truly taken the high road, feeling compassion for someone paralyzed with fear and clearly not herself. This poem is truly SUPERB in every respect--descriptive, skillfully composed and filled with real emotion.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2021
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So--this happened, really!! How hurtful, devastating! You have truly taken the high road, feeling compassion for someone paralyzed with fear and clearly not herself. This poem is truly SUPERB in every respect--descriptive, skillfully composed and filled with real emotion.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2021
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Good Morning, Janice!
I am honored by your exceptional rating and thoughtful review.
So pleased my words resonated with you.
Such chaotic and unsettling times.
Thank you!
diane
Comment from RGstar
You are correct. Much mental pressure, not even sure we recognize them all--me included. Sometimes I wonder how it is affecting me. Luckily I have my cat Keisha here, and I am coping ok, though can be emotional at times...it could have been worse.
Good solid write.
Best wishes.
RG
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2021
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You are correct. Much mental pressure, not even sure we recognize them all--me included. Sometimes I wonder how it is affecting me. Luckily I have my cat Keisha here, and I am coping ok, though can be emotional at times...it could have been worse.
Good solid write.
Best wishes.
RG
Comment Written 08-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2021
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Good Morning, RG,
Thank you for stopping by and reading my offering.
These times are truly unsettling, and fear, real or imagined, is having many negative effects on individuals.
Thank you,
diane
Comment from Carlos' girl
Im just curious why someone who is angry at being bothered is necessarily fearful. Its odd, as I read your poem I feel not fear but annoyance. People sometimes are happier being left alone during a pandemic and unannounced visitors are intrusive. Im not sure if you adhere to any metre at all or is it more of a story than a poem?
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Im just curious why someone who is angry at being bothered is necessarily fearful. Its odd, as I read your poem I feel not fear but annoyance. People sometimes are happier being left alone during a pandemic and unannounced visitors are intrusive. Im not sure if you adhere to any metre at all or is it more of a story than a poem?
Comment Written 08-Feb-2021
Comment from RetroStarfish
This is an excellent poem and it's meaning was clear to me immediately. So many people shut out even good, well meaning friends when the darkness of depression and fear sets in. Your tale of bringing daffodils -such bright signs of spring - only to be left on the porch, speaks volumes about the darkness settling upon so many of us.
Wonderful.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2021
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This is an excellent poem and it's meaning was clear to me immediately. So many people shut out even good, well meaning friends when the darkness of depression and fear sets in. Your tale of bringing daffodils -such bright signs of spring - only to be left on the porch, speaks volumes about the darkness settling upon so many of us.
Wonderful.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2021
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Hello RetroStarfish!
I am pleased my words resonated with you and your understood their intentions.
Such trying and confusing times.
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Lyn Peters
You so completely captured the fear and uncertainty COVID has visited on us all. Thank you for sharing your work. Hopefully, it won't be too very long before we can return to something that (at least sort of resembles) normal. Wishing you good health and happy writing.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2021
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You so completely captured the fear and uncertainty COVID has visited on us all. Thank you for sharing your work. Hopefully, it won't be too very long before we can return to something that (at least sort of resembles) normal. Wishing you good health and happy writing.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2021
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Hello Lyn!
So pleased my words resonated with you!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Erika Seshadri
Hi, very nicely written. And I know so many can relate this, either as the person with the daffodils or the receiver of them.
I also enjoyed your comment at the end about fear from The Life of Pi. I never read the book, but the movie floored me.
All the best.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2021
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Hi, very nicely written. And I know so many can relate this, either as the person with the daffodils or the receiver of them.
I also enjoyed your comment at the end about fear from The Life of Pi. I never read the book, but the movie floored me.
All the best.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2021
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Thank you, Erika!
Interesting and trying times.
Take Care!
diane
Comment from Sharon Nolen
Vary nice poem. It is so touching and emotional. I felt your pain through this poem. It was a beautiful rhyme, an even flow, an easy read. I only have a couple of suggestions.
In your sentence: "Now wields its grip on friendship's hand.", the sentence throws off the rhythm just a bit. Suggestion: consider "Now gripping our friendship's hands."
Also in your sentence: "And now I truly feel alone", consider something like "Now I feel truly alone".
NOW SOMETHING TO ENCOURAGE YOU.
I'm sorry you've experienced this kind of pain
especially from a dear friend
but patience will be the virtue
that will bring you together again.
Longsuffering will be the attribute
that helps patience along
but love is the greatest gift of all
to keep your friendship strong.
Hang in there. Keep writing. Writing is therapeutic.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2021
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Vary nice poem. It is so touching and emotional. I felt your pain through this poem. It was a beautiful rhyme, an even flow, an easy read. I only have a couple of suggestions.
In your sentence: "Now wields its grip on friendship's hand.", the sentence throws off the rhythm just a bit. Suggestion: consider "Now gripping our friendship's hands."
Also in your sentence: "And now I truly feel alone", consider something like "Now I feel truly alone".
NOW SOMETHING TO ENCOURAGE YOU.
I'm sorry you've experienced this kind of pain
especially from a dear friend
but patience will be the virtue
that will bring you together again.
Longsuffering will be the attribute
that helps patience along
but love is the greatest gift of all
to keep your friendship strong.
Hang in there. Keep writing. Writing is therapeutic.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2021
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Hello Sharon,
Thank you for stopping by.
diane
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You're welcome. I hope my little intended encouragement poem helps you get through this.
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Hello again!
I'm fine.
I wrote this offering to spread awareness of the increasing negative residual psychological and emotional effects the pandemic has had on others - even dear friends. Their fear is real, and in this case, irrational.
I didn't write the poem to suggest I need/needed pity or encouragement, but I thank you.
Take Care,
diane
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You're welcome.