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Comment from Joan E.
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I found a post I missed, probably when I was traveling. The mesmerizing, swinging pendant watch caught my attention, and it established the mood well for your reflections. I particularly admired your coupling the phrase "one night stands" with "alone". Compelling- Joan

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2015


reply by the author on 12-Jul-2015
    come...come...come....I'm practicing Joan. Pretty soon no female flesh will be able to resist charm Svengali....lol...ahh thank you for putting up with me....love Michael
reply by Joan E. on 12-Jul-2015
    Oh, my--you're scaring me! But I know your just being playful... Hugs and have a restful Sunday- Joan
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2015
    no...I'm serious...-headtilt-...are looking at the watch J...I dont think your doing it right...haha...you too have a great day...love-
reply by Joan E. on 12-Jul-2015
    Alright--I'll get with the program and check the watch--ready, set GO! Smiles- Joan
Comment from jlsavell
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Dear Michael,

Often it amazes me, how a certain song stimulates your thought process.
It is often hard to tell if your creative imagination just takes flight or if the song evokes a certain memory or a compilation of memories, assimilated and interjected to the words of a song.


This song is certainly a brilliant metaphor for intense lovers whose actions or lack thereof, have captured and assassinated the loving heart. Thus a killer, the one night stand is not necessarily a literal time frame but a period of time in the life of one.

Such is how I interpret this beautiful work, though you tell me it is not good. It is good, very good.


Your one night stand, I feel, metaphorically stands for this period of time, a relationship which ended up ripping each others heart out and still
in the present moment of time, the narrator wants to return to the crime scene, for redemption may await In the arms of real love.

Now whether this is literal, bringing us into the living room of the narrator's mind or of the highly imaginative persuasion designed to entertain, who is to know?
Such is the beauty of your work.. enigmatic, drawing, curiosity evocation, and captivating to say the least.

Either way, you draw us into the narrator's world as a seasoned deep water fisherman. Skillful, cunning and adroit.

Your poetry brings to us a certain truth about human behaviorism. It basks in experience, whether good or bad. It leaves the reader with a wider awareness of his feelings and the world which surrounds his life and his paradigms.
Simply brilliant.

Much love to you..

Respectfully and lovingly
Jimi

 Comment Written 31-May-2015


reply by the author on 31-May-2015
    ahh.....-smile- hello...no...-headshake-....but I do hope someday to write an opera worthy of such review....man sure good to hear all that other stuff though....ahh thank you buttercup Laureate...you push the bar way way high. been listening to yellow all day. Love Michael
reply by jlsavell on 31-May-2015
    Yes, thatcsong will always be a part of you, though you are sharing it with Brooke today.

    Laureate? You are funny and sweet and yes you could write an opera.. Suor Angelica II

    Love you....
Comment from livelylinda
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Michael: your soulfulness maintains, setting you aside from all other authors . . . I, therefore dub you, Moody Man. And what a man is he! Into the depth of himself he brings to the sky and air his most forlorn thoughts. In few words he creates a melancholy haze which settles around us as we read. Creative and impressionistic as usual. Soft Thunder

 Comment Written 27-May-2015


reply by the author on 27-May-2015
    lol.....well moody I am....sold! so how you been soft thunder....still aint gonna take me up on my offer huh...-wink-...ah I'm here if you need me. love you Michael
reply by livelylinda on 28-May-2015
    Sorry, Michael . . . I am clinging to my current home as it is so close to my hospital, which is my second home/vacation villa (?).
Comment from daeneam
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Hello there, dear Michael!

How are you? I heard about floods devastating Texas from the news... are you affected?

Please stay safe and never cease praying! I'll always pray for you! I love you! c", mae

 Comment Written 27-May-2015


reply by the author on 28-May-2015
    Hi mae....smile....nope I believed noah.....were high and dry waiting on a dove......love you michael
reply by daeneam on 01-Jun-2015
    hehe funny, dear! I hope you're in the best shape! Hugs and kisses, c", Mae
Comment from TPAC
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Poetic in definition poet tells of constant returns back to being alone very crisp in descriptive defining illusive terms as

"dying assassination"

placement or an error, I think placement a wonderful write Thanks for sharing

 Comment Written 26-May-2015


reply by the author on 26-May-2015
    Why thank you very much Tpac....I wrote this without listening or while listen would be more fitting....I found the assassin song by Mayer...and made it work.....I fixed by now....-wink- thanks man....love Bug-
Comment from songecho
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Good choice of subject. Good representation.

Tell your friend that i'm aware you care.
Everything came together. You must realize that it's coming from my heart and not my head.
This magic moment will last forever, until the end of time.


 Comment Written 26-May-2015


reply by the author on 26-May-2015
    My friend knows songecho...but the concern has been noted.....and we both want to say a big gee thanks...hugs....love bug-
reply by songecho on 27-May-2015
    Many, of what you say, in return. lol
    There will be peace when you are done. We'll take this way too far. I'll leave you breathless, it'll leave a scar. I'll write your name.
    I just want to stop and thank you, baby.
    I've known all long some candles burn even when the night is gone. You get exactly what you see.
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
    ....headtilt-....thats what momma used to say anyway....-wink-