The Garden Door
An Awdl Gynt poem - see notes52 total reviews
Comment from Hayley Solomon
Brilliant - particularly like original use of Hodmandod for god rhyme Very in keeping using two ancient languages in juxtaposition with each other. Snail! I must remember that....:)
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
Brilliant - particularly like original use of Hodmandod for god rhyme Very in keeping using two ancient languages in juxtaposition with each other. Snail! I must remember that....:)
Comment Written 27-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
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Very many thanks for your lovely review and six stars, Hayley. Much appreciated! Tony
Comment from Alan K Pease
You delve into oriental roots and the efforts of a Chinese God to maintain the fragrence, structure and character of his garden through the activities of your uncle. You mix well several cultures - Oriental, Australian, and Greek.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
You delve into oriental roots and the efforts of a Chinese God to maintain the fragrence, structure and character of his garden through the activities of your uncle. You mix well several cultures - Oriental, Australian, and Greek.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
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Very many thanks, Alan. I have had to make some fairly major amendments to this to comply with the contest rules. Tony
Comment from Treischel
A fascinating tale of a Chinese God of the Olive, written to Pantygynt's Awdl Gynt format, very expressive. I'm not sure the first four lines of the second Stanza properly carry the rhyme scheme because yang and sang seem wrong unless the "an" in each make it an acceptable slant line.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
A fascinating tale of a Chinese God of the Olive, written to Pantygynt's Awdl Gynt format, very expressive. I'm not sure the first four lines of the second Stanza properly carry the rhyme scheme because yang and sang seem wrong unless the "an" in each make it an acceptable slant line.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
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Thanks, Tom! I was a bit hesitant about that as a rhyme, too - hoping that it was close enough to be accepted as a slant rhyme, bu not sure. At the moment, I can't see a way around it. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from jusylee72
very nice poem beautifully illustrated in pictures and words. I think this form would be hard but you seem to have made it flow easily. I like your style and your message.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
very nice poem beautifully illustrated in pictures and words. I think this form would be hard but you seem to have made it flow easily. I like your style and your message.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
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Thanks, Lisa! It's an intricate form but interesting to write. Glad you enjoyed it! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Irish Rain
I just so enjoyed this! I've never written one of these, but I love the sing-song quality of it, and the fascinating subject matter, and notes! Beautiful! Blessings....
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
I just so enjoyed this! I've never written one of these, but I love the sing-song quality of it, and the fascinating subject matter, and notes! Beautiful! Blessings....
Comment Written 23-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
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So glad you enjoyed it! It's an intricate form but interesting to write. Thank you very much for the accolade of six stars. Greatly appreciated! Best wishes, Tony
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You are very welcome!
Comment from jlsavell
tfawcus,
This is a beautiful work. Your poem filled with emotive and sensory appeal. Thank you for the author's notes for I wasn't sure what a Awd gynt is in poetic form but it works well for me. jlsavell
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
tfawcus,
This is a beautiful work. Your poem filled with emotive and sensory appeal. Thank you for the author's notes for I wasn't sure what a Awd gynt is in poetic form but it works well for me. jlsavell
Comment Written 23-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
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So glad you enjoyed it, Jimi! It's an intricate form but interesting to write. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Aqua2021
This poem rhymed so nicely with its words! My favorite line was, " by winds that lift a sacred moan." Personification sewn into the poem worked very well. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
This poem rhymed so nicely with its words! My favorite line was, " by winds that lift a sacred moan." Personification sewn into the poem worked very well. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 23-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
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So glad you enjoyed it, Aqua! It's an intricate form but interesting to write. Thank you too for picking out the part you liked best. Greatly appreciated! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Lisa Deverick
A 'soulfully' Beautiful poem. My favorite line is "Those secret paths now overgrown with humble plants he loved, self sown by winds..." life goes on... perhaps not in the orderly way we managed it once, but life goes on...
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
A 'soulfully' Beautiful poem. My favorite line is "Those secret paths now overgrown with humble plants he loved, self sown by winds..." life goes on... perhaps not in the orderly way we managed it once, but life goes on...
Comment Written 23-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
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So glad you enjoyed it, Lisa! It's an intricate form but interesting to write. Thank you for your kind words. Greatly appreciated! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from nancyrabbrose
First of all, the photograph you took is amazing. I was captured by it. A work of art in itself.
Now about your magnificent poem:
Wow, the scholarly work you did is awesome. The feelings and imagery are beautiful. In addition, I feel your reverence for the spirit of your subject.
Thank you for your work of art.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
First of all, the photograph you took is amazing. I was captured by it. A work of art in itself.
Now about your magnificent poem:
Wow, the scholarly work you did is awesome. The feelings and imagery are beautiful. In addition, I feel your reverence for the spirit of your subject.
Thank you for your work of art.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
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So glad you enjoyed it, Nancy! It's an intricate form but interesting to write. Thank you very much for the accolade of six stars. Greatly appreciated! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Eternal Muse
Tony, this is the work of a genius. I am totally humbled.
In a form that is so difficult we needed to create a color chart to make people get it, yours flows naturally and unforced, without any strain. A delight to read. Melodical and musical, a true balm for the ear.
Favorite lines:
Those secret paths now overgrown
with humble plants he loved, self-sown
by winds that lift a sacred moan.
Hong Shi enthrones his hill.
This will be hard to beat. You are a natural in Awdl Gynt (smile).
Amazing work.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
Tony, this is the work of a genius. I am totally humbled.
In a form that is so difficult we needed to create a color chart to make people get it, yours flows naturally and unforced, without any strain. A delight to read. Melodical and musical, a true balm for the ear.
Favorite lines:
Those secret paths now overgrown
with humble plants he loved, self-sown
by winds that lift a sacred moan.
Hong Shi enthrones his hill.
This will be hard to beat. You are a natural in Awdl Gynt (smile).
Amazing work.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
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So glad you enjoyed it, Yelena! It's an intricate form but interesting to write. Thank you very much for the accolade of six stars. Greatly appreciated! I have made a few changes since you reviewed. Best wishes, Tony