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Comment from seewhatimwritingnow
I've read this several times, trying to get some understanding as to what the message is? This may be a cultural lack of communication. I have to say, I did not come away with more knowledge.
This line made me chuckle...
"Home friendly online is free, accessible to our humankind
Internet!"
Wish I knew where online internet service is free? Certainly not in this country. lol I'm paying $54 a month for mine!
And this statement...
"Human! We've free schooling up to post doctorate level
Under no rules; pigs, dogs, monkeys get our certificates"
AH! Free schooling! WHERE? No rules? even pigs, dogs and monkeys can be certified? Free?
Sorry, Pal- I tried...really I did. I suggest you get a better command of the English language before posting? Since schooling is free...go for it! Betty
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
I've read this several times, trying to get some understanding as to what the message is? This may be a cultural lack of communication. I have to say, I did not come away with more knowledge.
This line made me chuckle...
"Home friendly online is free, accessible to our humankind
Internet!"
Wish I knew where online internet service is free? Certainly not in this country. lol I'm paying $54 a month for mine!
And this statement...
"Human! We've free schooling up to post doctorate level
Under no rules; pigs, dogs, monkeys get our certificates"
AH! Free schooling! WHERE? No rules? even pigs, dogs and monkeys can be certified? Free?
Sorry, Pal- I tried...really I did. I suggest you get a better command of the English language before posting? Since schooling is free...go for it! Betty
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks
Comment from cvcopac
I read several of your works and while I observe random bits of reason and point of view; most of them are undecipherable. This one made some sense overall--it has a logic. The Eagle searches for a way out of the trap, but is doomed to hunt and be hunted. I think at this point some essay's are in order, either that or work on perfecting syntax, punctuation, grammer, and maybe, some poetic devices to aid your verse? I think English might be a secondary language for you, is it? Kenny
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
I read several of your works and while I observe random bits of reason and point of view; most of them are undecipherable. This one made some sense overall--it has a logic. The Eagle searches for a way out of the trap, but is doomed to hunt and be hunted. I think at this point some essay's are in order, either that or work on perfecting syntax, punctuation, grammer, and maybe, some poetic devices to aid your verse? I think English might be a secondary language for you, is it? Kenny
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Alcreator,
This piece is more prose than poetry but there is nothing wrong with that. However, I found my mind wandering as I read and no matter how hard I tried I couldn't become engaged all the way through. You are intelligent and have a command of the English language but I think you should work on your skills as a poet. chey
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
Hi Alcreator,
This piece is more prose than poetry but there is nothing wrong with that. However, I found my mind wandering as I read and no matter how hard I tried I couldn't become engaged all the way through. You are intelligent and have a command of the English language but I think you should work on your skills as a poet. chey
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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Comment from Curt Mongold
I cannot, personally, call this poetry. It is definitely prose, and as such, should be in another category in my honest opinion, as it reads more as a hypotheses formulated for a dissertation rather than a poetic flowing of ideas and emotions with creative language and imagery.
Looking at your extensive resume', perhaps there is a reason why you lost your way on the path of poetic writing.
Best wishes there doc,
Curt
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
I cannot, personally, call this poetry. It is definitely prose, and as such, should be in another category in my honest opinion, as it reads more as a hypotheses formulated for a dissertation rather than a poetic flowing of ideas and emotions with creative language and imagery.
Looking at your extensive resume', perhaps there is a reason why you lost your way on the path of poetic writing.
Best wishes there doc,
Curt
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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Comment from c_lucas
Man's intelligent is challenge on a daily basis. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, allowing others to speak their mind.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
Man's intelligent is challenge on a daily basis. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, allowing others to speak their mind.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good feedback
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You're welcoem
Comment from Winslow
Dear ALCREATOR LITT RAY D,
I didn't really enjoy this. It is not very poetic and you use a lot of current day jargon words. Perhaps an essay with greater explanation of your opinions would make a better forum for presenting this. As is it is difficult to follow.
Regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
Dear ALCREATOR LITT RAY D,
I didn't really enjoy this. It is not very poetic and you use a lot of current day jargon words. Perhaps an essay with greater explanation of your opinions would make a better forum for presenting this. As is it is difficult to follow.
Regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks
Comment from RJFunston
Hi,
Very well written poem. The flow is easy to follow, the meaning clear from the moment the reader starts. It appears you have a great background for writing, so I would expect no less then well written piece.
Great job,
Robert
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
Hi,
Very well written poem. The flow is easy to follow, the meaning clear from the moment the reader starts. It appears you have a great background for writing, so I would expect no less then well written piece.
Great job,
Robert
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for interesting review
Comment from Jerry Rauhuff
You noticeably put a lot of effort into your work. SHOULDN'T MAN ACHIEVE HUMAN RANK STATUS--I like the outline of the poem and the message. I say well done.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
You noticeably put a lot of effort into your work. SHOULDN'T MAN ACHIEVE HUMAN RANK STATUS--I like the outline of the poem and the message. I say well done.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
Comment from SPOLIN
I know that your use of exclamation marks is critical to your work. But I had trouble with them. They seemed to interrupt the flow rather than do what you intend them to do - call attention? cry out? Still, the emotion is communicated.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
I know that your use of exclamation marks is critical to your work. But I had trouble with them. They seemed to interrupt the flow rather than do what you intend them to do - call attention? cry out? Still, the emotion is communicated.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good professional review
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is really thought stimulating. It is a poem out of which several poems can be written. You seem to be questioning humanity's quest to be gods in their own right and putting all our inventions under a microscope. well done
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
This is really thought stimulating. It is a poem out of which several poems can be written. You seem to be questioning humanity's quest to be gods in their own right and putting all our inventions under a microscope. well done
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for nice review