Shadow Dance
rhyming quatrains in 8/6/8/6167 total reviews
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
An amazing series of rhyming quatrains.
What an amazing and unexpected subject choice.
You have captured the thought sand questions I'm sure children often have about shadows.
A rare happy memory of my own childhood-thank you.
The words and image combine perfectly.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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An amazing series of rhyming quatrains.
What an amazing and unexpected subject choice.
You have captured the thought sand questions I'm sure children often have about shadows.
A rare happy memory of my own childhood-thank you.
The words and image combine perfectly.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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Seken, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from lalajovanoski
Extremely well written piece. I was able to easily relate to the message the author is executing. I really enjoyed reading it. Very relatable. Well done!
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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Extremely well written piece. I was able to easily relate to the message the author is executing. I really enjoyed reading it. Very relatable. Well done!
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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lala, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Perfect! Brilliant photo from Miranda, and brilliant words to accompany it. We used to make animal shapes with our hands. Memories, how you always manage to waken them from their long sleep. I really enjoyed your poem. :) Sandra
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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Perfect! Brilliant photo from Miranda, and brilliant words to accompany it. We used to make animal shapes with our hands. Memories, how you always manage to waken them from their long sleep. I really enjoyed your poem. :) Sandra
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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sandra, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Sanku
Between the dusk and dawn it plays
a little game of hide and seek
it hugs you tight so that it might
tease you a little, my sweetheart Sawyer!
Many of your poems take me down my childhood days.Riddles were a source of great fun and I remember once my friend came and asked me this riddle
'who is this friend who walks with you
From morning to twilight
sometimes in front,sometimes behind
but you never will talk to him
But as one grows up the innocent mantle of shadows becomes heavier with layers of gloomy connotations added to it.
Loved your rhyming quatrains-Santha.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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Between the dusk and dawn it plays
a little game of hide and seek
it hugs you tight so that it might
tease you a little, my sweetheart Sawyer!
Many of your poems take me down my childhood days.Riddles were a source of great fun and I remember once my friend came and asked me this riddle
'who is this friend who walks with you
From morning to twilight
sometimes in front,sometimes behind
but you never will talk to him
But as one grows up the innocent mantle of shadows becomes heavier with layers of gloomy connotations added to it.
Loved your rhyming quatrains-Santha.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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Santha, thank you so very much for your thoughtful and generous response to my poem :-) Brooke
Comment from rama devi
delightful whimsy and, as usual, deftly penned with flawless flow and meter and good rhyming. Excellent POV for Sawyer--captures the thinking style of his age nicely. Good phonetics, as usual, too. especially like the alliteration and consonance of S in this section (and alliteration of R too):
He never tells me where he's been --
he's more the silent kind,
but if he has a secret life,
I guess I shouldn't mind
because he always reappears
with regularity,
so we can share another day,
my shadow friend and me.
Nice work.
Lovely presentation.
Thanks for sharing.
Warmly, rd
PS Are you planning on compiling a book of Sawyer-inspired poems?
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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delightful whimsy and, as usual, deftly penned with flawless flow and meter and good rhyming. Excellent POV for Sawyer--captures the thinking style of his age nicely. Good phonetics, as usual, too. especially like the alliteration and consonance of S in this section (and alliteration of R too):
He never tells me where he's been --
he's more the silent kind,
but if he has a secret life,
I guess I shouldn't mind
because he always reappears
with regularity,
so we can share another day,
my shadow friend and me.
Nice work.
Lovely presentation.
Thanks for sharing.
Warmly, rd
PS Are you planning on compiling a book of Sawyer-inspired poems?
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much, rama devi :-) Yes, I have plans! Brooke
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Yay! :)
Comment from Smoothiecool
well chosen words to allow the reader to see and feel the sun at play and the wonder where its been
good visual to portray message
good enjambment to allow flow through verses
good rhyme through out
good use of "e" "o" consonance
cheers Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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well chosen words to allow the reader to see and feel the sun at play and the wonder where its been
good visual to portray message
good enjambment to allow flow through verses
good rhyme through out
good use of "e" "o" consonance
cheers Smoothiecool
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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Faye, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
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most welcome Brooke
have a blessed weekend..SC >.Faye
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
He never tells me where he's been --
he's more the silent kind, << So true!
but if he has a secret life,
I guess I shouldn't mind
Lovvve this one! How clever to think of a shadow with a life of its own, coming and going. ANother winner! :)
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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He never tells me where he's been --
he's more the silent kind, << So true!
but if he has a secret life,
I guess I shouldn't mind
Lovvve this one! How clever to think of a shadow with a life of its own, coming and going. ANother winner! :)
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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Phyllis, thank you so much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Curly Girly
This is a lovely poem, Brooke. I remember playing with my shadow as a child. Have you published any books yet? Surely, you must have by now!
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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This is a lovely poem, Brooke. I remember playing with my shadow as a child. Have you published any books yet? Surely, you must have by now!
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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CG, thanks so much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Gargantuan2
I am reminded, from the shadow content, of a song and small video for it called 'me and my shadow'. That too was a cute interpretation of someone enjoying their day in the sun.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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I am reminded, from the shadow content, of a song and small video for it called 'me and my shadow'. That too was a cute interpretation of someone enjoying their day in the sun.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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Gargantuan, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from vfbryant
What a comforting poem. The way you see things through the eyes of a child turns the familiar into things of joy and wonder. It reminds me of Robert Louis Stevenson's playful rhymes...full of refreshing innocence. What a nice poem to read as I head to bed. :)
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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What a comforting poem. The way you see things through the eyes of a child turns the familiar into things of joy and wonder. It reminds me of Robert Louis Stevenson's playful rhymes...full of refreshing innocence. What a nice poem to read as I head to bed. :)
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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vfbryant, thank you so much for your thoughtful and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
