Wondering
A simple puzzlement by chance41 total reviews
Comment from Maria Millsaps
That's one long riddle. I love riddles. This one speaks of life in general, do you take a chance and roll a dice, or do you blossom in the intention with the strength of a promise. Deep, snap finger, deep.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2019
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That's one long riddle. I love riddles. This one speaks of life in general, do you take a chance and roll a dice, or do you blossom in the intention with the strength of a promise. Deep, snap finger, deep.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2019
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Thank you Maria and wonderful meeting you! I really appreciate your lovely review and stars and hope to see you again often! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Thanks so much Maria for your lovely review and stars and hope to see you again often! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment from Nancy O'Connor1
A few nice metaphors. Life is a crap shoot we win and lose, but do we ever learn from our mistakes? Or just keep repeating the same ones over and over? I really like..."the slippery rain of chance."
Interesting thoughts.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2019
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A few nice metaphors. Life is a crap shoot we win and lose, but do we ever learn from our mistakes? Or just keep repeating the same ones over and over? I really like..."the slippery rain of chance."
Interesting thoughts.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2019
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Thanks Nancy, for your lovely review and stars, very sincerely appreciated and eager to see you again soon! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
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thanks so much Nancy, you have made my day and I sure hope to hear from you again...hopefully often! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
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Thanks so much sincerely for your lovely review and stars Nancy! I always hope to hear from you! Blessings! Vance
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Thank you Nancy, for your lovely review and please stay close, it's always a joy to hear from you! Vance
Comment from dovemarie
Dear Vance, I liked your use of verbs and how winds can be strong or still, and I liked your use of a garden of goodwill. It was a good consideration of how life is, and how we can gamble (roll the dice) to see if we will win or lose. Dovemarie
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2019
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Dear Vance, I liked your use of verbs and how winds can be strong or still, and I liked your use of a garden of goodwill. It was a good consideration of how life is, and how we can gamble (roll the dice) to see if we will win or lose. Dovemarie
Comment Written 21-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2019
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Thanks so much dovemarie, sof your lovely review and stars so sincerely appreciated! Blessings always! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
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Dear Vance, You're welcome. Dove
Comment from moongirlwriter
Hello Hisgrayness, This just popped up on my screen for reviewing and now I see that it was actually posted back in December. I'm glad I didn't miss the chance to review it. It is beautifully written and like you, have I been too soon? Or too late?
At times it does indeed feel that way.
I'm not sure why it was formatted and posted in this fashion because I think if it were centered and formatted in poetry form. . .how much nicer the flow and ability to come away with the full strength of the words. Just my thoughts. Nice that it was recognized. :)
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2019
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Hello Hisgrayness, This just popped up on my screen for reviewing and now I see that it was actually posted back in December. I'm glad I didn't miss the chance to review it. It is beautifully written and like you, have I been too soon? Or too late?
At times it does indeed feel that way.
I'm not sure why it was formatted and posted in this fashion because I think if it were centered and formatted in poetry form. . .how much nicer the flow and ability to come away with the full strength of the words. Just my thoughts. Nice that it was recognized. :)
Comment Written 21-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2019
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Thanks you sincerely moongirlwriter, for your lovely review and stars and sure do hope to see you again soon and often! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
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Comment from victor 66
Well, YOUR GRAYNESS, you have compacted a thought provoking poem in a rather small space. "Meaning and intention", are both important words when it comes to someone's actions. "No good deed ever goes unpunished." I believe whatever positive actions I direct towards others, I am the main recipient. I do things for others for my own sake. I have not idea how they will be received. But I know my "Meaning and intention". Best wishes.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Well, YOUR GRAYNESS, you have compacted a thought provoking poem in a rather small space. "Meaning and intention", are both important words when it comes to someone's actions. "No good deed ever goes unpunished." I believe whatever positive actions I direct towards others, I am the main recipient. I do things for others for my own sake. I have not idea how they will be received. But I know my "Meaning and intention". Best wishes.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Thanks victor 66 and sincerely glad to meet you, with hopes to see you often, including your works also! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
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it was my pleasure, Vance. Hope your Sunday is a good one,
Comment from kiwijenny
This reminds me of IF by Rudyard Kipling
If you can make one heap of all your winnings
And risk it on one turn of pitch-and-toss,
And lose, and start again at your beginnings
And never breathe a word about your loss;
If you can force your heart and nerve and sinew
To serve your turn long after they are gone,
And so hold on when there is nothing in you
Except the Will which says to them: 'Hold on!'
