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Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is something totally different from any of the other Fanstory adverts I've read, mikey.Very clever, drag 'em in with the sex scene then punch in with the details. Good luck in the contest,
cheers,
valda
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This is something totally different from any of the other Fanstory adverts I've read, mikey.Very clever, drag 'em in with the sex scene then punch in with the details. Good luck in the contest,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 28-Oct-2016
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Well done, Mikey! Well done indeed! I think your text is great, the perfect advertisement for Fan It's great to catch up with your writing again, just thought I would drop in for some stimulation, LOL Giddy
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Well done, Mikey! Well done indeed! I think your text is great, the perfect advertisement for Fan It's great to catch up with your writing again, just thought I would drop in for some stimulation, LOL Giddy
Comment Written 28-Oct-2016
Comment from Joy Graham
Yup, sex sells. I just lost all hope for my own contest entry. Oh well. It'll be fun to read all the entries. Somebody just reviewed mine and then told me to check out yours. So I rushed right over. You've got members buzzing with this one.
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Yup, sex sells. I just lost all hope for my own contest entry. Oh well. It'll be fun to read all the entries. Somebody just reviewed mine and then told me to check out yours. So I rushed right over. You've got members buzzing with this one.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2016
Comment from amada
I am sure many readers will enjoy the teasing aspect of this ad. Others, maybe not. But what the heck, anything for a buck. Fun!
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I am sure many readers will enjoy the teasing aspect of this ad. Others, maybe not. But what the heck, anything for a buck. Fun!
Comment Written 27-Oct-2016
Comment from nordicgirl
Not sure what they are looking for, but this is one I would stop for. Clever and one that will be hard to beat although I read one other really good one. Something different. Fun! NG
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Not sure what they are looking for, but this is one I would stop for. Clever and one that will be hard to beat although I read one other really good one. Something different. Fun! NG
Comment Written 27-Oct-2016
Comment from Susanjohn
Well ya got my attention!!! ....nice job on this Mikey!!! brought a smile to my face!!! very clever! hope all is well!
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Well ya got my attention!!! ....nice job on this Mikey!!! brought a smile to my face!!! very clever! hope all is well!
Comment Written 26-Oct-2016
Comment from robyn corum
Mikey,
I can picture this really well. It sounds like a cool ad for the site, but it's not what I thought they were looking for. I thought they were just looking for a voice-over, not the whole thing, but I may not have understood...?? Check again, maybe?
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Mikey,
I can picture this really well. It sounds like a cool ad for the site, but it's not what I thought they were looking for. I thought they were just looking for a voice-over, not the whole thing, but I may not have understood...?? Check again, maybe?
Comment Written 26-Oct-2016
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That is so funny! But, when I read it out to my husband, he said that it was the bl--dy truth! LOL. Excellent contest entry. Good luck, I'm sure Tom will love this one. :) Sandra xxx
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That is so funny! But, when I read it out to my husband, he said that it was the bl--dy truth! LOL. Excellent contest entry. Good luck, I'm sure Tom will love this one. :) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 26-Oct-2016
Comment from WalkerMan
This is an amusing and somewhat "different" take on an ad for FanStory, while still covering the key points about the benefits of joining. Who better to think of ads for FS than the members? Well done.
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This is an amusing and somewhat "different" take on an ad for FanStory, while still covering the key points about the benefits of joining. Who better to think of ads for FS than the members? Well done.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2016
Comment from sandy montgomery
Lol. This is great. It's got a fantastic hook. Entertaining...informative....true great job. I love the last line It's just too good. Great job. Thank you for sharing your work. Good luck in the contest. I think you have a winner here.
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Lol. This is great. It's got a fantastic hook. Entertaining...informative....true great job. I love the last line It's just too good. Great job. Thank you for sharing your work. Good luck in the contest. I think you have a winner here.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2016