Savannah Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Chapter 5, part 2"Can a fallen confederate soldier encourage love?
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Comment from elgone
Cash offers Paige both keys to the new locks, but she lets him keep one, with the excuse he might need to get inside to do work. It is a sign she trusts him, even though she had a problem with him having a key before. And, yet Cash is a little jealous, I think but more so that he's envious of the attention she pays to anyone else. He enjoys being with her.
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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2012
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Cash offers Paige both keys to the new locks, but she lets him keep one, with the excuse he might need to get inside to do work. It is a sign she trusts him, even though she had a problem with him having a key before. And, yet Cash is a little jealous, I think but more so that he's envious of the attention she pays to anyone else. He enjoys being with her.
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Comment Written 21-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2012
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I think Cash and Paige are playing cat and mouse games, not sure. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from adewpearl
You don't work on Saturday's - drop the apostrophe
It wasn't long before, Cash - drop the coma
where do you want it setup - set up
Come on, Maurice - add comma for direct address
Which part do you want TO take part in - I added TO
Excellent dialogue that conveys the emotions and attitudes of the characters. It really is easy to tell what/whom Cash disapproves of. LOL :-) Brooke
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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2012
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You don't work on Saturday's - drop the apostrophe
It wasn't long before, Cash - drop the coma
where do you want it setup - set up
Come on, Maurice - add comma for direct address
Which part do you want TO take part in - I added TO
Excellent dialogue that conveys the emotions and attitudes of the characters. It really is easy to tell what/whom Cash disapproves of. LOL :-) Brooke
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Comment Written 21-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2012
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Thank you for the eagle eye. I am beginning to wonder if I will ever get those commas straight. I appreciate the help.
Comment from c_lucas
Is mentioning Maurice fingernail polish preference a subtle hint. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2012
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Is mentioning Maurice fingernail polish preference a subtle hint. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2012
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I don't know for sure. We will have to wait and see. Thank you for the encouragement with my writing.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie
