Nature as Artist
Love walking in morning fog2 total reviews
Comment from rama devi
Second review
Hmmmm - how odd. Sounds like 8 to me but you are right, the syllable counters say otherwise.
First review (FOUR stars)
I love the fog too. Impressionism by Nature indeed. Nice alliterate and consonance of M sounds in misty, impressions and mellowing as well as consonance of W in the last line. Lovely presentation.
Only one issue is the middle line is 8 syllables and this is a 5-7-5 contest (reason for four stars). You could remedy this by trimming the filler word BY. Example:
impressionistic Nature
Good luck. Happy to upgrade if you fix line two to seven syllables.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2017
Second review
Hmmmm - how odd. Sounds like 8 to me but you are right, the syllable counters say otherwise.
First review (FOUR stars)
I love the fog too. Impressionism by Nature indeed. Nice alliterate and consonance of M sounds in misty, impressions and mellowing as well as consonance of W in the last line. Lovely presentation.
Only one issue is the middle line is 8 syllables and this is a 5-7-5 contest (reason for four stars). You could remedy this by trimming the filler word BY. Example:
impressionistic Nature
Good luck. Happy to upgrade if you fix line two to seven syllables.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 05-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2017
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Thanks for the read. I checked with a syllable dictionary at https://www.howmanysyllables.com/syllable_counter/ says line two has seven syllables as written. Thanks for the feedback. Is the dictionary incorrect?
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Thanks for your gracious response and catching my mistake.
Hmmmm - it
s so odd. Sounds like 8 to me read aloud.
However, you are right, the syllable counters say otherwise. I checked two of them.
Upgraded.
Warmly, rd
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Thank you for your input, it is always greatly appreciated. And thanks for the upgrade.
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Sure thing. :)
Comment from papa55mike
I've read several of these entries today and I like this one. I really love the second line, drawing the comparison to a different form. Great job.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2017
I've read several of these entries today and I like this one. I really love the second line, drawing the comparison to a different form. Great job.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 05-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2017
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Thanks for the read and the positive feedback.