Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

The basic concepts of black or dark meaning evil or death are a continuing theme in your work. White is depicted as right, righteous, and good. The conservation of words is also a hallmark.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013

THANKS FOR INSIGHTFUL REVIEW.

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

I can actually understand the message of this one much better than most of your poems. I do think that many people are satisfied with temporary pleasures, no matter how dark in nature, if they provide that momentary high. Brooke

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013

THANKS FOR CREATIVE REVIEW.

Comment from robina1978

Excellent

I have to guess what you mean. To me it can actually mean several things. Happiness is short lived when you indulge in crime. In prison? Or a black guy dating a white girl. I liked how you involved your reader in it by the question.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013

THANKS FOR QUEST REVIEW.

reply by robina1978 on 01-Apr-2013

most welcome, Ine

Comment from Chikara

Excellent

Your pieces always make me think.

The question you pose is one everyone should answer amid our light-fast, pleasure-seeking society starving for the purity and goodness which births "white joy".

Keep up the great work.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013

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Comment from words

Average

I see you must be trying to make a comparison between hedonistic pleasure and joy:

Happy with short-lived
Dark, illusive, black pleasure?
If tasted white joy!

The "if" in the last line does not work grammatically as a pivot word ... so the short thought ends up not being effective or making any sense.

I would take this one back to the drawing board and try again.

d

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2013

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THANKS.

Comment from cvcopac

Good

I believe there's a moral, message, or messages intended here but it escapes me. Ambiguous but brilliant images exist. I just can't nail the metaphor. more concrete, please. Kenny

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013

THANKS.

Comment from CR Delport

Excellent

A lovely poem that is well written and well delivered. The message is clear and said in a lovely voice. Lovely art work to go with the poem.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013

THANKS FOR NICE REVIEW.

Comment from steevie

Excellent

I suppose you have to have one in order to have the other. Comparison is between darkness and light, in this case. How could we distinguish between them if only one exisited.

steve
smiles

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2013

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Comment from bhogg

Excellent

An interesting short poem. If I understand correctly, you point out a truth that most don't want to admit. We all like sin, if just for those "dark, illusive, black pleasures". Bill

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013

THANKS FOR INSIGHTFUL REVIEW.

Comment from Indie Skreet

Good

I am not sure if I have interpreted this correctly, but I fear I have and I am not sure I like the message......................................................but just in case I have got it wrong, I will not mark you low.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013

THANKS.