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Rejoice: Christmas Poetry

Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "The Staunch Tin Soldier"
Christmas poems in various formats.

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Comment from laurelp
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This was a delightful romantic poem of opposites that meet, then not sure of her, she comes forth and stays. I really enjoyed the read. It wasn't until I had finished it did I realize who had wrote it. Beautifully done. It was a quite lovely to read.

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2009

reply by the author on 19-Dec-2009
    Thank you, Laurel. I'm pleased you enjoyed it :-) Brooke
Comment from verdesam
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The rhyme scheme is consistent, and the meter works (though, when read aloud, sounded forced/awkward in places - 1st stanza, lines 1 & 2, for example); however, the poem progressed so well, it was easily negated. A sweet little subject/message is delivered in this poem's narrative, and its sentiment is appreciated for the season.

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2009

reply by the author on 19-Dec-2009
    I just read it aloud to myself again and it flowed for me, but there is always the chance that others pronounce or accent words differently. Thanks so much for your thoughtful comments. Brooke :-)
Comment from AnnaLinda
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adewpearl,

You have quite an imagination! Your ottava rima shares a fantasy tale with excellent rhymes and vivid imagery. A fairy and a tin soldier ornament coming to life and falling love.

I always enjoy a happy ending:

"that Christmas day when wishes all came true
as his sweet fairy whispered, "I love you."

Linda

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2009

reply by the author on 19-Dec-2009
    Thank you, Linda. I appreciate your kind comments. Brooke :-)
reply by AnnaLinda on 19-Dec-2009
    You are welcome!
Comment from bayoupoet
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This is such a sweet and well written poem for Christmas. You had perfect rhyme without forcing it. It flowed smoothly and was a very enjoyable read. There is nothing like a little romance on the Christmas tree. I didn't see any changes that were needed!
sandra

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2009

reply by the author on 19-Dec-2009
    Thank you, Sandra. I'm so glad you enjoyed :-) Brooke
reply by bayoupoet on 20-Dec-2009
    You are very welcome! sandra
Comment from Adri7enne
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Aw, so cute! Wish I had me a tin soldier for Christmas. You too, I bet. Yeah, I know, a Sean Connery look alike who would wake up and say. "Merry Christmas, Schweetheart!" LOL!
Loved your little tale. You're very entertaining, you know. In a very rhythmic kind of way. LOL!

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2009

reply by the author on 19-Dec-2009
    Thank you, Adrienne. Don't go teasing me with Sean Connery possibilities! LOL Brooke :-)
Comment from Joan E.
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You're outdoing yourself again with two verses--I still haven't try a one verse version! I enjoyed your Cinderella story with a male protagonist. Your personification of the ornaments and your rhymes were delightful.

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2009

reply by the author on 19-Dec-2009
    Thank you, Joan - I woke up this morning with this idea in my head.
    Glad you enjoyed :-) Brooke
reply by Joan E. on 19-Dec-2009
    I love it when I wake up to a poem that apparently has been percolating in my dream state. Thanks for sharing your experience.
Comment from percival86jack
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Again Brooke, if I had six! I know I keep promising... again this one surely deserves the top prize. I absolutely loved this fanciful Christmas love story.
I'm all teary eyed... :)
Cheers and happy fairy thoughts! LOL... Jack xoxox

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2009

reply by the author on 19-Dec-2009
    Jack, you are a true sweetie!! :-) Brooke
Comment from RebelRose
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What a sweet fantasy-type poem this is. You never know what miracles will take place on Christmas Day. Your rhyming scheme is very good and the lines flow smoothly.

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2009

reply by the author on 19-Dec-2009
    Thank you, Rose - I appreciate your kind comments :-) Brooke
Comment from Nanette Mary
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Hullo Brooke ...

I enjoyed reading about this little Christmas Tree
romance but your picture is of Teddy Bears sharing an embrace!
There is nothing to suggest changing and I thank you for sharing this with us.
With love from .... Nanette Mary.

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2009

reply by the author on 19-Dec-2009
    Nanette Mary - I could not find a suitable illustration on Fan Art no matter how hard I looked - this is just as close as I could come. LOL Thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from poetknowit
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I really like this although I was heretofore unfamiliar with this poetic form.

You did a good job of creating emotional images which the reader can acutely feel.

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2009

reply by the author on 19-Dec-2009
    The ottava rima form is particularly good for storytelling - so glad you enjoyed :-) Brooke