Writings From the Heart
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Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
WW1, What a long time ago. My grandfather did fight in that war. I don't know the details of his experience. This is a well written poem with much feeling. My only suggestion is that:
Thoughts of love was left behind, should read 'Thoughts of love was left behind, Was should be were if you leave this is the past tense.
As the rest of the poem is present tense, I would change to "Leaving thoughts of love behind".
Thanks for thinking of those who fought for our country so very long ago~Debbie
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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WW1, What a long time ago. My grandfather did fight in that war. I don't know the details of his experience. This is a well written poem with much feeling. My only suggestion is that:
Thoughts of love was left behind, should read 'Thoughts of love was left behind, Was should be were if you leave this is the past tense.
As the rest of the poem is present tense, I would change to "Leaving thoughts of love behind".
Thanks for thinking of those who fought for our country so very long ago~Debbie
Comment Written 25-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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Thanks
Comment from BunnyS
Beautifully written! Though it is about WWI, I feel that it would represent the grimness of any war and the lives that have been stolen in other countries. Great job!
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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Beautifully written! Though it is about WWI, I feel that it would represent the grimness of any war and the lives that have been stolen in other countries. Great job!
Comment Written 25-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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Thanks
Comment from Ric Myworld
Wars and more wars have been our history since the beginning of time, and most have been fought for differences in politics and religion, without the willingness to compromise, and a waste of faith and perception. Thanks for another enjoyable poem. :-)
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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Wars and more wars have been our history since the beginning of time, and most have been fought for differences in politics and religion, without the willingness to compromise, and a waste of faith and perception. Thanks for another enjoyable poem. :-)
Comment Written 25-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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thank you Ric
Comment from Dean Kuch
The Battles of Ypres, 1914, 1915, 1917, The Battles of the Marne, 1914, 1918, The Battle of Verdun, 1916, and The Battle of the Somme, in 1916, are just some of the major battles these brave men from England, France, The United States, Austria, Germany and Turkey, fought during WWI. Labeled the bloodiest war in history, it marked the mechanization of warfare, introducing the battle tank, machine gun, and many other forms of mass destruction. It was the first time chemical weapons, such as mustard gas, were used on such a wide scale.
Your poem quite aptly conveys the thoughts, feelings and emotions that men on both sides might have been pondering while embedded within their muddy trenches.
Well done. GW.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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The Battles of Ypres, 1914, 1915, 1917, The Battles of the Marne, 1914, 1918, The Battle of Verdun, 1916, and The Battle of the Somme, in 1916, are just some of the major battles these brave men from England, France, The United States, Austria, Germany and Turkey, fought during WWI. Labeled the bloodiest war in history, it marked the mechanization of warfare, introducing the battle tank, machine gun, and many other forms of mass destruction. It was the first time chemical weapons, such as mustard gas, were used on such a wide scale.
Your poem quite aptly conveys the thoughts, feelings and emotions that men on both sides might have been pondering while embedded within their muddy trenches.
Well done. GW.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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thank you Dean love the show you have here
Gary
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I love good rhyming and style, and you certainly came through in this poem, GW. It was superb! Had I a six star review left, it would have been yours.
Comment from dragonpoet
Good marching song rhythm for this poem of war. This gives good images through its simple rhymes. It tells of the thoughts or the fighting soldiers.
The picture of the church gives a feeling of loneliness and memory of dead fighters.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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Good marching song rhythm for this poem of war. This gives good images through its simple rhymes. It tells of the thoughts or the fighting soldiers.
The picture of the church gives a feeling of loneliness and memory of dead fighters.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 25-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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thank you I will
Gary
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You're welcome. Good to hear.
Joan
Comment from kiwijenny
This gave me chills and I wish I had a six for it .....well done...fixed bayonets ...preparing to die.....horrendous what our forebears had to bear....well deserving of ribbons
God bless
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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This gave me chills and I wish I had a six for it .....well done...fixed bayonets ...preparing to die.....horrendous what our forebears had to bear....well deserving of ribbons
God bless
Comment Written 25-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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thank you for reading
Comment from Bobby Jo
This is powerful words to a powerful poem. I feel the emotion and pride and love in this, ready for war. To do what has to be done.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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This is powerful words to a powerful poem. I feel the emotion and pride and love in this, ready for war. To do what has to be done.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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thank you Bobby Jo
Comment from TAB_that's me
This is a well written poem of war. It has a nice smooth flow and does not seem forced. The war to end all wars - if only.
Teresa
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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This is a well written poem of war. It has a nice smooth flow and does not seem forced. The war to end all wars - if only.
Teresa
Comment Written 25-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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thank you Teresa
Comment from dtimes3
Short and to the point. Solid statement of the history involved. Strong images written in a flowing style. In the last line I would omit "We are". The line would then carry the same rhythm as line six and would read a little smoother.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2010
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Short and to the point. Solid statement of the history involved. Strong images written in a flowing style. In the last line I would omit "We are". The line would then carry the same rhythm as line six and would read a little smoother.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2010
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thanks for the review
Comment from DeRoseJ
Great poem. You have captured a forgotten time within this short work and that is hard to do, especially since the second war gets all the noteriety. Probably because of all the footage. Great job with ths. I am impressed.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2010
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Great poem. You have captured a forgotten time within this short work and that is hard to do, especially since the second war gets all the noteriety. Probably because of all the footage. Great job with ths. I am impressed.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2010
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thank you for your welcome review and comments DeRose Gary
