I Wandered the Desert
rhyming quatrains in 6/5/6/5140 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
There certainly is a deep message in this brief but meaningful poem. Dreams get fulfilled faster when we wake up and work. Happy day!
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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There certainly is a deep message in this brief but meaningful poem. Dreams get fulfilled faster when we wake up and work. Happy day!
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Bill, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from nomi338
Awesome! This is actually a pretty poem. This poem is so pretty that I am forced to smile and hum as I read it. You should know that I am going to read it many times in days to come. I love this poem. You really made me jealous with this one.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Awesome! This is actually a pretty poem. This poem is so pretty that I am forced to smile and hum as I read it. You should know that I am going to read it many times in days to come. I love this poem. You really made me jealous with this one.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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nomi, thank you so very much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from lancellot
This is simply profound. I love the different aspects as the narrator searched for meaning, but was always disappointed, and in the end learned that it take more than praying. Well done.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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This is simply profound. I love the different aspects as the narrator searched for meaning, but was always disappointed, and in the end learned that it take more than praying. Well done.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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lancellot, thank you so much for your generous response to to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Dom G Robles
I was amused with the tone--rhyme and rhythm and the picture
and the poem under a red background. Also, the
scene presented--the desert, the valley, and the garden, and lastly, the figure of speech at the end. All appeared to me like a beautiful rose before my eyes and (under my nose). Congratulations.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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I was amused with the tone--rhyme and rhythm and the picture
and the poem under a red background. Also, the
scene presented--the desert, the valley, and the garden, and lastly, the figure of speech at the end. All appeared to me like a beautiful rose before my eyes and (under my nose). Congratulations.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Dom, thank you so much :-) I appreciate your generous and thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Brooke, I'm giving you a virtual prize for the most unique ideas... Your poems are always a surprise and always so surprisingly pleasant. This was wonderful, Giddy
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Brooke, I'm giving you a virtual prize for the most unique ideas... Your poems are always a surprise and always so surprisingly pleasant. This was wonderful, Giddy
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much, Giddy :-) Brooke
Comment from Leineco
I laid out a garden
but scattered no seeds,
The heart of this poem lies in this couplet - faith is so much more than belief. It requires "action" - - - not just prayer. It requires knowing the landscape - and what to expect; it requires climbing past peaks of doubt and darkness, into the light; it requires giving not taking.
You have written a subtly powerful , easy going - simple to understand and relate to poem about the true path of faith that must be forged.
Very nicer done :-)
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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I laid out a garden
but scattered no seeds,
The heart of this poem lies in this couplet - faith is so much more than belief. It requires "action" - - - not just prayer. It requires knowing the landscape - and what to expect; it requires climbing past peaks of doubt and darkness, into the light; it requires giving not taking.
You have written a subtly powerful , easy going - simple to understand and relate to poem about the true path of faith that must be forged.
Very nicer done :-)
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much, Leineco, for your most insightful reading of this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from LovnPeace
Hum, hardly know what to say to this. It is well written as always with your work, but I'm not used to a negative poem from you. I like your uplifting ones more. Blessings. Barbara
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Hum, hardly know what to say to this. It is well written as always with your work, but I'm not used to a negative poem from you. I like your uplifting ones more. Blessings. Barbara
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Barbara, thank you so much :-) The point was not to be negative but to ask people to realize that you can't use prayer as a substitute for action. God isn't going to create a garden for a person who doesn't plant the seeds herself first :-) Brooke
Comment from L.M.Mullins
Very nice faith poetry contest entry. The 6/5/6/5 flows great and your choice of rhymes makes for an easy read with a fast pace. Very nice write.
L.M.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Very nice faith poetry contest entry. The 6/5/6/5 flows great and your choice of rhymes makes for an easy read with a fast pace. Very nice write.
L.M.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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L.M., thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I only had time to review a few posts tonight, but I made sure one of them was your poem. You are so good, I just had to read you. It was GREAT!!!!
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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I only had time to review a few posts tonight, but I made sure one of them was your poem. You are so good, I just had to read you. It was GREAT!!!!
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Barbara, thank you so much :-) I so appreciate you, my friend.
In thanks for the sixth star - a funny story.
Sawyer picks up Miranda's colorful phrases - he doesn't repeat them at the time but uses them a day or two later when the appropriate occasion arises. So this morning, he picked his nose, held out the booger toward his mother and explained - Yuckerooni, wipe! LOL Brooke
Comment from ArtGal
Brooke, love, love this beautiful poem, and you always have a great message in what you write. When I read the end, "perhaps what I needed was more than a prayer", I immediately thought of the Cross and our salvation. Probably because my thoughts are still about Easter. I don't have to tell you how much I enjoyed this, but I will once more, lol. . .Sharon
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Brooke, love, love this beautiful poem, and you always have a great message in what you write. When I read the end, "perhaps what I needed was more than a prayer", I immediately thought of the Cross and our salvation. Probably because my thoughts are still about Easter. I don't have to tell you how much I enjoyed this, but I will once more, lol. . .Sharon
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Thank you, Sharon, for your kind review :-) Brooke
