Breathe In
Keeping us Alive8 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We take the air we breathe for granted and without it we would cease to exist, this is a tribute to the air that we cannot see but it is life saving, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
We take the air we breathe for granted and without it we would cease to exist, this is a tribute to the air that we cannot see but it is life saving, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 25-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, anonymous,
A fine entry for the 1-6-1 poetry writing prompt contest. Good syllable count and connection between lines. Good rhyme. We all need air :)
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2020
Hello, anonymous,
A fine entry for the 1-6-1 poetry writing prompt contest. Good syllable count and connection between lines. Good rhyme. We all need air :)
Comment Written 24-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2020
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Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Yes, as the Bible points out, the air goes where it pleases. We can't tell precisely from where it comes or predict exactly where it will go. I gave a 4 because "where" is off-rhyme.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2020
Yes, as the Bible points out, the air goes where it pleases. We can't tell precisely from where it comes or predict exactly where it will go. I gave a 4 because "where" is off-rhyme.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2020
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Thanks for your review. Much appreciated
Comment from Anne-Marie brison
Dear author,
Wow!!!; What an excellent piece of work!!!!!! Thanks sooo much for sharing this with Fanstory!!!!!! Awesome job!!! Keep writing!!!!
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2020
Dear author,
Wow!!!; What an excellent piece of work!!!!!! Thanks sooo much for sharing this with Fanstory!!!!!! Awesome job!!! Keep writing!!!!
Comment Written 23-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2020
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Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your contest entry, Mystery Writer. Good job with the syllable count per line and the end rhymes. I like the image you paired with your words, too. You give readers something to think about in a good way.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2020
You did a great job with your contest entry, Mystery Writer. Good job with the syllable count per line and the end rhymes. I like the image you paired with your words, too. You give readers something to think about in a good way.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 23-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2020
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Thanks for your review Jan. Glad you enjoyed.
Comment from kahpot
Wonderful, yes it is something for us all to wonder about "where" great artwork for these words, love the rhyme words, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2020
Wonderful, yes it is something for us all to wonder about "where" great artwork for these words, love the rhyme words, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 23-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2020
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Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed.
Comment from Bill Schott
This 1-6-1, Breathe In, has the right set up and sees air as that THING which decides our future just by being here. Thank you air.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2020
This 1-6-1, Breathe In, has the right set up and sees air as that THING which decides our future just by being here. Thank you air.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2020
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Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed.
Comment from Mia Twysted
I like this piece for it ask a question I have ask myself from time to time. Where is the air. Why can't we see it? That which we need to continue on is invisible to us.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2020
I like this piece for it ask a question I have ask myself from time to time. Where is the air. Why can't we see it? That which we need to continue on is invisible to us.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2020
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Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed