The Kyrielle
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Creation Sings the Melody"kyrielle poems
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Comment from words
You used the complex form well.
Loved the subject matter. Linking all that is to creation and, of course, ourselves and our own creations.
Especially liked your ending stanza:When I'm inspired by life's sweet song
to lift my voice in harmony,
I know with each note sung along,
creation sings the melody.
Yes, creation's primal force does flow through us when we write.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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You used the complex form well.
Loved the subject matter. Linking all that is to creation and, of course, ourselves and our own creations.
Especially liked your ending stanza:When I'm inspired by life's sweet song
to lift my voice in harmony,
I know with each note sung along,
creation sings the melody.
Yes, creation's primal force does flow through us when we write.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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Thank you - I love repeating forms but had never tried the kyrielle before - the form just invites good writing, I believe :-) Brooke
Comment from Sasha
I read the rules several times and 'think' I have them figured out. I got a little confused with the rhyme scheme but you being a pro I have no doubt you'll walk me through it. The repeated line 'creation sings the melody' is superb and is perfect for each stanza you wrote. You really created a beautiful mental picture of "Creation Singing the Melody". This is lovely. I wish you all the best in this contest.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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I read the rules several times and 'think' I have them figured out. I got a little confused with the rhyme scheme but you being a pro I have no doubt you'll walk me through it. The repeated line 'creation sings the melody' is superb and is perfect for each stanza you wrote. You really created a beautiful mental picture of "Creation Singing the Melody". This is lovely. I wish you all the best in this contest.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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Thanks, Valerie - rules always sound confusing the first time around. LOL There are forms people have used on this site that I have still not tried because the rules give me a headache. :-) I appreciate your kind comments. Brooke :-)
Comment from Penpal
Hello Brooke,
This is a lovely form of poetry, and I especially liked the upbeat feel and mood portrayed with the repetition of,"creation sings the melody." Then the last stanza which is personalized. Very capturing, and powerful. It sings with its awesome message of life.
Pen
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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Hello Brooke,
This is a lovely form of poetry, and I especially liked the upbeat feel and mood portrayed with the repetition of,"creation sings the melody." Then the last stanza which is personalized. Very capturing, and powerful. It sings with its awesome message of life.
Pen
Comment Written 17-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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Pen, thank you! I have never written in this form before, but already I love it :-) Brooke
Comment from S.Yocom
What a nice poem, Brooke! You do well with every style of poetry that you try, and this one is no exception. Your rhymes and meter are spot on, and I love the repeated line.
Sally
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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What a nice poem, Brooke! You do well with every style of poetry that you try, and this one is no exception. Your rhymes and meter are spot on, and I love the repeated line.
Sally
Comment Written 17-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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Thank you, Sally - it's my first kyrielle, and I already love the form :-) Brooke
Comment from rama devi
Lovely and melodious write, Brooke. I love the slant rhyme of meadowlark and sparked. Nice alliteration of B in stanza three and S in stanza four. Your words choices create melodic cadence and the rhymes act like harmony to those phrases. :)
A musical feast.
Yummy.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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Lovely and melodious write, Brooke. I love the slant rhyme of meadowlark and sparked. Nice alliteration of B in stanza three and S in stanza four. Your words choices create melodic cadence and the rhymes act like harmony to those phrases. :)
A musical feast.
Yummy.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 17-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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Yummy - now there is one great comment!!! :-) Thanks so much, rama devi! After one kyrielle, I'm now hooked on the form :-) Brooke
Comment from ylime
This is a lovely poem :)
The meaning of it is so, meaningful. I just get it. I have no clue why I do. I've never heard of Kyrielle before, but I now want to write one.
The repitition of 'creation sings the melody' just pulls everthing together. Beautiful!
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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This is a lovely poem :)
The meaning of it is so, meaningful. I just get it. I have no clue why I do. I've never heard of Kyrielle before, but I now want to write one.
The repitition of 'creation sings the melody' just pulls everthing together. Beautiful!