Well penned poem'
God bless
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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This reminds me of IF by Rudyard Kipling
If you can make one heap of all your winnings
And risk it on one turn of pitch-and-toss,
And lose, and start again at your beginnings
And never breathe a word about your loss;
If you can force your heart and nerve and sinew
To serve your turn long after they are gone,
And so hold on when there is nothing in you
Except the Will which says to them: 'Hold on!'
Well penned poem'
God bless
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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thanks sincerely, so much kiwijenny for your lovely review and stars and please know that it is always my delight to hear from you in all ways! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment from Stephanie Launiu
Very interesting presentation of your poem that you consider a 'riddle'. I have read it over several times, and have harvested nuggets of realization each time. I wonder why you chose not to align it as a poem with lines and verses. I think it might have been easier to digest. But then, who knows? The question you present is one for the ages: are we purely victims of fate and chance, or do we have any control over our futures? Thanks for sharing. I will mull it over in my mind for quite a while.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Very interesting presentation of your poem that you consider a 'riddle'. I have read it over several times, and have harvested nuggets of realization each time. I wonder why you chose not to align it as a poem with lines and verses. I think it might have been easier to digest. But then, who knows? The question you present is one for the ages: are we purely victims of fate and chance, or do we have any control over our futures? Thanks for sharing. I will mull it over in my mind for quite a while.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Thank you so very much and very sincerely for your truly thoughtful and generous review ...I sure hope to you would share your mulling with me when you are finished as I'm certainly impressed with your mind-width already!! Please stay close! Vance
Comment from HealingMuse
Hi His,
Exceptional! Wish I had a six-star to award - this one surely deserves such distinction. Very, very nicely done!
Nothing amiss here to suggest improving upon.
My favorite lines:
"commitment holds against the slippery rain of chance "; and
"roll the dice of life..."
Love it!
Thanks for sharing,
Jan
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
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Hi His,
Exceptional! Wish I had a six-star to award - this one surely deserves such distinction. Very, very nicely done!
Nothing amiss here to suggest improving upon.
My favorite lines:
"commitment holds against the slippery rain of chance "; and
"roll the dice of life..."
Love it!
Thanks for sharing,
Jan
Comment Written 13-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
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Thank you sincerely Jan, for your wonderful review and wished sixes (I know that well as it happens for me too often! Please stay close always! love and blessings always! VANCE
Comment from Miss Sherry
Your write is a bit hard to read in the manner you have presented it. Old eyes need more color contrast. The content however is very lovely and I like the tenor of the poem. I would like to read more of your work and shall see if I can find some.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
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Your write is a bit hard to read in the manner you have presented it. Old eyes need more color contrast. The content however is very lovely and I like the tenor of the poem. I would like to read more of your work and shall see if I can find some.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
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So very sorry Sherry, for the color contrast issue and I will b sure to change that in all future works! all the best! Vance
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It is hard to tell sometimes, but I love the poem!
Comment from KyColonel Randal
Thank you for sharing this. I like the rhyming and other literary devices within the stream of consciousness narrative. It would be useful to keep writing these thoughts down so you can go back to them and reflect on them later, make comparisons, etc. The contrast between the black text and the red background makes this a little hard to read.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
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Thank you for sharing this. I like the rhyming and other literary devices within the stream of consciousness narrative. It would be useful to keep writing these thoughts down so you can go back to them and reflect on them later, make comparisons, etc. The contrast between the black text and the red background makes this a little hard to read.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
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Thanks Randal, for the excellent review and stars and much appreciated point of the text coloration. Please stay tuned! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance