Little Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 335 "The Crane"Small and Specialty Poems
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Comment from Joan E.
I think the crane is also a symbol of longevity in Japan--I'll have to check in the morning. I'd forgotten about the Fibonacci Poem--thanks to you and Patchelaw for re-introducing it. I enjoyed your reference to the "golden ratio" as you described the statue that you shared in your photograph as well. Your brother's yard is an endless source of inspiration! Cheers- Joan, from Japan
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2015
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I think the crane is also a symbol of longevity in Japan--I'll have to check in the morning. I'd forgotten about the Fibonacci Poem--thanks to you and Patchelaw for re-introducing it. I enjoyed your reference to the "golden ratio" as you described the statue that you shared in your photograph as well. Your brother's yard is an endless source of inspiration! Cheers- Joan, from Japan
Comment Written 10-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2015
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Thank you Joan. I am sure it is in Japan too. The Sandhills cranes are migrating through Minnesota right now. I tries to get a photo, but saw some, too far away in the air.
Comment from Shadowfoz
It is a beautiful poem, so simple yet so complex.
I like the explanation you added to help me understand what the poem was about. You made this piece available for any type of audience. The picture also helped to bring this to another level, a concrete symbol for the writing.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2015
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It is a beautiful poem, so simple yet so complex.
I like the explanation you added to help me understand what the poem was about. You made this piece available for any type of audience. The picture also helped to bring this to another level, a concrete symbol for the writing.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2015
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Thank you Shadowfoz. I so glad you not priced that, as a worked hard to get it there, changing the words several times.
Comment from LIJ Red
Yeah, a 55 syllable line would make for breathless reading aloud. Somebody had his computer work PI out to a quadrillion places. Well, the words and the photo and the
Fibonacci sequence are interesting. Excellent post.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2015
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Yeah, a 55 syllable line would make for breathless reading aloud. Somebody had his computer work PI out to a quadrillion places. Well, the words and the photo and the
Fibonacci sequence are interesting. Excellent post.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2015
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Thank you LijRed
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
"The Crane" is an excellent poem embodying both Chinese mythology and a mathematical formula which could be a key to unlocking the mysteries of the universe. It has good figurative language (cosmic emanations of prosperity for the owner's property).
Your friend and colleague,
Preston
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2015
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Hi, Treischel,
"The Crane" is an excellent poem embodying both Chinese mythology and a mathematical formula which could be a key to unlocking the mysteries of the universe. It has good figurative language (cosmic emanations of prosperity for the owner's property).
Your friend and colleague,
Preston
Comment Written 07-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2015
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Thank you Preston. Yes, I thought you might be intrigued by this concept.
Comment from Pantygynt
I remember fibonacci from my student days in training to be a teacher. My eyes always did tend to glaze over abit when numerals entered upon the scene but, thanks to better teaching at the college in my mature years than I received at school as a child, I began to take some it in and this triangular relationship between mathematics art and nature is certainly appealing and your little poem here is a gem of a picture.
Nice one Tom.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2015
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I remember fibonacci from my student days in training to be a teacher. My eyes always did tend to glaze over abit when numerals entered upon the scene but, thanks to better teaching at the college in my mature years than I received at school as a child, I began to take some it in and this triangular relationship between mathematics art and nature is certainly appealing and your little poem here is a gem of a picture.
Nice one Tom.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2015
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Thank you Pantygynt. It gets amazing, the more you study it.appreciate the review.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
Great poem and an interesting form. When I see the title I thought of our national bird the blue crane. Very good photography of that golden crane.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2015
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Great poem and an interesting form. When I see the title I thought of our national bird the blue crane. Very good photography of that golden crane.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2015
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Thank you Sandra. I hear that Sandhills Cranes are migrating through Minnesota right now. I'll try to get a photo of one.
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I did not know their is different cranes. It would be interesting to see what the Sandhill crane looks like, hope you get a great photo of one to share.
Comment from Selina Stambi
Who would have thought a marriage between mathematics and poetry was possible?
Seeing is believing, Tom. And the poetic education of yours truly progresses under your tutelage!
Impressive feat in numbers. :)
Have a wonderful weekend.
Sonali
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2015
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Who would have thought a marriage between mathematics and poetry was possible?
Seeing is believing, Tom. And the poetic education of yours truly progresses under your tutelage!
Impressive feat in numbers. :)
Have a wonderful weekend.
Sonali
Comment Written 06-Nov-2015
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Thank you Sonali. It truly is amazing.
Comment from I am Cat
I love yard statues... this is a lovely one...
and your poem pays tribute to the crane,
which is a lovely bird...
I liked your poem, it would have been cool
to see the top curved like the neck of the crane.
;)
lol
(too much?)
Well done
Cat
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2015
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I love yard statues... this is a lovely one...
and your poem pays tribute to the crane,
which is a lovely bird...
I liked your poem, it would have been cool
to see the top curved like the neck of the crane.
;)
lol
(too much?)
Well done
Cat
Comment Written 06-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2015
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Thank you Cat. Not long enoug. Plus I liked that Hersey Kiss form.
Comment from Morning Thunder
Treishel,
My online name is Morning Thunder, and I'm new to Fan Story. I am amazed at your ingenuity. What excites me-the-writer is the challenge of writing anything within the very strict parameters of meter or form or syllable count. You notes are beautifully written and I appreciate your descriptions and explanations.
Obsessional guy that I am, I noticed something in your notes that you may want to amend: above, where you show the sequence of numbers, you left out the 8 that I think should go between the 5 and the 13 (unless I misunderstand the Fibonacci sequence). When I look at the words of your poem and the FORMAT in which they extend outward, it makes me think of a pattern I've read about, (the name of which I cannot recall) in which random throws of dice (or anything) tend to make this same bowed-out shape over a period of many trials.
Treischel, I more than admire your creation of the poetic forms you mention under your photo. They inspire me to try to write my own poems, adhering fastidiously to the requirements. I wish you'd post a new contest requiring one to write within the strict confines that your creations demand because I'd love to try to write within those borders.
I've been told by the CEC that it's inappropriate for someone like me to ask anyone else to REVIEW their work, so I won't ask that of you. HOWEVER, if you care to merely READ the ALOUETTE poem I submitted (its deadline has not yet arrived) you're welcome to look. I never wrote an ALOUETTE poem and it was fun trying to force ideas into the tight syllable sequence the contest required and still have the poem flow and make sense.
The idea of melding the impersonal dynamics of mathematics with the emotional aesthetics of poetry is in itself fascinating. I commend you for your creativity and
your interesting descriptions. You are the most interesting writer I've seen in the week since I first joined.
Thanks for your intriguing poem. You can be sure I'll be reading other pieces you've already submitted or plan to submit. A great day to you.
Morning Thunder 11-6-15
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2015
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Treishel,
My online name is Morning Thunder, and I'm new to Fan Story. I am amazed at your ingenuity. What excites me-the-writer is the challenge of writing anything within the very strict parameters of meter or form or syllable count. You notes are beautifully written and I appreciate your descriptions and explanations.
Obsessional guy that I am, I noticed something in your notes that you may want to amend: above, where you show the sequence of numbers, you left out the 8 that I think should go between the 5 and the 13 (unless I misunderstand the Fibonacci sequence). When I look at the words of your poem and the FORMAT in which they extend outward, it makes me think of a pattern I've read about, (the name of which I cannot recall) in which random throws of dice (or anything) tend to make this same bowed-out shape over a period of many trials.
Treischel, I more than admire your creation of the poetic forms you mention under your photo. They inspire me to try to write my own poems, adhering fastidiously to the requirements. I wish you'd post a new contest requiring one to write within the strict confines that your creations demand because I'd love to try to write within those borders.
I've been told by the CEC that it's inappropriate for someone like me to ask anyone else to REVIEW their work, so I won't ask that of you. HOWEVER, if you care to merely READ the ALOUETTE poem I submitted (its deadline has not yet arrived) you're welcome to look. I never wrote an ALOUETTE poem and it was fun trying to force ideas into the tight syllable sequence the contest required and still have the poem flow and make sense.
The idea of melding the impersonal dynamics of mathematics with the emotional aesthetics of poetry is in itself fascinating. I commend you for your creativity and
your interesting descriptions. You are the most interesting writer I've seen in the week since I first joined.
Thanks for your intriguing poem. You can be sure I'll be reading other pieces you've already submitted or plan to submit. A great day to you.
Morning Thunder 11-6-15
Comment Written 06-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2015
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Thank you morning. You are correct about that missing number. I'll have to correct that. I appreciate the catch. Must have happened in an edit. Also. Welcome to the site.
Comment from tfawcus
I enjoyed this all the more because you were able to meld form and subject so well. I always used to like teaching my math students about the Fibonacci sequence, a subject that fired the imagination and illustrated real-world applications.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2015
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I enjoyed this all the more because you were able to meld form and subject so well. I always used to like teaching my math students about the Fibonacci sequence, a subject that fired the imagination and illustrated real-world applications.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2015
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Thank you Tony. That must have been exciting.