A Breeze Swept Through
A Quatern126 total reviews
Comment from 9999pool
The breeze that did not become the wind. Everything around is dancing - the leaves, the reeds and even the grasses perhaps. But the oak tree remained steadfast and did not move. Even though at times the masses may move in one direction - not everyone will be in the same mood.
There are the left and the right wing. Depending on which side of the fence we are on, life will tell us which direction to take in the right direction - not necessarily that of the masses, smiles. :))
Excellent write and well expressed. Bravo!
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie. :))
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
The breeze that did not become the wind. Everything around is dancing - the leaves, the reeds and even the grasses perhaps. But the oak tree remained steadfast and did not move. Even though at times the masses may move in one direction - not everyone will be in the same mood.
There are the left and the right wing. Depending on which side of the fence we are on, life will tell us which direction to take in the right direction - not necessarily that of the masses, smiles. :))
Excellent write and well expressed. Bravo!
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie. :))
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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How good to see you, Ritchie :-) Thanks so much, my friend :-) Brooke
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Welcome, Brooke. I am only here on/off so my apologies for being unable to review some of the great works.
Keep smiling and take care.
Cheerio, hugs, Richie. :))
Comment from krys123
Brooke;
A stunning photo it really is and if fit and complements your writing very much and so does your rhythm and rhyming.
A rhythm that flows smoothly throughout your writing and rhyming that is neither forced nor labored And a rhyming that helps with the rhythmic flow of your poem.
Not only is it a stunning photo but a very stunning descriptions and more than adequate expressions that seemed to make the reader actually be at the where abouts that this is taking place: "The oak stayed steady, strong and still against a breeze that lacked wind's will--...".
My first impressions were after reading this was that your imagination is truly creative and ingeniously inventive throughout your writing.
Thank you so much for sharing and posting this for everyone to read and may the stars shine bright in your way through your darkest of times.
Alex
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
Brooke;
A stunning photo it really is and if fit and complements your writing very much and so does your rhythm and rhyming.
A rhythm that flows smoothly throughout your writing and rhyming that is neither forced nor labored And a rhyming that helps with the rhythmic flow of your poem.
Not only is it a stunning photo but a very stunning descriptions and more than adequate expressions that seemed to make the reader actually be at the where abouts that this is taking place: "The oak stayed steady, strong and still against a breeze that lacked wind's will--...".
My first impressions were after reading this was that your imagination is truly creative and ingeniously inventive throughout your writing.
Thank you so much for sharing and posting this for everyone to read and may the stars shine bright in your way through your darkest of times.
Alex
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Alex, thank you so much for this gracious and thoughtful review :-) Brooke
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You are so sincerely welcomed Brooke.
Alex
Comment from acerisestory
Lovely, Brooke! I read some of the other reviews to find out what type of poem yours is -- with the repeating lines. A quatern! I will have to give it a try. I know it has to be quite difficult, but you make it appear easy.
I read the poem out loud and loved the flow. You used alliteration with breeze/brushed; languid/leaf; stirred/steady; shift/stance; stayed/steady; strong/still; winds/will. I don't think I'll enumerate them the next time I review one of your poems!!
The image is a perfect enhancement. Thank you, Brooke, for yet another fabulous poem. If only I had a six! Alana
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
Lovely, Brooke! I read some of the other reviews to find out what type of poem yours is -- with the repeating lines. A quatern! I will have to give it a try. I know it has to be quite difficult, but you make it appear easy.
I read the poem out loud and loved the flow. You used alliteration with breeze/brushed; languid/leaf; stirred/steady; shift/stance; stayed/steady; strong/still; winds/will. I don't think I'll enumerate them the next time I review one of your poems!!
The image is a perfect enhancement. Thank you, Brooke, for yet another fabulous poem. If only I had a six! Alana
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Alana, the quatern is one of my favorite forms because of that repeating/descending line. If you try one, you're allowed to use other rhyme schemes - couplets are not required. Thanks so much for your review :-) Brooke
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You are welcome, Brooke! Thanks for the info. Alana
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Love the alliteration of "languid leaf" and the consonance in "steady oak stood undeterred".
Favorite line is "to partner with the leaves in dance"... only part of the tree dances, while the wood stands and watches. Like a girl's hair blowing in the breeze, but she doesn't move. Cool. :)
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
Love the alliteration of "languid leaf" and the consonance in "steady oak stood undeterred".
Favorite line is "to partner with the leaves in dance"... only part of the tree dances, while the wood stands and watches. Like a girl's hair blowing in the breeze, but she doesn't move. Cool. :)
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much, my thoughtful friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Leineco
Ahhhh. . .to just be
just accept
the course of wind
and time and spin.
We forget sometimes
as poets
that life is made up of moments,
that do not require
soaring aria -
but rather
sotto voce
humming.
Beautiful write :-)
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
Ahhhh. . .to just be
just accept
the course of wind
and time and spin.
We forget sometimes
as poets
that life is made up of moments,
that do not require
soaring aria -
but rather
sotto voce
humming.
Beautiful write :-)
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much, Leineco :-) Brooke
Comment from Fridayauthor
A beautiful that is so easy to read, at first reading. It simply floats along with a wonderful choice of words. I love,...to partner with the leaves in dance...
Thank you for a lovely poem.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
A beautiful that is so easy to read, at first reading. It simply floats along with a wonderful choice of words. I love,...to partner with the leaves in dance...
Thank you for a lovely poem.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Fridayauthor, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from elainec4
adewpearl,
How lovely this work is! It displays all the elements that good poetry should. I always read, then re-read your work to analyze your form and techniques. I wonder how you manage to write day after day--and not go stale!! Thanks for sharing! elaine
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
adewpearl,
How lovely this work is! It displays all the elements that good poetry should. I always read, then re-read your work to analyze your form and techniques. I wonder how you manage to write day after day--and not go stale!! Thanks for sharing! elaine
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Elaine, thank you so much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Oatmeal
adewpearl,
The poem is very descriptive and created impressions that are very vivid and understandable. The theme was very complimentary. The artwork wonderful.
There was nothing wrong that I could tell.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
adewpearl,
The poem is very descriptive and created impressions that are very vivid and understandable. The theme was very complimentary. The artwork wonderful.
There was nothing wrong that I could tell.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much, Oatmeal :-) Brooke
Comment from Joan E.
Thanks for the bonus of the new photograph on your profile page of Sawyer reclining on the steps--he makes a cheery, welcome mat. I enjoyed your rhymes, alliteration and repeat in this Quatern and was taken by your philosophical turn in the final stanza. Peace- Joan
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
Thanks for the bonus of the new photograph on your profile page of Sawyer reclining on the steps--he makes a cheery, welcome mat. I enjoyed your rhymes, alliteration and repeat in this Quatern and was taken by your philosophical turn in the final stanza. Peace- Joan
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much, Joan - that photo is adorable, isn't it? Brooke
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He is so cuddly! -J
Comment from RGstar
This was beautifully written. Good usage of the Oak, leaves and nature. This is a worthy six, alas I have none but surely would have given. Beautiful imagery with a touch of silk.
Perhaps one line I thought was not as strong as the others..just can't put my finger on it...more about configuration...
''Not all is war designed to win''
...yet, it changes little.
Very well done,
RGstar
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
This was beautifully written. Good usage of the Oak, leaves and nature. This is a worthy six, alas I have none but surely would have given. Beautiful imagery with a touch of silk.
Perhaps one line I thought was not as strong as the others..just can't put my finger on it...more about configuration...
''Not all is war designed to win''
...yet, it changes little.
Very well done,
RGstar
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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RG, thank you so much for your thoughtful feedback :-) Brooke