Withdrawal
a 50-word story16 total reviews
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Bill, Well done comgratulations and trust you to find the irony in the gloves and mask going into the bank Ha Ha made me laugh a good fun 50 words. Cheers Chris
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2020
Hi Bill, Well done comgratulations and trust you to find the irony in the gloves and mask going into the bank Ha Ha made me laugh a good fun 50 words. Cheers Chris
Comment Written 18-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Chris
Comment from bob cullen
I got held up five times in the TAB. I wish your husband had held me up. This is well written, short, sharp and to the point. I hope he improved his technique
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2020
I got held up five times in the TAB. I wish your husband had held me up. This is well written, short, sharp and to the point. I hope he improved his technique
Comment Written 18-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Bob
Comment from judiverse
HI, Bill, I must have missed this because it was a blind contest entry, but it's a great one, and congratulations on winning the contest. What's a robber to do these days? He won't be taken seriously--just thought to be another concerned citizen. I like the way you got everything in so deftly. judi
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
HI, Bill, I must have missed this because it was a blind contest entry, but it's a great one, and congratulations on winning the contest. What's a robber to do these days? He won't be taken seriously--just thought to be another concerned citizen. I like the way you got everything in so deftly. judi
Comment Written 17-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Judi. I was surprised.
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You're very welcome. It was a well deserved win. judi
Comment from Anya Trofimova
Wow, a very powerful piece of writing! The cliffhanger at the end is completely unexpected and striking. Very well done and congratulations of winning the Humorous 50 Word Story competition!
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
Wow, a very powerful piece of writing! The cliffhanger at the end is completely unexpected and striking. Very well done and congratulations of winning the Humorous 50 Word Story competition!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Anya, for the kind review.
Comment from Raul1
I thought that this is very funny and creative. A simple story that is funny and hilarious. Well written. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Good luck!
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
I thought that this is very funny and creative. A simple story that is funny and hilarious. Well written. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Good luck!
Comment Written 15-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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Thanks, Raul.
Comment from Darlene Franklin
Oh, I love this one. Robbing banks has never been easier, since everyone is wearing masks and gloves! If only people were depositing money. How are criminals during the virus, hmm?
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
Oh, I love this one. Robbing banks has never been easier, since everyone is wearing masks and gloves! If only people were depositing money. How are criminals during the virus, hmm?
Comment Written 15-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Darlene
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This is really good and I like it. You're injecting some humor into a world crisis situation beautifully. It made me smile. Thanks for sharing this humorous and well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
This is really good and I like it. You're injecting some humor into a world crisis situation beautifully. It made me smile. Thanks for sharing this humorous and well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 15-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Jeffrey
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello my friend
Your poem is really funny. It's a good entry for the 80 words humorous contest. Good word count. It's hard to write a complete story in a flash fiction. You did a great job.
Stay safe stay home save lives.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
Hello my friend
Your poem is really funny. It's a good entry for the 80 words humorous contest. Good word count. It's hard to write a complete story in a flash fiction. You did a great job.
Stay safe stay home save lives.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Gypsy
Comment from Liz O'Neill
I love word play. Especially when it takes a minute to click in. It loses something if it take more than 5 minutes. Although that shouldn't be about the story. It is about the level of pun sensibility of the reader.
Well planned out.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
I love word play. Especially when it takes a minute to click in. It loses something if it take more than 5 minutes. Although that shouldn't be about the story. It is about the level of pun sensibility of the reader.
Well planned out.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Liz
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your contest entry is in good form, Mystery Author. With the virus, the gloves and the mask make sense. Apparently, this man was new to robbing banks. Having to return to the car for the note and gun must be the humorous part. Thanks for sharing. Best wishes. Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
Your contest entry is in good form, Mystery Author. With the virus, the gloves and the mask make sense. Apparently, this man was new to robbing banks. Having to return to the car for the note and gun must be the humorous part. Thanks for sharing. Best wishes. Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 14-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
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I guess it?s as humorous as a bank robbery would get. :)