Mama Tries to Pin the Blame
two wildly wildly modified triolets125 total reviews
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is yet another interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. I like this lighthearted approach to things.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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This is yet another interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. I like this lighthearted approach to things.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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thanks so much, Tomes :-) Brooke
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My pleasure
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
LOL! Sawyer squealed on you, Miranda. Better not try that again! This is all too adorable to handle. I am sooooo envious of you, Brooke. Wish I had a cute grandson like yours. :)
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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LOL! Sawyer squealed on you, Miranda. Better not try that again! This is all too adorable to handle. I am sooooo envious of you, Brooke. Wish I had a cute grandson like yours. :)
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Phyllis, thank you so much :-) He sure is one to brighten my life, so I'm more than happy to share him. I was just watching a couple of short videos of him in today's My Gym class - the highlight of my day :-) Brooke
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You're lucky that Miranda is so good with a camera and that he's so cooperative. Not as good as being there, but must help a lot. WE sure enjoy it! :)
Comment from Just2Write
I loved this wildly modified Triolet. Oh, the humiliation of it all. Poor Sawyer - some of the looks on his face are priceless. This one is no exception. Loved the repeating lines and the way you told this tongue-in-cheek story in just two stanzas. Delightful.
Rose.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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I loved this wildly modified Triolet. Oh, the humiliation of it all. Poor Sawyer - some of the looks on his face are priceless. This one is no exception. Loved the repeating lines and the way you told this tongue-in-cheek story in just two stanzas. Delightful.
Rose.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Thank you so very much, Rose, for your generous sixth star and your wonderful comments :-) Brooke
Comment from tbacha58
though mama tries to pin the blame,
the fault is hers, it's clear to see.
T'was Mama who gelled up my hair,
then snapped me naked in the bath
Oh my God Brooke, what an outstanding poem with that grandchild of yours. Sawyer is so so cute here, what amazing expressions he has for each of his poems. WOW Sawyer, you do have a future my son, in photography, in everything. Love you, and love Granny`s poem. Hugs Terry xoxo
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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though mama tries to pin the blame,
the fault is hers, it's clear to see.
T'was Mama who gelled up my hair,
then snapped me naked in the bath
Oh my God Brooke, what an outstanding poem with that grandchild of yours. Sawyer is so so cute here, what amazing expressions he has for each of his poems. WOW Sawyer, you do have a future my son, in photography, in everything. Love you, and love Granny`s poem. Hugs Terry xoxo
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much, Terry, for your great comments :-) Brooke
Comment from evilynne
This is just too cute and funny! As always, your writing is a joy to read and Sawyer is a star in his own right. Very entertaining and funny.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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This is just too cute and funny! As always, your writing is a joy to read and Sawyer is a star in his own right. Very entertaining and funny.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Evi, thank you so very much for your laughter and for your supportive sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from Maureen's Pen
LOL Great laughs with this one Brooke. Ok so I happen to have pictures of my three munchkins with similar hair at bath time.:) This poem's funny and full of great expressive points which remind me of the joys when the kids were so much smaller than they are now!!
"Wildly modified" - LOL should I say " I didn't care" cause I loved it just as it was.
So un-poetic of me I know. Skillfully you share your ink -and I enjoy it each time.
Thanks for the smiles my friend.
Maureen
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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LOL Great laughs with this one Brooke. Ok so I happen to have pictures of my three munchkins with similar hair at bath time.:) This poem's funny and full of great expressive points which remind me of the joys when the kids were so much smaller than they are now!!
"Wildly modified" - LOL should I say " I didn't care" cause I loved it just as it was.
So un-poetic of me I know. Skillfully you share your ink -and I enjoy it each time.
Thanks for the smiles my friend.
Maureen
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much, Maureen - so happy you can identify with this one :-) Brooke
Comment from krys123
Brooke;
When I showed this to my wife we both laughed hilariously and read printed it out and put it on our refrigerator. You have some keen and witty imagination in writing this very inventive and superbly creative piece of poetry.
Technically a rhyming was done exceptionally well and neither of your rhyming was forced nor labored while your rhythm flowed so smoothly throughout your poem because of the meter and tempo was so rich.
Thank you so much for sharing and posting this where everyone to read and may the Lord be with you in yours always my friend.
Alex
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Brooke;
When I showed this to my wife we both laughed hilariously and read printed it out and put it on our refrigerator. You have some keen and witty imagination in writing this very inventive and superbly creative piece of poetry.
Technically a rhyming was done exceptionally well and neither of your rhyming was forced nor labored while your rhythm flowed so smoothly throughout your poem because of the meter and tempo was so rich.
Thank you so much for sharing and posting this where everyone to read and may the Lord be with you in yours always my friend.
Alex
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Alex, I'm so glad you and your wife both found this entertaining :-) Thanks so much. Brooke
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You are so sincerely welcome Brooke,
We'll enjoy it for while.
Alex
Comment from mermaids
Excellent use of words and flow of lines that well describes Sawyer's viewpoint of his bath. The gelling of his hair makes me laugh and is so humorous. This is a funny poem that cheers up my day.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Excellent use of words and flow of lines that well describes Sawyer's viewpoint of his bath. The gelling of his hair makes me laugh and is so humorous. This is a funny poem that cheers up my day.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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So glad this gave you a laugh, Elaine :-) Thank you! Brooke
Comment from Tonulak
Dear Brooke,
You know what I used to hate? When we went to church when I was very little, if I had a smudge on my face, my mom would lick her handkerchief and wipe it off. I always thought that was disting. Just giving some solidarity to Sawyer. I think you captured that thing that kids have; nothing is ever their fault:) Great poem which reminded me of my own childhood--Ted
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Dear Brooke,
You know what I used to hate? When we went to church when I was very little, if I had a smudge on my face, my mom would lick her handkerchief and wipe it off. I always thought that was disting. Just giving some solidarity to Sawyer. I think you captured that thing that kids have; nothing is ever their fault:) Great poem which reminded me of my own childhood--Ted
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Ted, thank you :-) I've seen mothers do that, and yes, yuck!! :-) Brooke
Comment from Pyrrho
A pleasant read Adewpearl, confirming your mastery of rhyme and meter. As for your author-note: I believe the primrose path implies that the once led down it gets seduced.
A most entertaining poem titled The Persian Pussy of Pedigree Fame is about a female cat being led down the Primrose Path, and later when her kittens ask about their father, she explains that their daddy was a traveling man.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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A pleasant read Adewpearl, confirming your mastery of rhyme and meter. As for your author-note: I believe the primrose path implies that the once led down it gets seduced.
A most entertaining poem titled The Persian Pussy of Pedigree Fame is about a female cat being led down the Primrose Path, and later when her kittens ask about their father, she explains that their daddy was a traveling man.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Thank you for your thoughtful feedback, Pyrrho :-) Brooke