Comment Written 17-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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It's an extremely old form of poetry but the first time I've ever written one - give it a try!!! Thanks so much, Emily :-) Brooke
Comment from EllieKaye
It does indeed feel as if it has a long ago origin. I mean, after you mentioned the form is from the Middle Ages, I thought that was true to how it sounds. I'm sure that's because I'm hearing the beat. (NOT because the poem feels old! LOL)
Once again, a lovely piece.
My favorite stanza is here:
When sonorous, pulsating waves
like drumbeats born upon the sea
come crashing to their rocky graves,
creation sings the melody
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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It does indeed feel as if it has a long ago origin. I mean, after you mentioned the form is from the Middle Ages, I thought that was true to how it sounds. I'm sure that's because I'm hearing the beat. (NOT because the poem feels old! LOL)
Once again, a lovely piece.
My favorite stanza is here:
When sonorous, pulsating waves
like drumbeats born upon the sea
come crashing to their rocky graves,
creation sings the melody
Comment Written 17-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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Thank you, Ellie - hey, I don't care if my poems do sound old since I love old poems so much!!!! LOL You're a sweetie. :-) Brooke
Comment from Jarlsbane
What a great poem... love the Kyrielle form as I do most of the classical forms... this is beautiful brooke... well done! --Michael
ps - I read a review you did for another writer in which you referenced my poetry and said some wonderful things about me...Thank you for the unbelievably kind words!! You're a gem!
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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What a great poem... love the Kyrielle form as I do most of the classical forms... this is beautiful brooke... well done! --Michael
ps - I read a review you did for another writer in which you referenced my poetry and said some wonderful things about me...Thank you for the unbelievably kind words!! You're a gem!
Comment Written 17-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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Kat is a lovely lady, and the second she started her dragon book and told me she loves dragons, I knew she had to read your dragon haiku. Telling her about you was a gift to her :-) I'm so glad you like this kyrielle, my first attempt at the form. I love repeating forms - they sound so glorious. Thank you, Michael. Brooke :-)
Comment from Colette
Last shall be first! your choice of colour and picture pure elegance! I have never
heard of kyrielle form, but as I said earlier Brooke, that would not be difficult to
believe. As I read the words I could hear the melody, it flowed like a gentle river. The meaning in those words spoke to me and had great meaning but the last stanza is the one I now listen to and will follow. Thanks for the pleasure
your poetry give me, yours in friendship, Colette.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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Last shall be first! your choice of colour and picture pure elegance! I have never
heard of kyrielle form, but as I said earlier Brooke, that would not be difficult to
believe. As I read the words I could hear the melody, it flowed like a gentle river. The meaning in those words spoke to me and had great meaning but the last stanza is the one I now listen to and will follow. Thanks for the pleasure
your poetry give me, yours in friendship, Colette.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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Thank you so much, Colette - this is my first kyrielle, so it is lovely to hear you think it has a good flow to it as I believe all repeating forms should flow. I'm so glad the poem spoke to you since I really felt this one in my heart as I was writing it. I so appreciate your encouraging comments. Brooke :-)
Comment from blondiedots
What a beautiful uplifting poem - makes you want to throw out your arms to all of creation! The rhyme flows beautifully -like a ballet- (perfect choice of artwork) In perfect accord with syllable count and a/b/a/B rhyme scheme. Exquisite imagery -
When sonorous, pulsating waves
like drumbeats born upon the sea
come crashing to their rocky graves,
creation sings the melody
I can just feel the drama and hear the thunder!
Bravo and Blessings to you once again!
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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What a beautiful uplifting poem - makes you want to throw out your arms to all of creation! The rhyme flows beautifully -like a ballet- (perfect choice of artwork) In perfect accord with syllable count and a/b/a/B rhyme scheme. Exquisite imagery -
When sonorous, pulsating waves
like drumbeats born upon the sea
come crashing to their rocky graves,
creation sings the melody
I can just feel the drama and hear the thunder!
Bravo and Blessings to you once again!
Comment Written 17-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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Thank you for your warm and friendly review - I really appreciate your thoughtfulness :-) Brooke
